3545: Serpent's Heart - Wolfgang "Wolfie" Sinistra
It's tme for Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. Accepting entries for the Thirteenth Annual Pottersues Contest.
Today's trope is Sympathy Sue. I'm struggling a bit on finding a Jerk Sue
Today's link of the day is It'sA Me, Mary Sue: Why She's An Important Figure For Fanfic And Fangirls I agree with the part about not hating on Mary Sues, but the writer lost me as soon as they began to describe their “least-favorite Mary Sue”. What the writer describes isn't a Mary Sue, and I'm not just saying this because I don't think James Bond is a Gary Stu. I've come across female characters who are main characters in their series who fit the description given, and they're not Mary Sues.
Ironically I didn't pick out the link of the day because today's entry is actually a Gary Stu. I was looking for something else, and thought I'd actually found a good article about not disliking Mary Sues. Instead we get another article which doesn't get what a Mary Sue is.
TITLE: Serpent's Heart
PERPETRATOR: BigBadWolfTardis
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: A picture of the OC and the Gregory Goyal...
SUMMARY:”Slytherins are evil… but what if they're not? Maybe they are just misunderstood. Wolfie Sinistra is a misunderstood Slytherin, and he seems to be the exception to the rule. Gifted with a mind like no other and with strong magic to wield, perhaps the unthinkable is possible... Perhaps there CAN be a good Slytherin...”
FULL NAME: Wolfgang “Wolfie” Sinistra
SPECIES: He's supposed to be some poor misunderstood Slytherin
HAIR: see sample
EYES: see sample
MARKINGS: see sample
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Wolfie is waiting for the train, and his father tells him he wants perfect grades. His father tells him “Ravenclaw is mildly acceptable, but 'd much prefer Slytherin”. (The writer wants us to believe Wolfie is abused, but we're told and not shown.) The sorting hat gets drawn out to emphasize the fact Wolfie's scared of his father, but it ends up not working. Story then follows the plot of the first book. Gregory tries to get Potter into trouble, but saves Wolfie in the seventh chapter, but he still gets a letter written home. His father's reaction is a Howler. (How is this any worse then what Molly did in the second book?) For some reason Wolfie's allowed to leave the school to be punished by his father, and we get a chapter of over blown abuse. “His father was almost ripping his hair out”, and it seems like the abuse should show.
ORIGIN: “Spoiled children were the result of parents that loved them to much. his parents were nothing of the sort. Respect, discipline, and above all, family values. And the highest value in the Sinistra family had was blood status. If Wolfie went against any of their views, there was a strong chance he may even be disowned from the family. Of course, he wouldn't exactly be too disappointed by that, but at the same time, he didn't want to end up living on the streets like a filthy muggle.” (Yeah... your Stu's just misunderstood, not.) “Anyway, to anyone that is new to this story, the main character is a Slytherin called Wolfie Sinistra, an abused child with overbearing parents that only see him as an heir and not a person. Hopefully I'll get some dark themes going on over the chapters, and I hope people enjoy them. I'll try to warn people about anything that's a trigger. This chapter is fairly mild though.” I see him more as a spoiled brat despite the author's attempts to make the readers think otherwise.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: “'I can see your reasons. You lack the courage to stand up to your father, but suppose that's understandable, if your memories are anything to go on' the hat told him, and Wolfie blushed slightly, knowing EXACTLY what memories the hat must be seeing to make that connection.” (This is the first sign of any kind of abuse though.) His father is actually allowed to remove him from Hogwarts grounds to punish him.
NOTES: I think the choice of pairing is interesting. The summary says [OC, Gregory G.]. It's bad though the writer gets called out in the reviews on the first chapter for making their character a Gary Stu. There is also an Aurora Scarlight running around in their house. Nice concept, not well executed. Add to the Gary Stu element the writing is rather dry.
Said story gets an awful rating as there are lulls between the Gary Stu moments albeit dry lulls. I think if I could have managed to dig out more I would have given this a toxic rating.
SAMPLE:
The smoke parted slightly, and that was when the boy saw it. The Hogwarts' Express, a scarlet steam engine train gleaming in the light. Thick torrents of pearly white smoke were clouding the platform, Platform 9 ¾ to be precise, and the boy could only see the train when there was a gap in the smoke, and the bustling activity of school children and their parents.
Many of the children were looking at the train in astonishment; it really was quite beautiful as far as transportation methods went. It had a strange quality to it that separated it from your average train, but maybe that was simply due to where the train would be taking them.
Others seemed mildly bored, and although impressed, less astonished. Those were the ones that had grown up surrounded by magic their entire life and had seen equally impressive things from the day they were born.
