4178: A Malfoy in Gryffindor - Pheonix Malfoy
One of the Suethors wishes to let anyone who’s interested know that they’d finished their story.
Title: A Malfoy in Gryffindor (repost)
Perpetrator: Mezita
Sue-O-Meter: Bad, but could easily become an awful or toxic if the writer isn’t careful. TOXIC!!!! One of the minions left a review, something I'm fine with. The Suethor didn't like said review and decided to explain why she's correct, only for said explanation to make things worse. I only found out because one of the minions noticed said writer decided to delete and repost.
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is the Malfoy crest cropped.
Summary: “Maybe the Sorting Hat has made a mistake, or perhaps this is her real destination. The first Malfoy to be selected for the Gryffindor house, Phoenix, make friends with the Golden Trio and will perhaps during her journey, she will find redemption for her family.”
Full Name: Phoenix Malfoy
Species: Yet another twin who does something unexpected.
Hair: See markings.
Eyes: See markings I guess? Actually, since looks contradict what’s known for the Malfoy family…
Markings: “My new story ! I hope you imagine the (Pheonix), like her mother, with brown hair and blonde locks. Hope you like it!”
Possessions:
Connection to Canon: She’s Draco’s twin sister. She gets sorted into Gryffindor in the one and only table. She dorms with the three other girls in Gryffindor. (Actually, just because we only know the names of the three doesn’t mean there are only three.)
Origin: Draco has yet another sister who is curious about Muggles. Some of the lines are from canon, but it follows the plot to closely, so I’m tagging this parasite sue as well.
Special Abilities: She’s a super cliché Mary Sue.
Notes: I doubt English is the writer’s first language. On top of their profile indicating they’re from Brazil, the use of the word “environment” stood out.
Edit (2/2/2018): I also suspect the writer is very young, as they deleted and reposted upon getting a negative review. A negative review I might add I happened to see, and know quite well didn't cross the line. Looking the other stories on their profile, and taking the deletion into consideration, I've got to wonder if the Suethor is actually old enough to have an account on the site.
Sample:
Phoenix Malfoy was lively next to her mother, Narcissa. She and her twin brother Draco would start attending Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry and they were on their way to the station where they would take the train to school.
"Go ahead with Draco, Lucius, "says Narcissa.
When they saw the two pass through the secret passage to the platform, she and her mother followed them. What Phoenix found, were other children and young people boarding the train that was ready to leave.
"Now is the time to say goodbye. Do not forget what we talked about school and the houses, Slytherin in the first place. Ever. I'm so proud of you, my little ones. "Narcissa said this between a kiss on each child's head. "And Draco, take care of your sister."
"Sure enough, Mom, "Draco said with a proud smile of being the eldest son for a minute, and for winning that responsibility from his mother.
"Mom, I know how to take care of myself. "
"Listen to your mother, Phoenix. You never know who you can find at that school. Especially with these muggleborns attending our environment. "Said Lucius Malfoy with his smug face. It was no secret how much the Muggles disgusted him. This was a fight between father and daughter, since Phoenix was the opposite of her family. She always asked about them and their customs, sometimes she asked Dobby to go to a Muggle shop to get some object for her. Which made the elf the girl's second best friend, after her brother.
Title: A Malfoy in Gryffindor (repost)
Perpetrator: Mezita
Sue-O-Meter: Bad, but could easily become an awful or toxic if the writer isn’t careful. TOXIC!!!! One of the minions left a review, something I'm fine with. The Suethor didn't like said review and decided to explain why she's correct, only for said explanation to make things worse. I only found out because one of the minions noticed said writer decided to delete and repost.
Cover/Banner Art: The cover is the Malfoy crest cropped.
Summary: “Maybe the Sorting Hat has made a mistake, or perhaps this is her real destination. The first Malfoy to be selected for the Gryffindor house, Phoenix, make friends with the Golden Trio and will perhaps during her journey, she will find redemption for her family.”
Full Name: Phoenix Malfoy
Species: Yet another twin who does something unexpected.
Hair: See markings.
Eyes: See markings I guess? Actually, since looks contradict what’s known for the Malfoy family…
Markings: “My new story ! I hope you imagine the (Pheonix), like her mother, with brown hair and blonde locks. Hope you like it!”
Possessions:
Connection to Canon: She’s Draco’s twin sister. She gets sorted into Gryffindor in the one and only table. She dorms with the three other girls in Gryffindor. (Actually, just because we only know the names of the three doesn’t mean there are only three.)
Origin: Draco has yet another sister who is curious about Muggles. Some of the lines are from canon, but it follows the plot to closely, so I’m tagging this parasite sue as well.
Special Abilities: She’s a super cliché Mary Sue.
Notes: I doubt English is the writer’s first language. On top of their profile indicating they’re from Brazil, the use of the word “environment” stood out.
Edit (2/2/2018): I also suspect the writer is very young, as they deleted and reposted upon getting a negative review. A negative review I might add I happened to see, and know quite well didn't cross the line. Looking the other stories on their profile, and taking the deletion into consideration, I've got to wonder if the Suethor is actually old enough to have an account on the site.
Sample:
Phoenix Malfoy was lively next to her mother, Narcissa. She and her twin brother Draco would start attending Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry and they were on their way to the station where they would take the train to school.
"Go ahead with Draco, Lucius, "says Narcissa.
When they saw the two pass through the secret passage to the platform, she and her mother followed them. What Phoenix found, were other children and young people boarding the train that was ready to leave.
"Now is the time to say goodbye. Do not forget what we talked about school and the houses, Slytherin in the first place. Ever. I'm so proud of you, my little ones. "Narcissa said this between a kiss on each child's head. "And Draco, take care of your sister."
"Sure enough, Mom, "Draco said with a proud smile of being the eldest son for a minute, and for winning that responsibility from his mother.
"Mom, I know how to take care of myself. "
"Listen to your mother, Phoenix. You never know who you can find at that school. Especially with these muggleborns attending our environment. "Said Lucius Malfoy with his smug face. It was no secret how much the Muggles disgusted him. This was a fight between father and daughter, since Phoenix was the opposite of her family. She always asked about them and their customs, sometimes she asked Dobby to go to a Muggle shop to get some object for her. Which made the elf the girl's second best friend, after her brother.