3311: Harry Crow - Hermione Granger and company
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- Flashback Sue for today is a Ginny-Sue.
TITLE: Harry Crow
PERPETRATOR: robst
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover's background is Gringott's bank. The character at the front is Harry Stu dressed up in Victorian age duds.
SUMMARY:”What will happen when a goblin-raised Harry arrives at Hogwarts. A Harry who has received training, already knows the prophecy and has no scar. With the backing of the goblin nation and Hogwarts herself. Complete.” They wouldn't...
FULL NAME: Vernon, Dumbledore, Harry Potter/Crow “Old Crow”, Hermione Granger
SPECIES: They're supposed to be canon characters.
HAIR: “His jet- black wavy hair hung down to his shoulders and framed what Hermione would consider a kind face...”
EYES: “... but those wonderfully expressive almond shaped green eyes melted her heart. If it wouldn't be considered blasphemy, Hermione reckoned this boy was too gorgeous even for Jane Austen to do justice.”
MARKINGS: “If Fitzwilliam Darcy and Elizabeth Bennet ever had a son, he was standing right in front of Hermione Granger and offering his assistance. The boy was even dressed as if he'd just stepped out of the pages of Pride and Prejudice, Hermione's favourite book.”
POSSESSIONS: “His black frock coat had silk lapels, it also had to be wide at the shoulders to accommodate the body it clothed. Being fitted to accentuate a slim waist was also an effect that the young witch appreciated. The grey waistcoat just visible under the coat matched his trousers, with button up black boots being a nice touch. The ascot knotted cravat, with a diamond cravat pin being a fitting finish to this very nice ensemble.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Dumbledore blocked the reading of the Potter will and Vernon manages to find Diagon Alley and walks right up to the bank without anyone stopping him. Vernon drops him off at an orphanage and Barchoke goes and adopts him. Something is removed from Harry and Dumbledore finds out that Harry is no longer with the Dursley family. Vernon decides to get a shot gun. Dumbledore then gets the run around from the bankers. The second chapter is about Hermione. “Her mother had sat Hermione down for a talk about boys before she headed off to Hogwarts, the young witch had foolishly thought most of it would never apply to her. Hermione had never understood her classmates' devotion to the latest boy bands, who cared what 'new kids on the block' were doing offstage, or on stage for that matter! She had though her first crush would be on some handsome author or, heaven forbid, a teacher. In the space of a few seconds the boy in front of her had just shattered that illusion into a gazillion pieces.” “She had to say something, he couldn't leave here thinking she was some drivelling drooling moronic fan girl, she didn't even know his name. “ Harry begins to spout of prose to Hermione about the wizarding world and she's falling head over heals. Harry voices a dream to “honour my mother's memory by dressing like this today” and Hermione spouts off “Oh Harry, you know I'll help you any way I can.”
ORIGIN:
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Vernon managed to find Diagon Alley. The wards on Harry's house are actually meant to help him keep track of the boy. In chapter two an eleven to twelve year old Hermione is comparing Harry Potter to characters from classic books. Harry is turned into a Victorian age dream fest just because he was raised by goblins.
NOTES: Hermione's behavior in the second chapter bothers me. On one side she happens to be very out of character. On the other side there seems to be this idea being put forth that P&P fans having book related crushes is better then having a boy band crush and doesn't amount to “drivelling drooling moronic fan girl” business when it in fact does. I also doubt Hermione would know the word “fan girl” either.
I caught this author's note in the third chapter. “Disclaimer: Since I'm not the owner of these characters, I will probably do things with them that you don't like or agree with. Sorry in advance but that's the nature of fan fiction. To do otherwise kind of defeats the purpose of writing fan fiction, and copying JKR word for word would certainly see a lawsuit heading in my direction.”
(…)
There is a term for what the writer is doing... Possession Sue. Anyways... I'll leave it at this and not go past that particular author's note other then to say that the most OoC character is Hermione.
SAMPLE:
-oOoOo-
The healers were extremely angry, Barchoke fully shared that anger after hearing their diagnoses and prognoses. They were raging that this child had been left untreated. Even worse, it would appear that treatment was deliberately withheld. The longer this condition went untreated, the more severe the trauma would be for removing this disgusting thing from the child. As the healers sent for a pig to act as a new host for this abomination, Barchoke knew it was his duty to report this news to the director. The Potter accounts manager could confidently predict there would be no laughter at this meeting.
