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Here is day eighteen of the “Front Page” series. There is eight days left until you can start posting fanfics for the annual contest. Here is the summary for today's entry. “Mia Lestrange has always been compared to a woman she's never met, though people who get to know her think otherwise. But when she goes to Hogwarts for the first time, which path will she follow?”
TITLE: The Unknown Daughter
PERPETRATOR: Z-Nugget
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: A very bad picture of Draco from the movies and what must be the Sue.
FULL NAME: Mia Lestrange
SPECIES: Another daughter of Bellatrix who isn't the cousin of Draco.
HAIR: “Her hair was pinned back for a change, lose jet black curls pulled off her face and hanging down to her shoulder blades, a single green streak of hair standing out from the rest, of which was somehow natural.”
EYES:
MARKINGS:
POSSESSIONS: She has a bunch of books that Ginny causes her to drop when they crash into each other. Two of them are Muggle books. “She shrugged the thought off and opened the next present, which appeared to be a hand-knitted jumper from Mrs. Weasley. Pulling it over her head she frowned looking at a small box-shaped present, wrapped in dark green paper.” And... “She shrugged the thought off and opened the next present, which appeared to be a hand-knitted jumper from Mrs. Weasley. Pulling it over her head she frowned looking at a small box-shaped present, wrapped in dark green paper.” “A beautiful silver looking- though with Draco it was probably white gold or platinum bracelet looked back up at her. Taking it out of the box, Mia tried to remember to breathe again, but was stopped short as a dangling little charm caught her eye. Ofcourse, it was a charm bracelet. For a second there she'd thought the box had been something else. How stupid. Putting her attention back onto the bracelet, the dark-haired girl smiled. There was only one charm on it, but t the price it must have cost, thinking there would be more was just wishful thinking. The charm in question was a tiny dragon, about the size of her fingernail, though the detailing on it as amazing.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Instead of getting her supplies from Diagon Alley she's getting her supplies from Hogsmede. She lives in Hogsmede and runs to “hunny-dukes to get something to eat; Yes sweets were here form of something to eat...” Mia tries to hide her books when she bumps int Ginny. She then blurts out the fact her mother is in prison and that she thinks they killed someone, which apparently is better then admitting that they tortured someone using one of the other unforgivable curses. Apparently the “Nimbus 2000” is “new”. Later on she blurts out exactly who she is in the bookstore. Tonks then takes her to the train station and for some reason Ginny is chatting away with Lavender on the trip. Despite the fact she tells the hat she doesn't want to be in Slytherin it forces her to be in said house. Even though she's sorted into Slytherin the other girls shun her because of who her parents are. Then “Filches cat had been murdered, and with no clues how students were sent home to Christmas break a few days earlier. Though Mia wasn't one of them. She had nowhere to go after all. Tonks was busy with aura training, and Mia didn't want to intrude on her.” (And what about her foster/adoptive parents?) Chapter six sees her being picked for dueling and ends up in the hospital wing and Draco comes to her side. Since she turned demon when she gets out she finds herself locked out so like Draco she gets her own room. She gets to share a bathroom with Draco as well. She then gets roped into helping find Ginny despite not really having much contact with the other characters. (The writer's really good at skipping stuff.) Draco wants to have someone a year below him to do his homework and they're already kissing. Tonks finds the hair clip, forbids her from going to Draco's place and Tonk's gives in. She gets a special room at the Malfoy's as well. They go broom flying and she wears a skit. Then swimming and she wears a bikini. This is chapter thirteen and it causes her to find out Draco is being abused. After that she's at the Burrow. She gets lectured about Draco being her boyfriend and it's pretty much “they don't get that he's really a good guy”. Also... apparently she hasn't met Percy before. Despite being a year below she gets to go to Care of Magical Creatures. She then gets to take care of Draco in their room. Of course... the writer changes her to being in the same year as well. Skips to last chapter... there are a lot and it's about them having sex. One of the reviews asks if there is going to be teenage pregnancy and honestly... I wouldn't be surprised if there was.
