0126: Love and Betrayal - Christina-Lee Potter
In Sue-searching today I found a Harry-Stu. The fic claimed that Harry was descended from all four founders plus Merlin. It made my head hurt.
This fic is worse.
TITLE: Love and Betrayal
PERPETRATOR: Siri's Angel (they make it way too easy)
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
FULL NAME: Christina-Lee Potter
SPECIES: Human/Witch
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: none mentioned
POSESSIONS: none mentioned
ORIGIN: She's James Potter's cousin.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: She's madly in love with Sirius Black, is trying to matchmake between Lily and James, and is apparently dating Remus. She also somehow knows about the Marauder's Map.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Making Remus think the word 'bitch'.
NOTES: The first fic I looked at tonight gave me too much of a headache to do any sort of in-depth analysis of this one. I will say, however, that the author apparently follows Ann M. Martin's Rules of Parentheses Use.
SAMPLE:
Love and Betrayal.
Christina-Lee Potter is a 16-year-old pure blood Gryffindor, She's the cousin on James Potter, and she has her eyes set one of his best friends. Little does she know that two boys like her, which one will she chose?
(Thoughts in brackets. Please don't hate if I get something's wrong I'm not very good with the marauder time period).
Chapter one: Truth or Dare.
'Miss Potter will you please pay attention, this is the last time I'm going to ask you' Mcgonagall snapped as I gazed out the window.
(Last period on Friday is always the most boring why did she chose it? Hold on I better pay attention or I'll get a detention, which wouldn't be so bad because I could be almost alone with Sirius, if it wasn't for my stupid cousin who always seemed to be around.)
I turned back to the front of the class and pretended to be paying attention to whatever Mcgonagall was saying.
Sirius glanced in my direction. My knees went weak. (Oh my god, Sirius Black is smiling at me) I smiled back.
(Why can't I just tell him I love him) another voice sounded in my head. (Because if you do and he doesn't love you, you'll look like a ditz and he'll hate you forever) The other voice was back, (good point, let's just stick to flirting.)
The bell rang. 'Class dismissed' Mcgonagall called. 'Oh and I'd like to remind you all of the ball that will be coming up next month, and I will again remind you that permission slips must be handed in, if you haven't posted one to your parents yet I should think you'll be doing it soon.'
I packed up my books and hurried to catch up with Lily. 'Lily' I called, 'Lily' Lily slowed and turned to see me running up to her.
'Hey Chris, what's up?'
'So did you hear about the ball? Are you going?'
Lily bowed her head. 'I don't want to go alone.'
'Lily hello what about a certain cousin of mine, you know the one who's had a crush on you since the start of time' Lily rolled her eyes.
'We weren't even alive at the start of time.'
'Do it really matter, he's liked you that long' I mock rolled my eyes at her (she so hates it when I do this).
'Stop that, I do not look like that' She hit me softly on the arm.
'Yeah riiiight' I rolled my eyes again. 'Well anyway I've gotta meet Remus in the library, knowing him he's already there' I waved and set off at a run.
As always Remus had beaten me to the library. (How does he do this, I bet it's that stupid map). I entered the library; Remus looked up a sat down.
'Alright cough 'em up' He said holding out his hand. (I'm so gunna run out of chocolate frogs) I handed over 3 chocolate frogs.
'You are the biggest chocolate freak.'
'Hey you made the bet' he said shoving the chocolate in his mouth. (So doesn't mean he has to take all my chocolate frogs, stupid bet.)
'Yeah but you've got that stupid map, you know all the short cuts. Why won't you show me huh?' I made a pout-y face.
'Oh you're so cute when you look like that' Remus joked and squished my cheeks.
'Whatever, so what's doing today?'
'Excuse me' Remus turned to me.
'I said what's doing?'
'If I may correct your english madam, I think you meant to say what are we doing today, am I correct?'
I punched him on the arm. 'You are the hugest smart ass.'
'Oh you love it' he said poking his tongue at me. I poked mine back.
