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TITLE: Unknown Guardians
PERPETRATOR: MidnightShadow101
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: None.
FULL NAME: Jay Fatum
SPECIES: She is a demi-goddess. She is the daughter of Hades.
HAIR: Her hair has a gray streak.
EYES: It's in firs person.
MARKINGS: Her hands are scarred. (I wonder if the writer knows the difference between scars and callouses. Hands are one of the last places a person would have many scars.) Also, “By the way Chiron was now describing him, he was fifteen, older than me by a year.”
POSSESSIONS: She has a black knife.
CONNECTION TO CANON: It's your typical Voldemort decides to team up with a big bad guy and thus Harry needs extra protection fic. (Honestly... this I think is the least imaginative way to cross something together.) We then switch to Harry's point of view. There is a group of exchange students showing up at the Weasley family. He of course says that Jay's anti-social behavior is because she is uncomfortable around strangers. (Sorry Suethor... your character's just anti-social. I mean, we get this line from her in the third chapter. “I sat down on my bed, feeling repulsed. I felt as if I was wasting my time, protecting a boy who looked nothing like someone who survived the Killing Curse of the Dark Lord. I pensively rubbed the black chain brands on my wrists, fuming that I should be out there, fighting Voldemort. And here I was, playing babysitter.”) So he stands up for her. She then gabs with Annabeth.
ORIGIN: The summary... well, it's why I jumped on this one... “Nico di Angelo, Percy Jackson, Annabeth Chase, and my own OC, Jay Fatum, need to protect Harry Potter! They must also keep their identities a secret, but who said the Golden Trio were not observant? Demigod slip-ups guaranteed!” Really though, you should see the sample.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The reason they need to protect Harry. “"This "little boy" has outsmarted the Dark Lord numerous times, and is therefore a target of monsters. Lord Voldemort is rising again, and he is allying with the Titan Lord. Monsters will be sent to kill him. You must protect him. I want Nico, Percy, Annabeth, and Jay to go." She's got a sob story background that she manages to over come because she is pretty much so awesome. She's also so much better then Harry of course because she suffered more and she feels watching him is belittling.
NOTES: Harry Potter doesn't need extra protection. There is also no reason for Voldemort to ally himself with an equally bad baddie.
SAMPLE:
Hello. My name is Jay. When I was seven, Voldemort sent his Death Eaters to attack demigod families. I am a daughter of Hades, so naturally my family was targeted. My step -father killed. My mother killed. My little brother, Martin, killed. Officials of Camp Half-Blood miraculously managed to save me after I had destroyed an entire army of monsters. I was raised there, drowning, tuning out the world, and taking zero interest in anything except fighting. When I turned twelve, I received a letter. My brother was not dead. He was alive. But that would soon change. I abandoned Camp Half-Blood and traveled to Mount. Tam in San Francisco. They offered me a deal: if I held the sky for three months and survived, Martin would be turned free. I accepted. After three months, Atlas had regained his strength. Someone took my place with the sky (a sandy haired boy) but Martin wasn't released. I had impressed Atlas with my perseverance in holding the sky. He had admitted he thought that I wouldn't survive. So he added something to the deal: for three more months, I would take Sisyphus's place and roll a boulder up the hill in the Underworld. I accepted, but only for Martin's sake. I succeeded. I was given a mark to show that I had survived the harshest punishments of the gods. Black chains were branded around my wrists. Martin was finally released. But on our way home, Death Eaters wearing Kronos's symbol attacked and killed him. I was spared (that's what the Death Eaters said after I had completely thrashed them) and allowed to live in pain, living only by a mad desire for vengeance.
PERPETRATOR: MidnightShadow101
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
COVER/BANNER ART: None.
FULL NAME: Jay Fatum
SPECIES: She is a demi-goddess. She is the daughter of Hades.
HAIR: Her hair has a gray streak.
EYES: It's in firs person.
MARKINGS: Her hands are scarred. (I wonder if the writer knows the difference between scars and callouses. Hands are one of the last places a person would have many scars.) Also, “By the way Chiron was now describing him, he was fifteen, older than me by a year.”
POSSESSIONS: She has a black knife.
CONNECTION TO CANON: It's your typical Voldemort decides to team up with a big bad guy and thus Harry needs extra protection fic. (Honestly... this I think is the least imaginative way to cross something together.) We then switch to Harry's point of view. There is a group of exchange students showing up at the Weasley family. He of course says that Jay's anti-social behavior is because she is uncomfortable around strangers. (Sorry Suethor... your character's just anti-social. I mean, we get this line from her in the third chapter. “I sat down on my bed, feeling repulsed. I felt as if I was wasting my time, protecting a boy who looked nothing like someone who survived the Killing Curse of the Dark Lord. I pensively rubbed the black chain brands on my wrists, fuming that I should be out there, fighting Voldemort. And here I was, playing babysitter.”) So he stands up for her. She then gabs with Annabeth.
ORIGIN: The summary... well, it's why I jumped on this one... “Nico di Angelo, Percy Jackson, Annabeth Chase, and my own OC, Jay Fatum, need to protect Harry Potter! They must also keep their identities a secret, but who said the Golden Trio were not observant? Demigod slip-ups guaranteed!” Really though, you should see the sample.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: The reason they need to protect Harry. “"This "little boy" has outsmarted the Dark Lord numerous times, and is therefore a target of monsters. Lord Voldemort is rising again, and he is allying with the Titan Lord. Monsters will be sent to kill him. You must protect him. I want Nico, Percy, Annabeth, and Jay to go." She's got a sob story background that she manages to over come because she is pretty much so awesome. She's also so much better then Harry of course because she suffered more and she feels watching him is belittling.
NOTES: Harry Potter doesn't need extra protection. There is also no reason for Voldemort to ally himself with an equally bad baddie.
SAMPLE:
Hello. My name is Jay. When I was seven, Voldemort sent his Death Eaters to attack demigod families. I am a daughter of Hades, so naturally my family was targeted. My step -father killed. My mother killed. My little brother, Martin, killed. Officials of Camp Half-Blood miraculously managed to save me after I had destroyed an entire army of monsters. I was raised there, drowning, tuning out the world, and taking zero interest in anything except fighting. When I turned twelve, I received a letter. My brother was not dead. He was alive. But that would soon change. I abandoned Camp Half-Blood and traveled to Mount. Tam in San Francisco. They offered me a deal: if I held the sky for three months and survived, Martin would be turned free. I accepted. After three months, Atlas had regained his strength. Someone took my place with the sky (a sandy haired boy) but Martin wasn't released. I had impressed Atlas with my perseverance in holding the sky. He had admitted he thought that I wouldn't survive. So he added something to the deal: for three more months, I would take Sisyphus's place and roll a boulder up the hill in the Underworld. I accepted, but only for Martin's sake. I succeeded. I was given a mark to show that I had survived the harshest punishments of the gods. Black chains were branded around my wrists. Martin was finally released. But on our way home, Death Eaters wearing Kronos's symbol attacked and killed him. I was spared (that's what the Death Eaters said after I had completely thrashed them) and allowed to live in pain, living only by a mad desire for vengeance.