ORIGIN: She was born a few months before her mother was thrown into Azkaban. She lives with her foster parents and foster sister... the Tonk's family. This is despite the fact Tonk's should have graduated and be out on her own and the fact she's supposed to be the niece. In the first chapter they're also referred to as her adoptive parents. I think it then changes to them sharing a room but having separate beds.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She has a sweet tooth.”She wasn't one of those clingy people who felt the need to go everywhere with a parent, she was independent.” (Sorry... but she's what... eleven, twelve?) She then tells Draco he got a particular question wrong despite being a year below him. (That's a great way to get a guy romantically interested in you, particularly after they've been lectured about their grades by their father.) I believe she already has Draco sending her jewelry her first year. Apparently during the duel something took over Mia and she is able to deflect spells with her hands and Snape had to interfere. Draco also shoves Pansy out of the way to be with the Sue.
NOTES: There is this author's note in the first chapter. “Also, Bellatrix Lestrange is not related to the Black family in my story.” Yup... another story where the writer is pairing their character with Draco and decided they would change Bellatrix's family line just so they could avoid the whole cousin issue. Since this is not one of the things a writer is supposed to be changing it is fair game for criticism. This one reminds me of this entry. Oh... and in chapter twenty-nine the writer gets upset about the fact people keep bringing up the fact Draco and Mia should be cousins. She complains about how they don't have a grasp of the concept, but considering it's not something that should have been changed... (That's where I decided to call it as this fic is already sixty chapters long and almost a hundred thousand words.
That also said I am going to say this was an indicator that the Suethor doesn't bother to pay attention to canon at all before I even got into the fic. The fact Ginny is wandering around Hogsmede along with the changes to the Black family made it clear that this was likely going to be a Toxic. A lovely Toxic though. Cute too. At least at first. Then the Suethor began to give her character some things that is just plain unrealistic. Honestly... the first cousin thing pales in comparison to the fact the Sue's Draco's girlfriend by the end of her first year among other things.
Oh... and there is this note on her profile. “A Harry Potter based one, which was also uploaded onto harrypotterfanfiction, but they won't let me upload one of the chapters so I gave up with that...” Her account can be found here.
Oh... and to quote one of the reviews. “Narcissa is not related to her and neither is Draco; thats why they make the perfect pair. “
SAMPLE:
Mia walked through the deserted streets of hogsmead alone. As usual. It was early in the morning around 7am, and there was hardly anyone else around, this was the way she liked it.
Mia Lestrange lived with her foster parents, Andromeda and Ted Tonks, and her sister Nymphadora. They weren't actually related, but they were very close. Her hair was pinned back for a change, lose jet black curls pulled off her face and hanging down to her shoulder blades, a single green streak of hair standing out from the rest, of which was somehow natural.
Her mother was Bellatrix Lestrange. Yes, the infamous Bellatrix Lestrange, and had been locked in Azkaban ever since her daughter was a few months old, she probably wouldn't win mother of the year any time soon. Her father was... well, she knew the name, but that's really as far as it went, anyway knowing her mother, he probably wasn't that great a person and not worth the acknowledgement.
The 11 year old girl was starting Hogwarts next month, her letter arriving several weeks ago and was getting all her supplies from Hogsmead early. The shops were starting to open and more people were appearing in the street.
As Mia walked to hunny-dukes to get something to eat; Yes sweets were her form of something to eat, she bumped into a little redheaded girl, causing her to drop the few books out of her bag that she was carrying, two of which were muggle ones. Living with a muggle born as a stepfather really had rubbed on her taste.
"Sorry" said the redhead, as she bent down to pick up the books, her face a flush of embarrassment.
"It's fine" Mia tried to reassure her, a friendly smile on her features as she took the books back. Why was it an embarrassing thing to bump into someone? Annoying maybe, though luckily it took more than that to get her annoyed.
"I'm Ginny," the redhead introduced, either the smile at put her at ease or she was a very friendly girl herself. "Ginny Weasley".
"Mia Lestrange" Mia put the books back in her bag, making sure the titles were kept hidden in case anyone walking past disapproved, hey it wasn't rare to find purebloods with a hatred for anything muggle in Hogsmede after all, then turned and looked at Ginny, taking in every detail quickly. Her clothes looked old and frayed at the edges, the jacket possibly a hand-me-down suggesting she had a sibling, maybe many.
