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[pitza]

Title: Of Nuptials
Pairing: House/Wilson
Rating: NC-17
Summary: His first marriage is a failure. His second isn't any better.
Warnings/Dislaimers/Spoilers: Weird!fic, spurred by too much alcohol. (Semi)-coercive intercourse. An alternate history. This is BJ(BeforeJulie)!Wilson, after his second marriage.

Comments

[amproof]

You really got into Wilson's head. Reading this was like being trapped in there. I was a little confused on the sex b/c you never say that Wilson *enters* House, you just go from humping his thigh to thrusting harder, and I only figured out that sex was actually happening when you said that he had pulled out. Aside from that, that paragraph was so intense, it was great.

One thing you may want to check--the grammar is a little off in places and it pulled me out of the story b/c I had to think about what you meant. For example, the sentence where House parks the cane and undresses, those verbs should not end in s.

he spats. Actually, he spits. Spats are for your shoes.

fucking limpet. Limpet is a Brit word. Would House use it? Up to you.

"Oh." Thinking about cosmetics makes him want to weep again.Brilliant line

[rinoachan326]

um... what does limpet mean?

[amproof]

I don't know! I'm American. I've only ever heard it used by Brits.

*gets dictionary off desk*

ok. Webster says "a mollusk that clings to rocks"

right. got that cleared up. Go us!

[pitza]

I was a little confused on the sex b/c you never say that Wilson *enters* House
Whoops... forgive me.... ummm... I added a small paragraph to that. But I don't know whether it'll work or not... I'm always so scared when writing sex scenes... *hangs head*

And thank you for the grammar-beta, I tried to rectify some of 'em... but.... ummm... I don't know if there are any more... *facepalms* I'm really hopeless at the grammar/vocab department (my English marm will tell you how crappy I am).

Limpet is a Brit word. Would House use it? Up to you.
*g* Actually that is the only word I know for a 'clinging' mollusc. What do you usually use? I apologize again... I'm just too ignorant. But I'm trying to be better... *g* Maybe leeching? But limpets and leeches are quite different? or not?

I don't really know if there's going to be a House POV, there's a half-a-plotbunny of one for it, but... uh... it's a half-bunny.

It is a *huge* thing for him to not only keep quiet, but to allow himself to be abused,It is... But when I was writing this, I

[amproof]

I love all the thought you are putting into this. I forgot to say this before, but one of my favorite lines was House saying he had come to "collect" Wilson. It actually kind of sets the tone for his behavior later b/c even though he's not too clued in on what Wilson feels for him, he *is* the one who has tracked him down to a strange bar and who is trying to take care of him. So, that's a rather big clue that could be expanded on if you do a House p.o.v. :)

Limpet--I'm going to guess that Americans do use the same word b/c it is in my dictionary, but it's not in common use except maybe by scientists. (Which would explain how House knows it.) LOL But now that I know what it is, I, and my fellow Americans surely think it is the best word! Maybe you could have Wilson ask wtf a limpet is. He's so drunk he's probably forgotten. Or you could have Wilson wonder to himself and then decide he doesn't care and go on molesting House. LOL So, would you say it is a common insult for Brits?

I like the new paragraph. Well done!

Am

[pitza]

*g* I don't know about it being a common insult. But it's widely used by myself and my playground friends. Basically there's the insult: "you're a muppet", but long-long time ago, after biology, a mate came up with: "you're a muppet, fugging limpet" and it stuck... kind of.

But "muppet" is more common than "limpet"... but I may be wrong even.. *g* let's have a Brit-vote! *g*

Anyway, that's my story, type thing.

;)

[amproof]

Ah, kids. LOL

I forgot to offer before, but if you need someone to go over the grammar for you on the sequel, which I see from comments below you might be collaborating on, I'll be happy to volunteer. :)

[pitza]

*g* cooool! I'm so honoured if you'd like to be my beta next time.. *g* the fic that I'm working on now is the 2nd part of the julie-fic, but I'll understand if you'd not want to (it's a julie-centric fic type thing).

extrabitter is doing the fic, because she has this fab plotbunny and from what I learnt... it's a very very good fic *g* I really can't wait to read that one. It'll be damn good! *g*

Thank you for all your help! *g*

[amproof]

I've got no problems with Julie. I don't even know the lady! LOL

You can email me at silent_kid @ lycos.com whenever you want.