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I had to write a story for English, read it!!! And tell me what you think. I feel as if the ending is a bit awkward.. I suck at endings.
Unexpectedly, the elevator stops. The lit sign above the door reads ‘Bathos’. The elevator doors open and a girl with dark blue hair wearing a long, flowing blue gown appears before it. Mercure looks quickly at Phoenix and then back at the girl again.
“Are you guys going up?” She asks.
“Yes,” Mercure nodded, “to The End of the World.”
“Oh, that’s just where I was heading,” the girl says in a soft song-like whisper, “did you guys feel it too?”
Mercure and Phoenix both nod and smile.
“Well, let’s go check it out together,” the girl says and walks inside the elevator. “By the way, my name is Rain-Daughter.”
“I’m Phoenix, and this is Mercure,” offers Phoenix. “We’re from Mother Earth.”
Rain-Daughter smiles, and the elevator shakes and starts rising faster and faster. After about a minute, it stops and the lit sign now says ‘The End of the World’. They hear the sound of a faint bell and the doors open.
The three young trans-dimensional explorers step out of the elevator and into a gigantic room as large as three football-fields and had to be at least 30 feet tall. The walls are lined top-to-bottom and wall-to-wall with books, with many more bookshelves scattered throughout the middle of the room, and the ceiling was a magnificent stained glass window. As they all admire this room in awe, a scrawny teenaged boy with messy hair and rectangular glasses peers at the visitors from behind a bookshelf. He gingerly stepps out from behind his hiding place.
“Hullo…” He greets his unexpected visitors.
They all turn to face him.
“Hi!” Rain-daughter says, “We’ve come to visit you. I’m Rain-daughter and this is Mercure and Phoenix.”
“Oh. Hi. I’m Vorex. I don’t usually get visitors here. Most people don’t like the sound of The End of the World.”
“But it’s beautiful here!” Mercure exclaims.
“Yeah, I guess, but it gets kind of lonely...” Vorex sighs. “Do you guys want to see The Spin Room?”
Everyone nods and follows Vorex to a tiny door in a bookshelf, almost completely hidden except for the shiny brass doorknob. Behind the hidden door was a winding stone staircase that led to a white cylindrical room with a step all around to sit on. They all sit down.
Suddenly, projections appear on the walls (which seemed impossible because there was nothing around that could’ve projected them, but they were all too amazed to ask) and the pictures start spinning around faster and faster so it was like they were being surrounded by a movie. They watched flowers grow and die and change colours, they flew into space and back in time to the 1920s and to the top of a volcano… Eventually they departed The Spin Room and returned to the library.
“That was fantastic!” Phoenix cried out.
“Yes, it was beautiful!” agreed Rain-daughter.
They all seated themselves comfortably around a round table as Vorex brought them all hot cocoa.
“So, why did you guys come up here, anyway?” Vorex questioned.
“We both felt a cry of loneliness coming from somewhere very far away,” Mercure said, speaking for Phoenix too.
“I felt it, also,” Rain-daughter added gently.
“Yeah… I never get any visitors here, it really gets quite lonely,” Vorex admitted.
“Well don’t worry! We’ll come visit often,” Phoenix said.
Vorex smiled gratefully at his new-found friends. They talked some more, about books they enjoy, and places they want to visit, and discussed dreams they’ve had and what they could possibly mean.
Suddenly, Rain-daughter gasped. They all looked at her and it seemed like she was slowly fading away.
“I’ve been away from my world for too long,” she explained. “There’s not enough water here, and I’m evaporating… I hate to say this, but I have to go.”
Mercure and Phoenix decided it was time for them to return to their home too, for it was getting rather late. They bid their new friend farewell and promised they would return very soon.
But sadly, when the three friends entered the elevator, it malfunctioned and took them all to a Hell dimension that they couldn’t
escape. Vorex awaited his friends’ return for years and years, but his heart sunk deeper with each lonely day.