An alternate script
Sometimes people ask me about my writing process. It's not very interesting, actually- it just consists of sitting in front of my computer with a blank text editor file open, writing, deleting, and rearranging dialogue until I hit upon something I think is funny. Some days I get lucky and think of a comic in 30 seconds in the shower that morning, other days I spend five hours trying to get one panel's worth of dialogue to work. Most of the time it's somewhere inbetween those two extremes.
In many cases I'll finish a script and then change parts of it as I draw the comic. In some cases I'll finish a script and then immediately think of a different version of it, and then I have to decide which version to go with. Comic 1538 was one of those situations. Here's the original script I had written for it:
1
Hanners: What IS a "moustache ride" anyway?
Faye: Well see, back in the seventies it was really fashionable for men to have moustaches.
2
Dora: Faye, don't-
Faye: AND ESPECIALLY in the biker community. But motorcycle gangs had a bad reputation, and in order to improve their image, they started staging mass rallies to raise money for local charities.
Hence the term "moustache rides."
3
Hanners: So that shirt...
Faye: I'm guessing it was to celebrate how much money they raised at one of those events.
3.5
Hanners: Wow, I had no idea! Thanks for explaining, Faye!
Faye: No problem.
4
Dora: You realize she's going to be horrified when she goes home and looks up the phrase online.
Faye: Lemme borrow your laptop. I bet I can make a fake Wikipedia entry that'll last long enough to keep her oblivious.
It's funny, but it didn't seem true to Dora's character to just let Faye pull one over on Hannelore like that, so I changed it to the version you see in the finished comic. Anyway I have no idea if this was interesting/useful to anyone but people do sometimes wonder what my scripts look like, so uh there you go?
In many cases I'll finish a script and then change parts of it as I draw the comic. In some cases I'll finish a script and then immediately think of a different version of it, and then I have to decide which version to go with. Comic 1538 was one of those situations. Here's the original script I had written for it:
1
Hanners: What IS a "moustache ride" anyway?
Faye: Well see, back in the seventies it was really fashionable for men to have moustaches.
2
Dora: Faye, don't-
Faye: AND ESPECIALLY in the biker community. But motorcycle gangs had a bad reputation, and in order to improve their image, they started staging mass rallies to raise money for local charities.
Hence the term "moustache rides."
3
Hanners: So that shirt...
Faye: I'm guessing it was to celebrate how much money they raised at one of those events.
3.5
Hanners: Wow, I had no idea! Thanks for explaining, Faye!
Faye: No problem.
4
Dora: You realize she's going to be horrified when she goes home and looks up the phrase online.
Faye: Lemme borrow your laptop. I bet I can make a fake Wikipedia entry that'll last long enough to keep her oblivious.
It's funny, but it didn't seem true to Dora's character to just let Faye pull one over on Hannelore like that, so I changed it to the version you see in the finished comic. Anyway I have no idea if this was interesting/useful to anyone but people do sometimes wonder what my scripts look like, so uh there you go?