The vegemite made me do it

[dark_daebereth]

-Delurks with her first piece of fanfiction- I’m not entirely sure what I’m doing. They kidnapped a song I was using to write another piece, took my brain hostage, and then before I knew what was happening, sentences were being formed in my head.
Title: I Will Stay Forever Here With You
Rating: I have no idea how this system works, it’s a totally

Comments

[vericus]

*melt*

So sweet and angsty and awwwwwwww!

I love it to bitses!

[dark_daebereth]

-collects melted vericus and puts in fridge-

Thankyou so much!
Glad you liked, I honestly had no idea what I was writing. I think I'm still confused XD

[vericus]

Heh. That's how the best stories are made. When you just don't think about it and let yourself go, just writing what seems right, even if you don't know where it's going or even where its been.

*pokes her own angst-fic that started much the same way and is just continuing*

[dark_daebereth]

Truth that. I think it's mostly because I've never done fanfic before, the whole experience was slightly different to my normal writing.

They stole the song I was using and wouldn't give it back. And it's impossible to outmaneuver those two! They're like the ultimate sneak and plan and snurch duo.

Heh. Oh, god, don't give this one the knowledge that it could grow...

[yuuzaiden]

That's so beautifully sad and inspirational...
I love it!!!
I'm going to write right now... please... you can't just end it here...
there must be more!!!

[dark_daebereth]

Thankyou so much!
I'll certainly consider it, there was meant to be something about Jazz singing that never made it in there... XD

Oooh, can't wait to see what you're writing.

[rainlightautumn]

I really liked this! Very well written, and most definitely pulled on my heart strings. Poor Prowl. Poor Jazz. :( I like how it isn't just sad, but a little bittersweet as well. Because Jazz will be there...just not all the way there. I think that made it all the more heartbreaking.

I look forward to seeing more from you! :)

[dark_daebereth]

Thankyou so much. I'm glad you liked it.

But is he really here...? -quirks eyebrow- I quite possibly and completely accidentally made Prowl go insane.

[rainlightautumn]

You know, the thought occurred to me that he could have gone insane. Which, in some twisted way for me, makes it all the more bittersweet. Prowl has a semblance of his Jazz--but at what cost?

I love fics that make me think a little bit outside the surface of them. :D

[dark_daebereth]

When I was writing it, he was really there, it wasn't until afterwards that thought occured to me. Now, I have no idea, but I get the sinking feeling it's not going to leave me alone for a while XD

[delilahdraken]

That was beautiful and bittersweet. Even though it somehow made me think of Dracula (the Coppola version).

Anyway, I bow before your art.

[dark_daebereth]

Thankyou!

Dracula? Which bit? I've only seen that one once, my memory is a bit hazy.

[delilahdraken]

The bit about not even death being able to keep them apart for long.

There is this scene in the movie where the count already is near his castle and Van Helsing and cohorts are hunting him. In this scene you see Mina sleep and somehow Dracula is with her in the room and touching her face, even though he cannot be there.

I realize in your story this theme could be highly metaphoric, i.e. Prowl is halucinating, but still... the romance has this feeling of hopelessness coupled with happiness, as if we (the reader) are already knowing that it will end bad even though nothing like that happens in the story. It's like King Kong, inevitable but somehow denied reality.

And somehow this made more sense in my head. I apologize for the many movie metaphers.

[dark_daebereth]

Heh, worry not, my family has conversations in movie quotes (often from various movies, too). It gets hilarious watching other people looking at us in confusion.

I very vaguely remember that bit. That makes sense though.

Oh, and yes, that last bit makes perfect sense. I know what was 'really' happening when I wrote it, but going back and reading, I have no idea whether or not Prowl was actually hallucinating.

Thanks for taking the time to explain to me. Gives me something to ponder...

[norielit]

So, I'm watching The Haunting on Discovery Channel, only that show creeps me out, so I turn it off. I decide to go check and see what new stuff had popped up online, and the first thing I run across? This. A ghost story. Figures, right?

In all actuality though, I like this - a lot, at that. It's sad, yes, but it's also fluffy - Jazz will never leave Prowl again! Unfortunately, it makes me wonder if Prowl might actually be out of his processor... I hope not. They deserve happiness, dang it!

[dark_daebereth]

Um, sorry? Lol.

Thankyou. Yeah, that thought occurred to me -after- I wrote it, originally he was real. I agree, they deserve happiness, oh hell, normally I don't even like to see him stay dead, makes me wonder why my brain did this to me XD