That the dark one had stooped so low as to use this most foulest form of magic would not only disgust Ragnok, it was practically a foregone conclusion that all the vaults under Gringotts would need to be inspected in case any more of these affronts to nature existed there. It was also not inconceivable that a certain Albus Dumbledore could suddenly find himself suffering from 'banking difficulties'. What was inconceivable to the goblin was that the Chief Warlock could miss the dark magic radiating from the child's scar, to deliberately ignore this was criminal. For a goblin, committing a crime against a child was as low as you could get.
-oOoOo-
Albus could no longer ignore the readings - or lack of - coming from the instruments he'd tied to the wards around the Potter boy's residence. He'd been putting this confrontation off but, with the children now safely on the Hogwarts express to begin their Christmas Holidays, the headmaster's last excuse about being too busy had left with them. It was time to once more visit Privet Drive.
It was an invisible Dumbledore who took his second stroll along Privet Drive, he wanted to ensure his instruments weren't malfunctioning before disturbing the Dursleys. His wand soon confirmed the information his sensors at Hogwarts were telling him, there were no wards whatsoever around this property. Albus decided to do some snooping.
Watching through the window as Petunia played on the floor with her large son, all the while the husband sat in an enormous chair and never removed his head from the newspaper, Albus was puzzled why Harry wasn't part of this scene. It would appear the only way he would discover the information he required was by entering the house. He at least had the good manners to ring the doorbell and wait until it was answered.
Petunia was stunned when she opened the door, she was just reminding herself that it was nearly Christmas - and not Halloween - when the six and a half foot gaudy garden gnome spoke.
"Good evening Mrs Dursley. My name is Albus Dumbledore, could I have a few words with you regarding your nephew, Harry Potter?"
The instant she heard the name Dumbledore, Petunia tried to slam the door in his face. Unfortunately, for whatever reason, the door refused to move from the open position. "Harry Potter doesn't live here, and we don't know where he is."
This led to a rather loud 'WHAT!' from the wizard. Vernon had started moving the second he heard the name Dumbledore mentioned, he was now thundering down the hall to confront this wizard who caused him so much work.
- Flashback Sue for today is a Ginny-Sue.
TITLE: Harry Crow
PERPETRATOR: robst
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover's background is Gringott's bank. The character at the front is Harry Stu dressed up in Victorian age duds.
SUMMARY:”What will happen when a goblin-raised Harry arrives at Hogwarts. A Harry who has received training, already knows the prophecy and has no scar. With the backing of the goblin nation and Hogwarts herself. Complete.” They wouldn't...
FULL NAME: Vernon, Dumbledore, Harry Potter/Crow “Old Crow”, Hermione Granger
SPECIES: They're supposed to be canon characters.
HAIR: “His jet- black wavy hair hung down to his shoulders and framed what Hermione would consider a kind face...”
EYES: “... but those wonderfully expressive almond shaped green eyes melted her heart. If it wouldn't be considered blasphemy, Hermione reckoned this boy was too gorgeous even for Jane Austen to do justice.”
MARKINGS: “If Fitzwilliam Darcy and Elizabeth Bennet ever had a son, he was standing right in front of Hermione Granger and offering his assistance. The boy was even dressed as if he'd just stepped out of the pages of Pride and Prejudice, Hermione's favourite book.”
POSSESSIONS: “His black frock coat had silk lapels, it also had to be wide at the shoulders to accommodate the body it clothed. Being fitted to accentuate a slim waist was also an effect that the young witch appreciated. The grey waistcoat just visible under the coat matched his trousers, with button up black boots being a nice touch. The ascot knotted cravat, with a diamond cravat pin being a fitting finish to this very nice ensemble.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Dumbledore blocked the reading of the Potter will and Vernon manages to find Diagon Alley and walks right up to the bank without anyone stopping him. Vernon drops him off at an orphanage and Barchoke goes and adopts him. Something is removed from Harry and Dumbledore finds out that Harry is no longer with the Dursley family. Vernon decides to get a shot gun. Dumbledore then gets the run around from the bankers. The second chapter is about Hermione. “Her mother had sat Hermione down for a talk about boys before she headed off to Hogwarts, the young witch had foolishly thought most of it would never apply to her. Hermione had never understood her classmates' devotion to the latest boy bands, who cared what 'new kids on the block' were doing offstage, or on stage for that matter! She had though her first crush would be on some handsome author or, heaven forbid, a teacher. In the space of a few seconds the boy in front of her had just shattered that illusion into a gazillion pieces.” “She had to say something, he couldn't leave here thinking she was some drivelling drooling moronic fan girl, she didn't even know his name. “ Harry begins to spout of prose to Hermione about the wizarding world and she's falling head over heals. Harry voices a dream to “honour my mother's memory by dressing like this today” and Hermione spouts off “Oh Harry, you know I'll help you any way I can.”
