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I went to go look at the Harry Potter fanfics and this was right at top and jumped out at me.
TITLE: Adele Paxton and the Philosophers Stone
PERPETRATOR: Mandee Jo
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: Just her avatar... which I believe is of the actress for Luna Lovegood.
FULL NAME: Adele Paxton
SPECIES: quarter veela
HAIR: “ Her golden blonde hair spread around her head like a halo of sunlight”, “Both her aunt and uncle had black hair” and her cousin has “midnight black”
EYES: “ blue eyes sparkled happily”, her aunt and uncle have brown eyes, while “Jason had inherited hazel eyes from his grandfather”
MARKINGS: Adele has a matching scare on her forehead. She is also a day older then Harry. Her aunt refers to her as “Hitler's dream child.”
POSSESSIONS: a cot, “a pair of jean shorts that used to be pants”, a hair band, “ a light blue sundress that used to belong to her mother”. Vernon for some strange reason brought a sword with him to the island. Where he got one I honestly don't know. Her wand is “"Eleven inches, flexible, a strand of hair from a Veela” and “The core is half of a dragon heartstring” Actually, the Veela is only half and is from her mother while the other half of the core is from her father's wand. A bunch of prank candy... guess who she runs into while buying it. Also, Hagrid gets a black bundle and “the black bundle was a kitten. A red bow with a golden bell was tied around his neck. Harry grinned at her, and held his own caged white owl in his hands.” She names it licorice. “few pairs of jeans she'd also bought, and a red knitted hat that she'd made over the past month”, “oversized t-shirt that she used as a nightgown”. She hits a rock away and it is decided she would also make a good seeker rather then a beeter because “she probably would've caught the thing too.” (Bull...) I've rather had enough of this because when it isn't copying the story its having useless chatter between the characters.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Instead of living in a cupboard, she lives in the attic. She has a male cousin that she also gets hand me downs from. They're going to the zoo to accompany Dudley on his birthday and she is being left home. There is a comment about how a women belongs in the kitchen. Both families end up fleeing because of the letters and Hagrid comes to the twos rescue. Since this is just Harry's story with Adele tagging along I'm only noting major changes and the end. Oh... they run into Angelina Johnson rather then Draco Malfoy.
ORIGIN: Her parents are Johnathan and Rose Paxton. I have the filling that Rose is supposed to be Lily and Petunia's sister as Adele is also being placed with the Dursley family. No, wait... they aren't cousins at all and end up getting put into different houses. She is still a copycat of Harry Potter. Her cousin is Dudley... I mean Jason. Her Uncle's name is Darrel and her aunt is named... let's see if I can actually find it. She gets beaten up for defending Harry. She gets added to the quiditch team too despite the fact only one should have been able to catch the item and that was the determining factor.. (No surprise really...)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Her parents ended up being killed despite the fact the prophesy specifically refers to a boy and it would have been physically impossible for Voldemort to have gone to both famlies houses. She's able to get Harry to give her a big old hug upon seeing her. They manage to stuff four kids and two adults into what is likely a small car. Their birthdays are the day after Dudley's and all those letters manage to be delivered in one day.
NOTES: The suethor says this on her profile. “i love writing, and i'm fairly good at it too.” If you're good at writing then please stop plagiarizing other people's work. She has another fanfic called “Ginny Weasly and the Deathly Hallows”. The first chapter of that is plagiarized and the other four chapters nothing really happens other then all the sixth and seventh years having to take DADA together.
SAMPLE:
The moon shined down on Privet Drive, dancing off the boring houses that all resembled the other. Albus Dumbledore fumbled through his robes, but his twinkling blue eyes were on the approaching cat.
"Fancy seeing you here, Professor McGonagall." He turned to smile at the tabby cat, but it had gone. Instead, he was smiling at a rather severe-looking woman who was wearing square glasses exactly the shape of the markings the cat had around its eyes. The woman's graying brown hair was tied in a tight bun on the top of her head.
"How did you know it was me?" she asked him.
"My dear Professor, I've never seen a cat sit quite so stiffly," Albus smiled at her.
"You'd be stiff too if you'd been sitting on a brick wall all day."
They discussed a few minor things to pass the time, but soon Professor McGonagall's expression grew solemn. She turned to look at Albus, who was fiddling with his long white beard. "How are they getting here?" she asked.
"How is who getting where?" questioned Albus.
The woman hardened her gaze. "Don't think I don't know, Albus. The entire wizarding world is gossiping about it."
Albus didn't sigh, but the woman didn't expect him to. Instead, Albus put a thin and frail hand on her shoulder and turned his sparkling blue eyes on hers. "Hagrid is bringing them here as we speak," he told her.
She stiffened. "So it's true then- what they're saying? Lily and James Potter are dead? And Jonathon and Rose?"
Albus nodded. "They died for their young ones."
Professor McGonagall looked skeptical, but Albus still noticed the pained expression that passed over her face. "This is no place for them, Albus," she insisted. "I've been sitting here all day. These muggles are as worse as they come, and they've got their own sons. Harry and Adele don't belong here."