And the ones least impressed of all tended to be the ones from the oldest wizarding families, and usually the wealthiest too. And it just so happened that Wolfgang Sinistra was one to fall into that category.
'I don't like the colour much' he said sarcastically to himself, quietly making sure his parents didn't hear him. The train was scarlet, a Gryffindor colour, and much too bright. It such be black, or at the very least a dark blue or green. Anything but that flashy Gryffindor red.
Wolfgang was eleven years old, and would be taking the Hogwarts' Express to Hogwarts itself, a school far away from London in the north of Scotland, and he'd be there to learn the art of witchcraft and wizardry. He couldn't wait, for years he had been waiting to go, and now it was finally time. Although it had more to do with wanting to escape from his home than actually wanting to go to Hogwarts. But if the famous school could offer him somewhere else to go, he'd go without complaint.
Wolfgang himself didn't look particularly impressive. He was tall for his age, just a child, not even a teenager yet, but he had an air of confidence around him. His mind was sharper than a pin and he was oddly hansom for such a young child. Most grew into that later, but Wolfgang or Wolfie as he tended to call himself, certainly had good looks. Short spikey brown hair, golden hazel eyes, and perfect shaped lips. His nose, chin, and ears were all perfectly fitting to his face, nothing at all stuck out as a negative feature. He was so good looking for a child it was abnormal. But he had inherited his good looks from his parents; there was no mistake about that.
He was dressed in a pair of black jeans and a long blue hoodie, which his father had made sure were of wizard fabrication. There was no chance that a son of his was going to be dressed in filthy muggle clothing after all.
Mr Sinistra, Rorianious his name was, was of a tall muscular build, slim but very well-toned. He had a youthful but power aura surrounding him, and his long flowing black robes showed just how wealthy the Sinistra family was. His long wavy hair was the same brown as his son's as was his neatly trimmed moustache. He was the perfect example of an aristocratic man trained in the art of political manipulation.
Mrs Sinistra, Clarinessa, could be accurately called a 'Royal Beauty'. She had long flowing curls of graceful jet black hair, and her eyes shimmered like melted gold in the same way she had passed onto her son. Her lips were redder than the reddest rose, and her pale skin could make snow look a dull grey. She was gorgeous, but she also had a cruel, merciless aura about her too.
The three of them were standing on the platform, looking around, Mr and Mrs Sinistra somewhat distastefully, whilst Wolfie looked slightly anxious.
Today's trope is Sympathy Sue. I'm struggling a bit on finding a Jerk Sue
Today's link of the day is It'sA Me, Mary Sue: Why She's An Important Figure For Fanfic And Fangirls I agree with the part about not hating on Mary Sues, but the writer lost me as soon as they began to describe their “least-favorite Mary Sue”. What the writer describes isn't a Mary Sue, and I'm not just saying this because I don't think James Bond is a Gary Stu. I've come across female characters who are main characters in their series who fit the description given, and they're not Mary Sues.
Ironically I didn't pick out the link of the day because today's entry is actually a Gary Stu. I was looking for something else, and thought I'd actually found a good article about not disliking Mary Sues. Instead we get another article which doesn't get what a Mary Sue is.
TITLE: Serpent's Heart
PERPETRATOR: BigBadWolfTardis
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: A picture of the OC and the Gregory Goyal...
SUMMARY:”Slytherins are evil… but what if they're not? Maybe they are just misunderstood. Wolfie Sinistra is a misunderstood Slytherin, and he seems to be the exception to the rule. Gifted with a mind like no other and with strong magic to wield, perhaps the unthinkable is possible... Perhaps there CAN be a good Slytherin...”
FULL NAME: Wolfgang “Wolfie” Sinistra
SPECIES: He's supposed to be some poor misunderstood Slytherin
HAIR: see sample
EYES: see sample
MARKINGS: see sample
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Wolfie is waiting for the train, and his father tells him he wants perfect grades. His father tells him “Ravenclaw is mildly acceptable, but 'd much prefer Slytherin”. (The writer wants us to believe Wolfie is abused, but we're told and not shown.) The sorting hat gets drawn out to emphasize the fact Wolfie's scared of his father, but it ends up not working. Story then follows the plot of the first book. Gregory tries to get Potter into trouble, but saves Wolfie in the seventh chapter, but he still gets a letter written home. His father's reaction is a Howler. (How is this any worse then what Molly did in the second book?) For some reason Wolfie's allowed to leave the school to be punished by his father, and we get a chapter of over blown abuse. “His father was almost ripping his hair out”, and it seems like the abuse should show.
