Nimbostratus on the Shore (Gen, PG)

[pixel_0]

Title: Nimbostratus on the Shore
Rating: PG
Category: Gen ficlet
Word Count: 473
Characters: Dean and Sam
Spoilers: None
Summary: She only dances when it storms.
Disclaimer: The following characters and situations are used without permission of the creators, owners, and further affiliates of the television show, Supernatural, to whom they rightly belong.

Comments

[pixel_0]

The weird thing is right after I posted this, a Charlotte Martin song, "Everytime it Rains" popped up on my Yahoo Launch Player. Oh, irony...

Thank you very much! :)

[tsuki_no_bara]

oh, sammy. *smish* this is lovely and evocative and a little wild.

[pixel_0]

Thank you. I like the little addition of the "wild;" it doesn't make it seem quite oh-so-angsty. :)

[iamstealthyone]

Ooh, nice. Moody and lovely.

Favorite lines:

Yet when he turns onto his other side, he sees Sam standing by the window, a tall black silhouette highlighted in the pale shots of lightning. Sam’s arms are crossed, hands cupping his elbows, hair wild and mussed around the tips of his ears. The thunder snaps and pops, the rain taps the window glass with jagged little nails, and he doesn’t flinch.

Awesome description.

Outside the window where Sam stares, the ocean is frenzied froths of white energy. Bubbling and thrashing like an angry monster, the greedy waves roll up onto the dark silver sand of the night, lick the shoreline, and slurp their way back to sea.

I really like how vivid this is, the comparison of the ocean with a monster. So appropriate for a Winchester story.

They stand and stare until the black clouds fade to orange wisps of morning, until the waves calm themselves and sleep on their rocky beds, and she floats away on the breeze with dove’s wings.

Beautiful ending.

Thanks for a good read.

[pixel_0]

I really like how vivid this is, the comparison of the ocean with a monster. So appropriate for a Winchester story.

Thank you. I have a bad habit of personifying things that I shouldn't, but the monster relation really fits with their lives way too well.

Again, thank you for your kind words. I'm glad to know that you enjoyed it. :)

[mellaithwen]

bad pixel not telling me about this, bad, bad, bad pixel

loved the image of her dancing with the roaring waves, and LIGHTNING, not enough of that in the shoooow

[pixel_0]

Hee. I actually wrote it fifteen minutes and then posted it right after, so I guess you could say there wasn't any time to tell you. ;)

I love the lightning. That's actually where the plot bunny started: Sam and Dean looking outside while it was lightning out. Then came the ocean and the girl and...well...just this.

Thanks for the compliments, hun. :)

[mellaithwen]

...well, I'll let you off just this once

We need fics in the rain, no, we need EPISODES in a god damn storm, rain pelting down, hail, lightning across the sky, wind--dammit kripkeeper!

[_sapphiredreams]

You have such a great rythmn to your words. I feel like I say that a lot but it's true! :P That was also a great opening line.

[pixel_0]

Oh, you can say it as many times as you want. I'm all up for a good rhythm with the words. I like pretty fic that has a poetry-like feel to it, and while I can't always write it, it makes me happy to know that I can at least come sort of close.

Thank you very much. :)