TITLE: Adele Paxton and the Philosophers Stone
PERPETRATOR: Mandee Jo
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: Just her avatar... which I believe is of the actress for Luna Lovegood.
FULL NAME: Adele Paxton
SPECIES: quarter veela
HAIR: “ Her golden blonde hair spread around her head like a halo of sunlight”, “Both her aunt and uncle had black hair” and her cousin has “midnight black”
EYES: “ blue eyes sparkled happily”, her aunt and uncle have brown eyes, while “Jason had inherited hazel eyes from his grandfather”
MARKINGS: Adele has a matching scare on her forehead. She is also a day older then Harry. Her aunt refers to her as “Hitler's dream child.”
POSSESSIONS: a cot, “a pair of jean shorts that used to be pants”, a hair band, “ a light blue sundress that used to belong to her mother”. Vernon for some strange reason brought a sword with him to the island. Where he got one I honestly don't know. Her wand is “"Eleven inches, flexible, a strand of hair from a Veela” and “The core is half of a dragon heartstring” Actually, the Veela is only half and is from her mother while the other half of the core is from her father's wand. A bunch of prank candy... guess who she runs into while buying it. Also, Hagrid gets a black bundle and “the black bundle was a kitten. A red bow with a golden bell was tied around his neck. Harry grinned at her, and held his own caged white owl in his hands.” She names it licorice. “few pairs of jeans she'd also bought, and a red knitted hat that she'd made over the past month”, “oversized t-shirt that she used as a nightgown”. She hits a rock away and it is decided she would also make a good seeker rather then a beeter because “she probably would've caught the thing too.” (Bull...) I've rather had enough of this because when it isn't copying the story its having useless chatter between the characters.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Instead of living in a cupboard, she lives in the attic. She has a male cousin that she also gets hand me downs from. They're going to the zoo to accompany Dudley on his birthday and she is being left home. There is a comment about how a women belongs in the kitchen. Both families end up fleeing because of the letters and Hagrid comes to the twos rescue. Since this is just Harry's story with Adele tagging along I'm only noting major changes and the end. Oh... they run into Angelina Johnson rather then Draco Malfoy.
ORIGIN: Her parents are Johnathan and Rose Paxton. I have the filling that Rose is supposed to be Lily and Petunia's sister as Adele is also being placed with the Dursley family. No, wait... they aren't cousins at all and end up getting put into different houses. She is still a copycat of Harry Potter. Her cousin is Dudley... I mean Jason. Her Uncle's name is Darrel and her aunt is named... let's see if I can actually find it. She gets beaten up for defending Harry. She gets added to the quiditch team too despite the fact only one should have been able to catch the item and that was the determining factor.. (No surprise really...)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Her parents ended up being killed despite the fact the prophesy specifically refers to a boy and it would have been physically impossible for Voldemort to have gone to both famlies houses. She's able to get Harry to give her a big old hug upon seeing her. They manage to stuff four kids and two adults into what is likely a small car. Their birthdays are the day after Dudley's and all those letters manage to be delivered in one day.
NOTES: The suethor says this on her profile. “i love writing, and i'm fairly good at it too.” If you're good at writing then please stop plagiarizing other people's work. She has another fanfic called “Ginny Weasly and the Deathly Hallows”. The first chapter of that is plagiarized and the other four chapters nothing really happens other then all the sixth and seventh years having to take DADA together.
SAMPLE:
The moon shined down on Privet Drive, dancing off the boring houses that all resembled the other. Albus Dumbledore fumbled through his robes, but his twinkling blue eyes were on the approaching cat.
"Fancy seeing you here, Professor McGonagall." He turned to smile at the tabby cat, but it had gone. Instead, he was smiling at a rather severe-looking woman who was wearing square glasses exactly the shape of the markings the cat had around its eyes. The woman's graying brown hair was tied in a tight bun on the top of her head.
"How did you know it was me?" she asked him.
"My dear Professor, I've never seen a cat sit quite so stiffly," Albus smiled at her.
"You'd be stiff too if you'd been sitting on a brick wall all day."
They discussed a few minor things to pass the time, but soon Professor McGonagall's expression grew solemn. She turned to look at Albus, who was fiddling with his long white beard. "How are they getting here?" she asked.
"How is who getting where?" questioned Albus.
The woman hardened her gaze. "Don't think I don't know, Albus. The entire wizarding world is gossiping about it."
Albus didn't sigh, but the woman didn't expect him to. Instead, Albus put a thin and frail hand on her shoulder and turned his sparkling blue eyes on hers. "Hagrid is bringing them here as we speak," he told her.
She stiffened. "So it's true then- what they're saying? Lily and James Potter are dead? And Jonathon and Rose?"
Albus nodded. "They died for their young ones."
Professor McGonagall looked skeptical, but Albus still noticed the pained expression that passed over her face. "This is no place for them, Albus," she insisted. "I've been sitting here all day. These muggles are as worse as they come, and they've got their own sons. Harry and Adele don't belong here."