ORIGIN:
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Vernon managed to find Diagon Alley. The wards on Harry's house are actually meant to help him keep track of the boy. In chapter two an eleven to twelve year old Hermione is comparing Harry Potter to characters from classic books. Harry is turned into a Victorian age dream fest just because he was raised by goblins.
NOTES: Hermione's behavior in the second chapter bothers me. On one side she happens to be very out of character. On the other side there seems to be this idea being put forth that P&P fans having book related crushes is better then having a boy band crush and doesn't amount to “drivelling drooling moronic fan girl” business when it in fact does. I also doubt Hermione would know the word “fan girl” either.
I caught this author's note in the third chapter. “Disclaimer: Since I'm not the owner of these characters, I will probably do things with them that you don't like or agree with. Sorry in advance but that's the nature of fan fiction. To do otherwise kind of defeats the purpose of writing fan fiction, and copying JKR word for word would certainly see a lawsuit heading in my direction.”
(…)
There is a term for what the writer is doing... Possession Sue. Anyways... I'll leave it at this and not go past that particular author's note other then to say that the most OoC character is Hermione.
SAMPLE:
-oOoOo-
The healers were extremely angry, Barchoke fully shared that anger after hearing their diagnoses and prognoses. They were raging that this child had been left untreated. Even worse, it would appear that treatment was deliberately withheld. The longer this condition went untreated, the more severe the trauma would be for removing this disgusting thing from the child. As the healers sent for a pig to act as a new host for this abomination, Barchoke knew it was his duty to report this news to the director. The Potter accounts manager could confidently predict there would be no laughter at this meeting.
That the dark one had stooped so low as to use this most foulest form of magic would not only disgust Ragnok, it was practically a foregone conclusion that all the vaults under Gringotts would need to be inspected in case any more of these affronts to nature existed there. It was also not inconceivable that a certain Albus Dumbledore could suddenly find himself suffering from 'banking difficulties'. What was inconceivable to the goblin was that the Chief Warlock could miss the dark magic radiating from the child's scar, to deliberately ignore this was criminal. For a goblin, committing a crime against a child was as low as you could get.
-oOoOo-
Albus could no longer ignore the readings - or lack of - coming from the instruments he'd tied to the wards around the Potter boy's residence. He'd been putting this confrontation off but, with the children now safely on the Hogwarts express to begin their Christmas Holidays, the headmaster's last excuse about being too busy had left with them. It was time to once more visit Privet Drive.
It was an invisible Dumbledore who took his second stroll along Privet Drive, he wanted to ensure his instruments weren't malfunctioning before disturbing the Dursleys. His wand soon confirmed the information his sensors at Hogwarts were telling him, there were no wards whatsoever around this property. Albus decided to do some snooping.
Watching through the window as Petunia played on the floor with her large son, all the while the husband sat in an enormous chair and never removed his head from the newspaper, Albus was puzzled why Harry wasn't part of this scene. It would appear the only way he would discover the information he required was by entering the house. He at least had the good manners to ring the doorbell and wait until it was answered.
Petunia was stunned when she opened the door, she was just reminding herself that it was nearly Christmas - and not Halloween - when the six and a half foot gaudy garden gnome spoke.
"Good evening Mrs Dursley. My name is Albus Dumbledore, could I have a few words with you regarding your nephew, Harry Potter?"
The instant she heard the name Dumbledore, Petunia tried to slam the door in his face. Unfortunately, for whatever reason, the door refused to move from the open position. "Harry Potter doesn't live here, and we don't know where he is."
This led to a rather loud 'WHAT!' from the wizard. Vernon had started moving the second he heard the name Dumbledore mentioned, he was now thundering down the hall to confront this wizard who caused him so much work.