I Will Possess Your Heart 2/10
Title: I Will Possess Your Heart 2/10
Author: yaoi_anti_drug
Beta: ladywilde80Pairings: Sylar/Mohinder, eventual Elle/Claire ( Read more... )
Author: yaoi_anti_drug
Beta: ladywilde80Pairings: Sylar/Mohinder, eventual Elle/Claire ( Read more... )
I'm loving this story. The lovely frienship you have going between Elle and Mohinder is making me unreasonably happy. I love how she is flirty but both of them know it isn't going anywhere and she probably doesn't really mean it; a lot of male/female friendships are like that, so this is a very believable way of handling it. I adored the bit where Sylar freezes their drinks (power usage FTW!) and how she asked to let them finish the drinks as a way of being a good friend to Mo. I also really loved her reaction to having to do paperwork; that was such a real life kind of whine about a change in management of a company... normal companies, and not just super secret super-powered ones.
Finding out Claire's motivation was very interesting and well done. I found it interesting that Mo doesn't figure much in her thoughts except as something to distract Sylar. Hmmm, many battles have been lost by underestimating our dear Mohinder.
Would you let me fuck you then, Mohinder?”
The vulgar word reverberated in Mohinder's mind, successfully jarring him out of Sylar's spell.
But even more than the Mo/Elle friendship, THIS was my favorite part of this chapter. I don't know how to articulate this well, but I love that you addressed this. I find that to be a very vulgar word when used to proposition someone that you honestly have no business propositioning like that, and it happens all the time in fic. But I don't think I've ever seen Mo having that (in my opinion) extremely natural and realistic and in character reaction to Sylar saying that to him on the first proposition. I don't know how to put it better, but I LOVED that bit.
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I'm so glad you're liking it! Mohinder and Elle in this are so much fun to write. I do write them like high school best friends, a girl and a guy. Maybe a handsome 'popular' guy and an old best friend that just happened to be female. The sort of flirtation that goes with it that doesn't necessary mean anything, y'know? Or did I just completely screw that up... *gives up explaining things* lol. I love how Elle was angry about the paperwork more than anything else, it was, as you said, such a mundane complaint.
I'm so glad Claire's motivations went over well with you! That makes me so happy, because I worked hard on it. I know my Claire is not 'canon', but I'm trying to make her as realistic as possible and some people just are not buying it. I thought it was because it was because I couldn't write worth a crap, or that some people just couldn't see her as going 'dark, or whatever else...It got me so worried, so I'm so friggin happy it worked for you! You've no idea! *squees*
Ohh, I'm so glad you liked that part as well! It was actually one of my favorites, because, like you said, so many people have taken the supposedly insulting word and put it into their smut fics as being proper sounding and used all the time. (Whether the smut is consensual or non-con) I've been guilty of this myself. When I was writing it, I was like "Mohinder would not take to that kindly" and then that reaction came about. Like a girl being asked for sex in a bar when she just wants to have a good time with friends, O.o... Maybe I should stop with the analogies...lol
Anyways, thank you so much for commenting! Thank you, thank you x250!
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