Dis and Dat...and some other stuff
Decided to take a shower after working on our Eurydice & Orpheus story. During the shower I had some editor thoughts that I decided to share with you. Aren't you just the lucky ones?
( Deep Editor Thoughts, Obtained While Getting Wet )
( Deep Editor Thoughts, Obtained While Getting Wet )
As for the descriptives, I remember one writer who used, "Gage had a long, lengthy body." Um, okay. He's tall. Maybe he's really tall (he wasn't) but "long lengthy" is just saying the same thing twice.
I have to chuckle--what I've seen a lot lately is like the yin and yang of bad descriptive writing. Example: a vampire sub I was looking at. The writer, in setting up the scene where the heroine walks into the vampire's expensively furnished condo, says, "Raven looked around the huge condo and realized that no expense had been spared in furnishing it. All the furniture matched and there were pictures by old artists on the walls." That's it. That's the entire description of a room where the hero and heroine make love on five separate occasions.
And then, in a huge swing from the silly sparseness of describing the surroundings: "Jared stared at the vision of beauty standing in front of him. Raven's hair was perfectly styled in the latest cut. She wore a deep blue sweater from the Gap and a black silk velvet micro-mini that screamed Valentino. Her green and pink spike heels announced to the world that they were Jimmy Choo and proud of it." Actually, there was three more paragraphs of Raven's clothing and accessories. My brain would bleed if I tried to replicate it here (and I've changed the name and the genre a bit to protect the unskilled innocent.)
Someday I'll do a post on description. It's definitely important--it can make or break my decision whether or not to buy.
hugs,
T
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