[hetalia/giripan_xmas] And yet the heart sings

[ezyl]

this was written for the giripan_xmas exchange. =)

Title: And yet the heart sings
Recipient: gohanisyummy!
Rated: pg
Squickers: mpreg, wrote this while listening to Shakira, casual name-switching like nobody's business.
Summary: There are stars in the garden.
Notes: I've never written mpreg before, so I hope it's not too awful. ;w; I hope you like it, gohanisyummy! Happy holidays. =

Comments

[sonofon]

Although I actually feel like that this fic has a break away from what you usually write, I will attempt and write in-depth of what I felt reading this. I probably got everything all wrong so you can look at me and go HA HA YOU GADERPSTER but I tried okok ;;

Anyway, I really liked the characterization. In this fic I really liked how you wrote Japan, a willing skeptic, slightly eccentric, but still very much Japan. I loved the conversation with his cat. Not to mention the Irish soap (and goat milk oh my ford!)

"And so I know he isn't real, because no real mythical being gives out candy for free."

Because it's so cute and so Greece, therefore I love it.

The 'story with sides' really captures their three-way relationship with Turkey. The still-existing tensions between Turkey and Greece, how Japan happens (manages?) to fall in with them. There's nothing hateful said but you do know, and I actually really like that.

Also, throughout I always got the feeling that Japan was hallucinating. I'm not sure why. Certain phrases kept it ambiguous and I like vagueness so much I automatically associate it with hallucination ffff There was something really aloof and vulnerable about him, but he still seemed strong, like he was trying to keep it together and everything despite being, you know, pregnant. The Christmas backdrop and Greece's presence made it all the more lovely, too. A hopeful sad is what I got and really, I hope you believe me when I say I like this. It's not intense, per se, but still powerful in its implications. I know you really really want to improve even though you're already amazing and this probably wasn't very helpful, oops; either way: you are so awfully good, bb &hearts!

[ezyl]

oh saiko ;A; you didn't have to do this ;A; just because i bitched about my writing over aim and fffff I always say stupid stuff when it gets too late sldkjf ;A;A;A; I love you so ♥

First, lol yeah I think you read way too deeply into it because I had no idea I was hinting at a Greece/Japan/Turkey thing but now that you mention it, yeah I do see it. >_> But other than that, pff hallucinations I think I understand what you're getting at. My guess is that it's the old habit slipping up. I'm trying to keep myself in check when it comes to furiously pounding out nonsense but it's still very much mada mada dane. |D

One of my friends got me goat's milk soap for Christmas this year. I was going to be all /OFFENDED DO YOU THINK I SMELL OR SOMETHING B( but then I opened the box and sniffed the thing and it smelled ~heavenly~ I really do recommend it; made my skin all ~smooth~ and shiny. *u*

lmao you didn't actually say anything bad about it = not helpful

[sonofon]

b-but I thought the point of in-depth reviewing was to look too deeply into it!! Otherwise fff you do that all the time with my fic ;A;

No, but seriously, I like your old habit. It makes everything ever so vague and out-of-touch with reality. And that sounded really weird because I don't know how to say it but yeah.

and fff the point was to say what I thought about it, only with 738132391 more words than usual, so there &hearts

[ezyl]

>: You're supposed to like, meet me halfway. Or something like that. And well I think it's because you're a deep writer and I'm not. So it's justified. :D

But the old habit dies easily and it gets awfully repetitive and everything SOUNDS THE SAME do not deny it D|

y-you're awful sobs why do you make me so happy i'm going to cry now