Very nicely done. While it makes me sad that she thinks so poorly of the boys, I can’t blame her, the way the evidence against them piles up. And I ache for her, because I can imagine how awful it’d be to lose your child, and then to think you’ve lost that child to someone you liked and trusted … it’s heartbreaking.
Favorite lines:
by far the most horrifying thing is that it almost smells like something cooking.
Wonderfully brutal detail.
Her girlfriends stop coming over after the new year breaks, and she’s both grateful and sorely distressed.
I like her mixed feelings here. That’s often how it goes when one’s grieving.
she can see his smile as she hands him the cranberry sauce when they had him over for Thanksgiving, and she can see his hand wrapped around her daughter’s hip so sweetly
Great details.
She feels her baby steps unravel like she pulled a loose thread.
I really like this analogy.
The crocuses are coming up, thick and purple like blood clots in the watery February light.
Awesome analogy.
And she's crying again, and she tells herself it's for the very last time.
Good ending line, with her hopefully finding some peace.
*laughs* Yeah, the cooking line gave me the "no, Pyrebi, don't write that" feeling--which is always a good sign, I find.
One reason I hope that it's not proved that Sam&Dean are alive again is so Mrs. Moore can believe they're dead and maybe start to rebuild her life. It's been a hellish three years for her. (Is it odd that I feel really sentimental towards a character in a situation that I crafted?)
Anyway, thank you so much for your lovely comment! I always immensely enjoy reading your thoughts!
Favorite lines:
by far the most horrifying thing is that it almost smells like something cooking.
Wonderfully brutal detail.
Her girlfriends stop coming over after the new year breaks, and she’s both grateful and sorely distressed.
I like her mixed feelings here. That’s often how it goes when one’s grieving.
she can see his smile as she hands him the cranberry sauce when they had him over for Thanksgiving, and she can see his hand wrapped around her daughter’s hip so sweetly
Great details.
She feels her baby steps unravel like she pulled a loose thread.
I really like this analogy.
The crocuses are coming up, thick and purple like blood clots in the watery February light.
Awesome analogy.
And she's crying again, and she tells herself it's for the very last time.
Good ending line, with her hopefully finding some peace.
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One reason I hope that it's not proved that Sam&Dean are alive again is so Mrs. Moore can believe they're dead and maybe start to rebuild her life. It's been a hellish three years for her. (Is it odd that I feel really sentimental towards a character in a situation that I crafted?)
Anyway, thank you so much for your lovely comment! I always immensely enjoy reading your thoughts!
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Not at all. :)
Anyway, thank you so much for your lovely comment! I always immensely enjoy reading your thoughts!
You're welcome, and thank you for giving me such a great story to read. :)
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