essays
So today I got down to opening my college essays...5 months later...I thought it would be taboo to read them before actually getting an answer. Well I'd like to share them with u, if you dont mind...feel free to bombard and criticize my work, cuz hey, they got me into tufts, bc, bu, clark and northeastern! lol (keep in mind that english is my second, maybe third, language!)
COMMON APP ESSAY
I was barely 8, a new man in the world, not knowing what to expect or seek, only worrying about my toys and how to make more friends. It was in a restaurant close to Barcelona, Spain that my father told me and my two sisters that we were moving far, farther than my deepest dreams had taken me. Brazil was our destination, a land I had heard little or nothing about. Tears came out of my eyes as I feared I would no longer have friends; that I would not learn how to read and write, add or subtract. It was that night that my life turned around and took a completely different course, as moving to such a far away and exotic land scarred me forever and left an unforgettable mark on me.
Not many boys my age get to live in such a far away place, and when I look back at those seven years in Sao Paulo, Brazil, I think of how those years formed me into the man I am today. The people are open minded, they do not discriminate people for their looks, beliefs or color. I like to think of myself like that. If I were to point out a special attribute, it would be my love for new ways of living, cultures beliefs and getting to know them before making any judgment. Living in Brazil, such a multi-cultural land that mixes colors, music, and laughter while at the same time involving hard work and struggle, made me see how one can enjoy life while making their best effort to move forward in their life.
A country of such contrasts only makes a person realize that the true value of a being is not in their sight to the eye, but in the way they think, in their own uniqueness. Now, when I go back to visit my family and friends in Spain, I can only think about how they do not give people a chance, how they judge people based on what they see and have a completely unfair opinion on other people even before they start a normal conversation. It is when I see how different I am from them that I realize just how much those seven years changed me in an indescribable way, and for that I am more thankful than anything else that has been given to me.
SUPP ESSAY ABOUT MY ENVIRONMENT
It is hard to identify where I grew up. At the age of seven, I made a radical change and moved from the organized, calm life I lead in Barcelona, Spain to the wild and exciting life in Sao Paulo, Brazil. Then, after seven years in Brazil, I moved to the smaller city of Puebla, Mexico. It is very easy to know where you have lived, but it is much more difficult to identify what these cities have given to me, and how they have helped me to become what I am today, and the goals I shoot for. My goals are to know as many cultures as possible, live with them, learn their customs and beliefs and make myself a more international person, respecting all that surrounds me as different as they might be.
I think the most important part of my life, at least the one I grew the most in, was my seven years in Brazil. When you are in a country from age 7 to 15, you become more and more identified with their culture. A Brazilian person, while relaxed and calm, takes his work and life seriously. I feel I am more like that than stressed person. The beauty about Brazil’s thinking is how they can join music and joy with hard work and struggle. I like to work, get things done, but have fun in the process, really focus myself on whatever task is ahead of me and take it on like a whole new, fun.
My family was always very close. It is difficult to be close when you are in a foreign country, especially an abstract one like Brazil, but I always remember dinner time when we got together and just talked normally, in our language, in our ways, eating our food. It was then that I felt more Spanish than ever, when I got to experience what my original country was like. Those moments were the ones that always kept me thinking of my roots and did not keep me from jumping into the Brazilian customs right away. Those moments really shaped me as a person and still reflect in me today, as I feel today I feel very Spanish and love my culture, and yet I also feel Brazilian and even Mexican. I think this ability to feel of many places and to be able to extract what is best from each culture is what really defines and identifies me as someone I am very proud of today.
COMMON APP ESSAY
I was barely 8, a new man in the world, not knowing what to expect or seek, only worrying about my toys and how to make more friends. It was in a restaurant close to Barcelona, Spain that my father told me and my two sisters that we were moving far, farther than my deepest dreams had taken me. Brazil was our destination, a land I had heard little or nothing about. Tears came out of my eyes as I feared I would no longer have friends; that I would not learn how to read and write, add or subtract. It was that night that my life turned around and took a completely different course, as moving to such a far away and exotic land scarred me forever and left an unforgettable mark on me.
Not many boys my age get to live in such a far away place, and when I look back at those seven years in Sao Paulo, Brazil, I think of how those years formed me into the man I am today. The people are open minded, they do not discriminate people for their looks, beliefs or color. I like to think of myself like that. If I were to point out a special attribute, it would be my love for new ways of living, cultures beliefs and getting to know them before making any judgment. Living in Brazil, such a multi-cultural land that mixes colors, music, and laughter while at the same time involving hard work and struggle, made me see how one can enjoy life while making their best effort to move forward in their life.
A country of such contrasts only makes a person realize that the true value of a being is not in their sight to the eye, but in the way they think, in their own uniqueness. Now, when I go back to visit my family and friends in Spain, I can only think about how they do not give people a chance, how they judge people based on what they see and have a completely unfair opinion on other people even before they start a normal conversation. It is when I see how different I am from them that I realize just how much those seven years changed me in an indescribable way, and for that I am more thankful than anything else that has been given to me.
SUPP ESSAY ABOUT MY ENVIRONMENT
It is hard to identify where I grew up. At the age of seven, I made a radical change and moved from the organized, calm life I lead in Barcelona, Spain to the wild and exciting life in Sao Paulo, Brazil. Then, after seven years in Brazil, I moved to the smaller city of Puebla, Mexico. It is very easy to know where you have lived, but it is much more difficult to identify what these cities have given to me, and how they have helped me to become what I am today, and the goals I shoot for. My goals are to know as many cultures as possible, live with them, learn their customs and beliefs and make myself a more international person, respecting all that surrounds me as different as they might be.
I think the most important part of my life, at least the one I grew the most in, was my seven years in Brazil. When you are in a country from age 7 to 15, you become more and more identified with their culture. A Brazilian person, while relaxed and calm, takes his work and life seriously. I feel I am more like that than stressed person. The beauty about Brazil’s thinking is how they can join music and joy with hard work and struggle. I like to work, get things done, but have fun in the process, really focus myself on whatever task is ahead of me and take it on like a whole new, fun.
My family was always very close. It is difficult to be close when you are in a foreign country, especially an abstract one like Brazil, but I always remember dinner time when we got together and just talked normally, in our language, in our ways, eating our food. It was then that I felt more Spanish than ever, when I got to experience what my original country was like. Those moments were the ones that always kept me thinking of my roots and did not keep me from jumping into the Brazilian customs right away. Those moments really shaped me as a person and still reflect in me today, as I feel today I feel very Spanish and love my culture, and yet I also feel Brazilian and even Mexican. I think this ability to feel of many places and to be able to extract what is best from each culture is what really defines and identifies me as someone I am very proud of today.