TITLE: The Unknown Daughter
PERPETRATOR: Z-Nugget
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: A very bad picture of Draco from the movies and what must be the Sue.
FULL NAME: Mia Lestrange
SPECIES: Another daughter of Bellatrix who isn't the cousin of Draco.
HAIR: “Her hair was pinned back for a change, lose jet black curls pulled off her face and hanging down to her shoulder blades, a single green streak of hair standing out from the rest, of which was somehow natural.”
EYES:
MARKINGS:
POSSESSIONS: She has a bunch of books that Ginny causes her to drop when they crash into each other. Two of them are Muggle books. “She shrugged the thought off and opened the next present, which appeared to be a hand-knitted jumper from Mrs. Weasley. Pulling it over her head she frowned looking at a small box-shaped present, wrapped in dark green paper.” And... “She shrugged the thought off and opened the next present, which appeared to be a hand-knitted jumper from Mrs. Weasley. Pulling it over her head she frowned looking at a small box-shaped present, wrapped in dark green paper.” “A beautiful silver looking- though with Draco it was probably white gold or platinum bracelet looked back up at her. Taking it out of the box, Mia tried to remember to breathe again, but was stopped short as a dangling little charm caught her eye. Ofcourse, it was a charm bracelet. For a second there she'd thought the box had been something else. How stupid. Putting her attention back onto the bracelet, the dark-haired girl smiled. There was only one charm on it, but t the price it must have cost, thinking there would be more was just wishful thinking. The charm in question was a tiny dragon, about the size of her fingernail, though the detailing on it as amazing.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Instead of getting her supplies from Diagon Alley she's getting her supplies from Hogsmede. She lives in Hogsmede and runs to “hunny-dukes to get something to eat; Yes sweets were here form of something to eat...” Mia tries to hide her books when she bumps int Ginny. She then blurts out the fact her mother is in prison and that she thinks they killed someone, which apparently is better then admitting that they tortured someone using one of the other unforgivable curses. Apparently the “Nimbus 2000” is “new”. Later on she blurts out exactly who she is in the bookstore. Tonks then takes her to the train station and for some reason Ginny is chatting away with Lavender on the trip. Despite the fact she tells the hat she doesn't want to be in Slytherin it forces her to be in said house. Even though she's sorted into Slytherin the other girls shun her because of who her parents are. Then “Filches cat had been murdered, and with no clues how students were sent home to Christmas break a few days earlier. Though Mia wasn't one of them. She had nowhere to go after all. Tonks was busy with aura training, and Mia didn't want to intrude on her.” (And what about her foster/adoptive parents?) Chapter six sees her being picked for dueling and ends up in the hospital wing and Draco comes to her side. Since she turned demon when she gets out she finds herself locked out so like Draco she gets her own room. She gets to share a bathroom with Draco as well. She then gets roped into helping find Ginny despite not really having much contact with the other characters. (The writer's really good at skipping stuff.) Draco wants to have someone a year below him to do his homework and they're already kissing. Tonks finds the hair clip, forbids her from going to Draco's place and Tonk's gives in. She gets a special room at the Malfoy's as well. They go broom flying and she wears a skit. Then swimming and she wears a bikini. This is chapter thirteen and it causes her to find out Draco is being abused. After that she's at the Burrow. She gets lectured about Draco being her boyfriend and it's pretty much “they don't get that he's really a good guy”. Also... apparently she hasn't met Percy before. Despite being a year below she gets to go to Care of Magical Creatures. She then gets to take care of Draco in their room. Of course... the writer changes her to being in the same year as well. Skips to last chapter... there are a lot and it's about them having sex. One of the reviews asks if there is going to be teenage pregnancy and honestly... I wouldn't be surprised if there was.
