Gather the Flies (Gen, R)

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Title: Gather the Flies
Rating: R for language and subject matter (see warnings)
Category: Gen oneshot
Word Count: 5897
Characters: Dean, John, and OCs
Spoilers: None
Summary: Dean is kidnapped. John is a father.
Warnings: This story includes-to varying degrees of explicitness-the following topics: pedophilia, child abuse, cannibalism, torture, and murder

Comments

[mmarinov]

Argh, I was too scared to read this, I read the first and last bit though and my heart still breaks.

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It's definitely not an easy read, so I wouldn't encourage it especially if you're easily squicked (or even not so easily squicked. Heck, I read Stephen King novels, and I was still having a difficult time just writing this.) Thank you, though, for reading the first and last parts. I really appreciate it. :)

[gilawoof]

wow. This hurts, in kind of a numbing way. It's very gentle and very harsh. Very real depictions of John and wee!Dean that are more innocent and... well, *real*, and young, I suppose, as they start, and this is one major turning point that serves to harden John, if not both of them.

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Very real depictions of John and wee!Dean that are more innocent and... well, *real*, and young, I suppose, as they start, and this is one major turning point that serves to harden John, if not both of them.

I'd like to think that they wouldn't be as hardened as we see them in the show. After all, it's not even yet three years since Mary died, and John's just sort of getting into hunting. I'm glad that you found John and Dean's characterizations to be real. I had a hard time trying to sort through how they would be in this kind of situation--especially with John.

Thank you very much for the feedback. I truly appreciate it. :)

[arabella_hope]

...he would never be able to see a rat again without thinking of this experience. Oh, GOD.

This was so very terrifying to read and...you captured the fear and horror perfectly and...I don't know what else to say. *bawls*

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This was so very terrifying to read and...you captured the fear and horror perfectly and...I don't know what else to say. *bawls*

Oh, I'm so sorry. *passes Kleenex* Really, this story was hard even to write, so I know that it's not an easy read. Thank you, though, for reading it and giving feedback. I really do appreciate it.

[_sapphiredreams]

A well thought out story.

I was amused at your need to define antisocial personality disorder. ;) Yea for psych majors! :)

It's nice to read stories with meaning, like this one.

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was amused at your need to define antisocial personality disorder. ;) Yea for psych majors! :)

Hee. Yeah, I felt I had to define it. I always hate it when I read challenge stories like this with a prompt I just don't "get," and there's so many people who could read this story from so many different backgrounds because, hey, we can't all be psych majors. ;) (Because how difficult would that be for us to get a job?)

Thank you very much for the feedback. :)

[bluesister]

But, Dean Winchester, childish boy whose mother had not even been dead three years, was not tall, old or well educated. He could not see what awaited him if he was not saved soon.

You almost lost me at the child's severed head but your writing dragged me on.

The terror had leaked into his blood, weakening and, ultimately, paralyzing him.

Nicely done.

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You almost lost me at the child's severed head but your writing dragged me on.

I probably wouldn't have blamed you any if you had stopped after the severed head; it was easily the hardest part to write. But, thank you though for continuing to read--although I hope it doesn't sound like that I'm happy you were probably grossed out beyond all possible belief. I really just appreciate your feedback.