Jack/Will... first attempt at slash

[mad_mary_flint]

I'm basically trying to get feedback on this story. I've submitted it to a couple of sites. One doesn't seem to be updating right now, and the other updates too much - I've disappeared into the void. I'm going to post the URL instead of the story itself... trying to get a few votes on the other site, maybe bump my story into the Top Submissions so that people will actually read it. Anyway, thanks for your time. Here it is:

http://www.parleyarchive.net/subs.php?op=visit&lid=326