WEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!

[phoenixeiros]

Dear Musashi,

It begins!! Huzzah. And I have posting. I felt very bad because everyone else already had writing way before me, but I caught up in no time. I don't think mine is terribly good, and I end my section rather abruptly, but eh. Whatever. Oh, and it makes no sense. But who needs sense? Really.

Comments

I should read Paradise Lost at some point

[tastelikeapples]

Good opening! En media res really works for this.

I do kinda want to know who the speaker was...

Keep writing!

Re: I should read Paradise Lost at some point

[kwishin]

Dude... I gave her profile at the beginning of the segment.

But thanks for the comments guys!

Re: I should read Paradise Lost at some point

[tastelikeapples]

*Mock-insulted.* Yes, but you never said whether or not she was the actual speaker. For all I know the first person-y bits could be some kind of grand narration that stays the same no matter who the focus of the chapter is.

Re: I should read Paradise Lost at some point

[phoenixeiros]

Well, yes, the first person-y bits aren't always going to be in front of the focus of the chapter. So I can see where the confusion comes in there. But really, I thought the profile was a dead give away.

Re: I should read Paradise Lost at some point

[tastelikeapples]

*Blows raspberry.* Yeah, be all logical about it and whatever.