Title: Apple
Author: Prelocandkanar (Prelocandkanar@aol.com)
Series: DS9
Part: 1/1
Rating: PG
Codes: G/B
Summary: Garak and Bashir discuss the story of Eden over lunch
Author’s Note: This story was written for the contest “Last Author Standing” at LiveJournal. The contest required each author to write a story within four and a half
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One question, though - what exactly does that fruit do? I took it for a sensory enhancer of some kind - enhancing stimulation of nerve endings, and the like. What did you intend it to act as?
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I did have some problems with Garak in this fic. This line, for instance, I think, isn't said with a true "Garak" voice:
“-an enemy! An adversary! Someone to match wits against!” Garak chimed in, an enigmatic look on his face. “Oh, a promising story.”
Maybe it's the result of having written this so much faster than I usually do. As for it stopping just when it's warming up... maybe I'll re-visit this in the future, clean up the characterization(s) and extend it forward.
Thanks for being honest about the Garak voice -- that kind of feedback is very helpful. But then you go on with such kind comments, too. I really appreciate it! :D
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