ORIGIN: She was born a few months before her mother was thrown into Azkaban. She lives with her foster parents and foster sister... the Tonk's family. This is despite the fact Tonk's should have graduated and be out on her own and the fact she's supposed to be the niece. In the first chapter they're also referred to as her adoptive parents. I think it then changes to them sharing a room but having separate beds.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: She has a sweet tooth.”She wasn't one of those clingy people who felt the need to go everywhere with a parent, she was independent.” (Sorry... but she's what... eleven, twelve?) She then tells Draco he got a particular question wrong despite being a year below him. (That's a great way to get a guy romantically interested in you, particularly after they've been lectured about their grades by their father.) I believe she already has Draco sending her jewelry her first year. Apparently during the duel something took over Mia and she is able to deflect spells with her hands and Snape had to interfere. Draco also shoves Pansy out of the way to be with the Sue.
NOTES: There is this author's note in the first chapter. “Also, Bellatrix Lestrange is not related to the Black family in my story.” Yup... another story where the writer is pairing their character with Draco and decided they would change Bellatrix's family line just so they could avoid the whole cousin issue. Since this is not one of the things a writer is supposed to be changing it is fair game for criticism. This one reminds me of this entry. Oh... and in chapter twenty-nine the writer gets upset about the fact people keep bringing up the fact Draco and Mia should be cousins. She complains about how they don't have a grasp of the concept, but considering it's not something that should have been changed... (That's where I decided to call it as this fic is already sixty chapters long and almost a hundred thousand words.
That also said I am going to say this was an indicator that the Suethor doesn't bother to pay attention to canon at all before I even got into the fic. The fact Ginny is wandering around Hogsmede along with the changes to the Black family made it clear that this was likely going to be a Toxic. A lovely Toxic though. Cute too. At least at first. Then the Suethor began to give her character some things that is just plain unrealistic. Honestly... the first cousin thing pales in comparison to the fact the Sue's Draco's girlfriend by the end of her first year among other things.
Oh... and there is this note on her profile. “A Harry Potter based one, which was also uploaded onto harrypotterfanfiction, but they won't let me upload one of the chapters so I gave up with that...” Her account can be found here.
Oh... and to quote one of the reviews. “Narcissa is not related to her and neither is Draco; thats why they make the perfect pair. “
SAMPLE:
Mia walked through the deserted streets of hogsmead alone. As usual. It was early in the morning around 7am, and there was hardly anyone else around, this was the way she liked it.
Mia Lestrange lived with her foster parents, Andromeda and Ted Tonks, and her sister Nymphadora. They weren't actually related, but they were very close. Her hair was pinned back for a change, lose jet black curls pulled off her face and hanging down to her shoulder blades, a single green streak of hair standing out from the rest, of which was somehow natural.
Her mother was Bellatrix Lestrange. Yes, the infamous Bellatrix Lestrange, and had been locked in Azkaban ever since her daughter was a few months old, she probably wouldn't win mother of the year any time soon. Her father was... well, she knew the name, but that's really as far as it went, anyway knowing her mother, he probably wasn't that great a person and not worth the acknowledgement.
The 11 year old girl was starting Hogwarts next month, her letter arriving several weeks ago and was getting all her supplies from Hogsmead early. The shops were starting to open and more people were appearing in the street.
As Mia walked to hunny-dukes to get something to eat; Yes sweets were her form of something to eat, she bumped into a little redheaded girl, causing her to drop the few books out of her bag that she was carrying, two of which were muggle ones. Living with a muggle born as a stepfather really had rubbed on her taste.
"Sorry" said the redhead, as she bent down to pick up the books, her face a flush of embarrassment.
"It's fine" Mia tried to reassure her, a friendly smile on her features as she took the books back. Why was it an embarrassing thing to bump into someone? Annoying maybe, though luckily it took more than that to get her annoyed.
"I'm Ginny," the redhead introduced, either the smile at put her at ease or she was a very friendly girl herself. "Ginny Weasley".
"Mia Lestrange" Mia put the books back in her bag, making sure the titles were kept hidden in case anyone walking past disapproved, hey it wasn't rare to find purebloods with a hatred for anything muggle in Hogsmede after all, then turned and looked at Ginny, taking in every detail quickly. Her clothes looked old and frayed at the edges, the jacket possibly a hand-me-down suggesting she had a sibling, maybe many.