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Code Geass: The Road to Babel Tower (1/1)

Jul 02, 2008 13:53

Title: The Road to Babel Tower (1/1)
Fandom: Code Geass
Author: blahchiharu
Pairing: Lulu/Rolo (?)
Rating: G
wordcount: ~2500
Summary: Lelouch is nothing but an assignment, yet he is everything else to Rolo as well. Pre R2. Rolo centric.

( Lelouch wakes up on the fourth day. He spends the first few nights calling after forgotten names in his sleep, feverishly shifting in his bed. Rolo sets a glass of water on the bedside table and watches as the 11th prince of Britannia suffer through familiar nightmares. He wonders if this is really Zero, because a boy who unknowingly cries in his sleep for his sister, his mother, and the friend that betrayed him seems too vulnerable. )

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Comments 26

fujiappletan July 2 2008, 18:46:09 UTC

Really enjoyed it, the large spaces in between gives the feeling that time has passed by.

Also this: “You can decide this time, Nii-san.” Rolo smiles and hopes that he doesn’t sound too excited. <----so endearing. ;____; ♥

chiharu July 2 2008, 19:06:12 UTC

I know, poor BB. The worst thing is that Lelouch doesn't understand how he affected Rolo ):

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chiharu July 2 2008, 19:07:16 UTC

Haha, the sections would have been longer if my brain had the capacity to write that much.

Thanks for reading~

honou_no_izumi July 2 2008, 18:54:37 UTC

Well... not bad. Yet there are several typoes needed to be fixed.

an escape latter = an escape ladder

who blinks back curelessly - I think you mean cluelessly

scarifies - sacrifies

muttering death threats until his breathe - I think you meant under his breath

chiharu July 2 2008, 19:04:57 UTC

GUH. This is why I shouldn't proofread my own writing :/ Fixed!

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chiharu July 2 2008, 19:08:53 UTC

A couple of people have complimented my format, but I actually use this for all of my fics XD

Thanks for reading!

konata_kawaii July 2 2008, 22:21:30 UTC

I really LOVED this.
Real funny, because I usually don't read fics much.
But I gave this one a shot, because it was Rolo~~~. (I love him xD)

I agree with tentationem, I liked how the time passage was done as well.

chiharu July 2 2008, 22:34:28 UTC

Rolo is worth weeding through fanfics for :)

Thanks for reading!