On a Different Note - Part 1 Nonfiction
I must be in editing mode (and suffering from insomnia). Poor writing is popping up everywhere these days.
Nonfiction and the wth sentence that's just tacked on:
"Early detection helps many athletes with diabetes enjoy rigorous training."
If you really think about that sentence, it's missing some key information/correlation to make it a true statement. Do all athletes enjoy rigorous training...UNLESS they have diabetes? Does finding out they have diabetes make them enjoy training more? Should athletes with diabetes avoid rigorous training (which they really, really want to do) unless their disease was detected early? Say you're an athlete who doesn't train quite so rigorously, would finding out (early, mind you) that you have diabetes help you train more rigorously? And enjoy it, say, more than the not-so-rigorous things you did before? Hmmm?
Or, perhaps you are saying, "Yes, but this is out of context."
AH HA! I give you context:
"In its early stages, diabetes often goes unnoticed: You might feel thirstier and hungrier than usual, become tired and cranky, or have to make more trips to the bathroom. In fact, 7 million Americans have diabetes but don't know it. Early detection helps many athletes with diabetes enjoy rigorous training."
That's it. That's the end of the article (except for telling you when you should check for it - I highly recommend athletes do it NOW as this will seriously affect your ability to enjoy your rigorous training!)
Nonfiction and the wth sentence that's just tacked on:
"Early detection helps many athletes with diabetes enjoy rigorous training."
If you really think about that sentence, it's missing some key information/correlation to make it a true statement. Do all athletes enjoy rigorous training...UNLESS they have diabetes? Does finding out they have diabetes make them enjoy training more? Should athletes with diabetes avoid rigorous training (which they really, really want to do) unless their disease was detected early? Say you're an athlete who doesn't train quite so rigorously, would finding out (early, mind you) that you have diabetes help you train more rigorously? And enjoy it, say, more than the not-so-rigorous things you did before? Hmmm?
Or, perhaps you are saying, "Yes, but this is out of context."
AH HA! I give you context:
"In its early stages, diabetes often goes unnoticed: You might feel thirstier and hungrier than usual, become tired and cranky, or have to make more trips to the bathroom. In fact, 7 million Americans have diabetes but don't know it. Early detection helps many athletes with diabetes enjoy rigorous training."
That's it. That's the end of the article (except for telling you when you should check for it - I highly recommend athletes do it NOW as this will seriously affect your ability to enjoy your rigorous training!)