For the Greater Good: Part Two [Fic]

[pink_bambi13]

For the Greater Good

Summary: Albus Dumbledore’s life, secrets and weaknesses through the eyes of Minerva McGonagall. One Shot.
Disclaimer: I do not own anything in relation to Harry Potter. If I did, I would be swimming in a vat of money and small change.
Pairings: Gellert/Albus
Warnings: None really

Part Two

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Comments

[cinderbella333]

This was extremely well-done. The pacing of the story was perfect. The POV you chose was unexpected and thus refreshing but still in the perfect place to have access to events and insights into Dumbledore. The man you painted Dumbledore as was completely believable in the context of canon. He was grandfatherly. He was authoritative. He was inspiring. But he also had those moments where he seemed human, where he seemed darker, and that was excellent. And then the relationship you presented between him and Grindelwald. So subtle. So understated. But because of that, so poignant. It felt like it was always there in the background, this silent tragedy. That was just so bittersweet and so well-done. Also, you did a fantastic job with Minerva's character. You gave her background motivations that every living-breathing human being has but wasn't there in canon. You also showed her growing as a person and as a leader. She was insightful about things but she was also blind too. In particular, when it came to the relationship between Dumbledore and Grindelwald. I mean, it was there in the little presumptions that hindered her thoughts. Like her thinking that she couldn't imagine a *woman* spectacular enough for Dumbledore to fall in love with. It didn't even occur to her to think about men and there is a man right in front of her with a long-standing, mysterious relationship with Dumbledore, asking if he ever fell in love. Even Harry got it.

Still, I need to wrap this up because I'm going to run out of room in this comment. Um, there were only a few things that bothered me. One sentence you had said, "He was irresistible to resist." I would suggest changing the word irresistible, since by definition you can't resist something irresistible. That just really threw me out of it. And then, all the times it should have been "than" you had it written as "then." But those are really small things. Overall, your story was brilliant. I have already recommended it to others. This was truly unique and a wonderful read.

[pink_bambi13]

Oh my gosh. I can not possibly begin to explain just how amazing your review is. Thank you so much for reading this fic and for pointing out both it's positive's and it's faults. It is a great compliment to be told that Dumbledore is in-character, especially since only one side to the man is revealed in the books. I did a lot of research for this fic on the characters, especially on dates. I wanted Minerva to seem like a person, rather then a teacher. She has her fears and wants, just like the rest of us!

I absolutely agree with your criticism. That line really doesn't make a lot of sense (although I will admit that it sounds nice to say out loud :D). 'Than,' and 'then,' are the bane's of my life. I'm still very young so I've only just got over the, 'where,' 'were' and, 'we're,' hurdle. I am certainly going to have to make that task my next priority!

Once again, thank you so much for reviewing! I really appreciated EVERYTHING that you had to say!