Savin/Mari Fic -- You Don't Wanna Know (Sequel to Firsts)

[alien_writings]

I don’t know long I stay in the bathroom, trying to collect myself. How -- I can’t believe I fucking cheated on Mari. Worse, I can’t believe how good it felt -- Christ, can I really blame Egan’s seduction powers for that? As much as I want to, I don’t think I can.

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[n3m3sis43]

It took me a few days to figure out what I wanted to say about this story. I know we had some conversations about this story arc and how to treat it sensitively and how that affects the "canon" of the AU. So I'm not gonna rehash all that but the main thing that stuck out to me was Savin's mom's response to finding out what happened. Savin's emotions are likely to be a lot more muddled but I feel like his mom might have a much stronger response than she does here. Granted, some parents would sort of shrug it off if they found out their child was sexually abused (guess how I know this). But it doesn't feel in character for me based on the canon for Savin's mom.

Savin's emotions felt pretty believable to me. The only part I questioned was whether he'd get hard thinking about it after. I'm not saying it's not correct, because teenage boys are weird and everyone processes things differently. So that'd be an Alicia question, I guess.

I thought you did really well with Savin's voice. Better than I do, probably. At the very least it seems more effortless for you. Oh, the envy.

[alien_writings]

You're right about Savin's mom's reaction, which, now that we've discussed this story arc, doesn't feel right.

I think you do as well as I do with Savin's voice (if you're not doing it better) -- you just don't see me being all "is this right? Is this right? Would he say that?" to Alicia when I'm writing him.