okay firstly, alice, 36k........ wow. just. wow. i am completely blown away. i don't know how hard it was for you but for me writing anything > 5k is a total torture for me and you are totally, totally amazing for writing something of this length. i hope you're really proud of yourself! :3
i like your narrative tone in this, it's distant and cold which works especially well for the leaving parts, and bittersweet for the parts where they're together because, well, i kind of thought throughout this entire thing that kyuhyun never was jongwoon's to begin with. i also liked the juxtaposition of sex and normal scenes in the middle of this after they get together! made for a good perspective on their relationship. and how they progressed, from awkward ex-bandmates that never really were best friends in the first place to friends, and then on to other things.
the ending was a little abrupt for me; i'd like to have seen it left hanging, but i am obviously nitpicking and a sadist.
this was pretty realistic for the most part, and i liked your jongwoon and kyuhyun characterisation :3 i hope you do a dvd commentary thing, i'd like to know what you thought when you wrote a particular scene! ♥
Dude, after writing longfic it's just SIGH FINALLY DONE and then lol is this anything of worth and then whatever I should post this anyways to showcase a massive amount of words >-> /shot
And yay, that's exactly what I was trying to do XD Other things, sigh.
Sad endings have been overtaking me lately, so I was trying to do something (happier.)
sldfkj Jay thank you so much! ♥ Haha, will get on that soon :D
i like your narrative tone in this, it's distant and cold which works especially well for the leaving parts, and bittersweet for the parts where they're together because, well, i kind of thought throughout this entire thing that kyuhyun never was jongwoon's to begin with. i also liked the juxtaposition of sex and normal scenes in the middle of this after they get together! made for a good perspective on their relationship. and how they progressed, from awkward ex-bandmates that never really were best friends in the first place to friends, and then on to other things.
the ending was a little abrupt for me; i'd like to have seen it left hanging, but i am obviously nitpicking and a sadist.
this was pretty realistic for the most part, and i liked your jongwoon and kyuhyun characterisation :3 i hope you do a dvd commentary thing, i'd like to know what you thought when you wrote a particular scene! ♥
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And yay, that's exactly what I was trying to do XD Other things, sigh.
Sad endings have been overtaking me lately, so I was trying to do something (happier.)
sldfkj Jay thank you so much! ♥ Haha, will get on that soon :D
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