(If I didn't know better I'd say Remus was flirting with me, no way this is Remus. He tells me all his secrets, were just best friends.)
'So what are we doing today?' I asked sweetly.
'Well I don't know, what subject did you pay less attention to this week?'
'Hmmm?' I put a finger on my head pretending to think. 'All.'
Remus laughed. 'Imagine your grades if I wasn't here to tutor you' Remus teased.
'Hey I pull of good marks at the end of the year, is case you forgot I just 2 OWL's less than you last year' I debated.
'Fine whatever but I still stand by what I say, imagine if I wasn't here to tutor you.'
'Well then master tutor what shall you tutor me in today?' I got up and bowed.
We got some stares from other people in the library. 'Sit down you are so embarrassing' Remus said.
'Oh you love it' I teased.
'Ok let's get started, I take it you were paying less attention in Transfiguration as Mcgonagall yelled at you what was it 23 times by my count but James as 25' He smiled sweetly.
'You're the boss, you what was old Mcgonagall going on about today?'
'You mean you didn't even take notes?'
'What's the point you do' Remus gave me a "Don't sponge off me bitch" kinda look and then pulled out his notes.
'Well first of all she was showing us how to transfigure and change five rocks at the same time.'
'And what are we transfiguring them into?' I asked my bored expression back on.
'Doves' he pulled a few rocks he'd knocked off from Mcgonagall's desk onto the table.
'I'll show you with one' He pulled out his wand and muttered something softly so no one could hear and the rocks changed into doves and he quickly changed them back.
'No you try.'
He showed me exactly what to do and how to say the words and straight away I changed them.
I smiled sweetly and he a little shocked.
'How is it that everytime we have to learn something new you get it straight away?'
I shrugged. 'But you see Remus there's this thing they have called talent and I'm just oozing with it' I smiled sweetly and he returned the smile.
'Sorry miss perfect but you see unlike you my talent does not ooze it radiates' I laughed.
'And I thought I was in denial' We both laughed and continued to study his transfiguration notes.
This fic is worse.
TITLE: Love and Betrayal
PERPETRATOR: Siri's Angel (they make it way too easy)
SUE-O-METER:
(awful)
FULL NAME: Christina-Lee Potter
SPECIES: Human/Witch
HAIR: not described
EYES: not described
MARKINGS: none mentioned
POSESSIONS: none mentioned
ORIGIN: She's James Potter's cousin.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: She's madly in love with Sirius Black, is trying to matchmake between Lily and James, and is apparently dating Remus. She also somehow knows about the Marauder's Map.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Making Remus think the word 'bitch'.
NOTES: The first fic I looked at tonight gave me too much of a headache to do any sort of in-depth analysis of this one. I will say, however, that the author apparently follows Ann M. Martin's Rules of Parentheses Use.
SAMPLE:
Love and Betrayal.
Christina-Lee Potter is a 16-year-old pure blood Gryffindor, She's the cousin on James Potter, and she has her eyes set one of his best friends. Little does she know that two boys like her, which one will she chose?
(Thoughts in brackets. Please don't hate if I get something's wrong I'm not very good with the marauder time period).
Chapter one: Truth or Dare.
'Miss Potter will you please pay attention, this is the last time I'm going to ask you' Mcgonagall snapped as I gazed out the window.
(Last period on Friday is always the most boring why did she chose it? Hold on I better pay attention or I'll get a detention, which wouldn't be so bad because I could be almost alone with Sirius, if it wasn't for my stupid cousin who always seemed to be around.)
I turned back to the front of the class and pretended to be paying attention to whatever Mcgonagall was saying.
Sirius glanced in my direction. My knees went weak. (Oh my god, Sirius Black is smiling at me) I smiled back.
(Why can't I just tell him I love him) another voice sounded in my head. (Because if you do and he doesn't love you, you'll look like a ditz and he'll hate you forever) The other voice was back, (good point, let's just stick to flirting.)