ORIGIN: “Spoiled children were the result of parents that loved them to much. his parents were nothing of the sort. Respect, discipline, and above all, family values. And the highest value in the Sinistra family had was blood status. If Wolfie went against any of their views, there was a strong chance he may even be disowned from the family. Of course, he wouldn't exactly be too disappointed by that, but at the same time, he didn't want to end up living on the streets like a filthy muggle.” (Yeah... your Stu's just misunderstood, not.) “Anyway, to anyone that is new to this story, the main character is a Slytherin called Wolfie Sinistra, an abused child with overbearing parents that only see him as an heir and not a person. Hopefully I'll get some dark themes going on over the chapters, and I hope people enjoy them. I'll try to warn people about anything that's a trigger. This chapter is fairly mild though.” I see him more as a spoiled brat despite the author's attempts to make the readers think otherwise.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: “'I can see your reasons. You lack the courage to stand up to your father, but suppose that's understandable, if your memories are anything to go on' the hat told him, and Wolfie blushed slightly, knowing EXACTLY what memories the hat must be seeing to make that connection.” (This is the first sign of any kind of abuse though.) His father is actually allowed to remove him from Hogwarts grounds to punish him.
NOTES: I think the choice of pairing is interesting. The summary says [OC, Gregory G.]. It's bad though the writer gets called out in the reviews on the first chapter for making their character a Gary Stu. There is also an Aurora Scarlight running around in their house. Nice concept, not well executed. Add to the Gary Stu element the writing is rather dry.
Said story gets an awful rating as there are lulls between the Gary Stu moments albeit dry lulls. I think if I could have managed to dig out more I would have given this a toxic rating.
SAMPLE:
The smoke parted slightly, and that was when the boy saw it. The Hogwarts' Express, a scarlet steam engine train gleaming in the light. Thick torrents of pearly white smoke were clouding the platform, Platform 9 ¾ to be precise, and the boy could only see the train when there was a gap in the smoke, and the bustling activity of school children and their parents.
Many of the children were looking at the train in astonishment; it really was quite beautiful as far as transportation methods went. It had a strange quality to it that separated it from your average train, but maybe that was simply due to where the train would be taking them.
Others seemed mildly bored, and although impressed, less astonished. Those were the ones that had grown up surrounded by magic their entire life and had seen equally impressive things from the day they were born.
And the ones least impressed of all tended to be the ones from the oldest wizarding families, and usually the wealthiest too. And it just so happened that Wolfgang Sinistra was one to fall into that category.
'I don't like the colour much' he said sarcastically to himself, quietly making sure his parents didn't hear him. The train was scarlet, a Gryffindor colour, and much too bright. It such be black, or at the very least a dark blue or green. Anything but that flashy Gryffindor red.
Wolfgang was eleven years old, and would be taking the Hogwarts' Express to Hogwarts itself, a school far away from London in the north of Scotland, and he'd be there to learn the art of witchcraft and wizardry. He couldn't wait, for years he had been waiting to go, and now it was finally time. Although it had more to do with wanting to escape from his home than actually wanting to go to Hogwarts. But if the famous school could offer him somewhere else to go, he'd go without complaint.
Wolfgang himself didn't look particularly impressive. He was tall for his age, just a child, not even a teenager yet, but he had an air of confidence around him. His mind was sharper than a pin and he was oddly hansom for such a young child. Most grew into that later, but Wolfgang or Wolfie as he tended to call himself, certainly had good looks. Short spikey brown hair, golden hazel eyes, and perfect shaped lips. His nose, chin, and ears were all perfectly fitting to his face, nothing at all stuck out as a negative feature. He was so good looking for a child it was abnormal. But he had inherited his good looks from his parents; there was no mistake about that.
He was dressed in a pair of black jeans and a long blue hoodie, which his father had made sure were of wizard fabrication. There was no chance that a son of his was going to be dressed in filthy muggle clothing after all.
Mr Sinistra, Rorianious his name was, was of a tall muscular build, slim but very well-toned. He had a youthful but power aura surrounding him, and his long flowing black robes showed just how wealthy the Sinistra family was. His long wavy hair was the same brown as his son's as was his neatly trimmed moustache. He was the perfect example of an aristocratic man trained in the art of political manipulation.
Mrs Sinistra, Clarinessa, could be accurately called a 'Royal Beauty'. She had long flowing curls of graceful jet black hair, and her eyes shimmered like melted gold in the same way she had passed onto her son. Her lips were redder than the reddest rose, and her pale skin could make snow look a dull grey. She was gorgeous, but she also had a cruel, merciless aura about her too.
The three of them were standing on the platform, looking around, Mr and Mrs Sinistra somewhat distastefully, whilst Wolfie looked slightly anxious.