The bell rang. 'Class dismissed' Mcgonagall called. 'Oh and I'd like to remind you all of the ball that will be coming up next month, and I will again remind you that permission slips must be handed in, if you haven't posted one to your parents yet I should think you'll be doing it soon.'
I packed up my books and hurried to catch up with Lily. 'Lily' I called, 'Lily' Lily slowed and turned to see me running up to her.
'Hey Chris, what's up?'
'So did you hear about the ball? Are you going?'
Lily bowed her head. 'I don't want to go alone.'
'Lily hello what about a certain cousin of mine, you know the one who's had a crush on you since the start of time' Lily rolled her eyes.
'We weren't even alive at the start of time.'
'Do it really matter, he's liked you that long' I mock rolled my eyes at her (she so hates it when I do this).
'Stop that, I do not look like that' She hit me softly on the arm.
'Yeah riiiight' I rolled my eyes again. 'Well anyway I've gotta meet Remus in the library, knowing him he's already there' I waved and set off at a run.
As always Remus had beaten me to the library. (How does he do this, I bet it's that stupid map). I entered the library; Remus looked up a sat down.
'Alright cough 'em up' He said holding out his hand. (I'm so gunna run out of chocolate frogs) I handed over 3 chocolate frogs.
'You are the biggest chocolate freak.'
'Hey you made the bet' he said shoving the chocolate in his mouth. (So doesn't mean he has to take all my chocolate frogs, stupid bet.)
'Yeah but you've got that stupid map, you know all the short cuts. Why won't you show me huh?' I made a pout-y face.
'Oh you're so cute when you look like that' Remus joked and squished my cheeks.
'Whatever, so what's doing today?'
'Excuse me' Remus turned to me.
'I said what's doing?'
'If I may correct your english madam, I think you meant to say what are we doing today, am I correct?'
I punched him on the arm. 'You are the hugest smart ass.'
'Oh you love it' he said poking his tongue at me. I poked mine back.
(If I didn't know better I'd say Remus was flirting with me, no way this is Remus. He tells me all his secrets, were just best friends.)
'So what are we doing today?' I asked sweetly.
'Well I don't know, what subject did you pay less attention to this week?'
'Hmmm?' I put a finger on my head pretending to think. 'All.'
Remus laughed. 'Imagine your grades if I wasn't here to tutor you' Remus teased.
'Hey I pull of good marks at the end of the year, is case you forgot I just 2 OWL's less than you last year' I debated.
'Fine whatever but I still stand by what I say, imagine if I wasn't here to tutor you.'
'Well then master tutor what shall you tutor me in today?' I got up and bowed.
We got some stares from other people in the library. 'Sit down you are so embarrassing' Remus said.
'Oh you love it' I teased.
'Ok let's get started, I take it you were paying less attention in Transfiguration as Mcgonagall yelled at you what was it 23 times by my count but James as 25' He smiled sweetly.
'You're the boss, you what was old Mcgonagall going on about today?'
'You mean you didn't even take notes?'
'What's the point you do' Remus gave me a "Don't sponge off me bitch" kinda look and then pulled out his notes.
'Well first of all she was showing us how to transfigure and change five rocks at the same time.'
'And what are we transfiguring them into?' I asked my bored expression back on.
'Doves' he pulled a few rocks he'd knocked off from Mcgonagall's desk onto the table.
'I'll show you with one' He pulled out his wand and muttered something softly so no one could hear and the rocks changed into doves and he quickly changed them back.
'No you try.'
He showed me exactly what to do and how to say the words and straight away I changed them.
I smiled sweetly and he a little shocked.
'How is it that everytime we have to learn something new you get it straight away?'
I shrugged. 'But you see Remus there's this thing they have called talent and I'm just oozing with it' I smiled sweetly and he returned the smile.
'Sorry miss perfect but you see unlike you my talent does not ooze it radiates' I laughed.
'And I thought I was in denial' We both laughed and continued to study his transfiguration notes.