[1019] Thus closes Act I

[phoenix_melody]

That, of course, heavily implies that there are acts besides Act I. Who knows if that will happen? I feel that this, at least, is a semi-satisfying conclusion. Or is it?

Unbeta'd, as all my zombie pieces are. It also marks my very first foray into the mind of Lee. Huzzah? Comments, constructive criticism, etc., are always welcome.

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[rurounigochan]

Gee, I feel a little bad to say I actually got a little lost by the narrative. Due to your other writing patterns, I figured this would be from Lee's perspective, but some breaks and spacings made me wonder if the voice hadn't changed. It's not that it didn't sound like Lee, but sometimes the first one or two sentences would make me wonder who was speaking, then something totally Lee (or just a strong indicator) would pop up and I'd go, "Oh, it IS still Lee!"

It's still a great job, and I was so happy about Tenten! (You really scared us all there, Fi, you meanie.) For a moment there I was scared you'd really kill off Shikamaru! I want to see them all work together, and he's so the brains they need out there. Awesome. ...I want an Act II. >_>

These stories got me talking about zombies with some friends of mine here and we couldn't quite decide or confirm what effects the zombie-plague has on animals. Do animals get infected? Only certain animals? Or do they just die as the zombie-part is not compatible with their bodies. (It's a good question for the Inuzuka. >_> Can you imagine the horror of being surrounded by zombie dogs? Those will bite ya!)

[phoenix_melody]

Ahahaha, your icon.

Hey, don't feel bad! I'm always welcome to constructive criticism, and to be honest I think this is my weakest piece. Well, this and the Tenten one. I've never written from their perspectives before, and it's very likely I slipped in and out of Lee's voice in this piece.

If you were scared about Tenten and Shikamaru, then I'm very happy about that. ^-^ Act II is currently on hold--it would actually require that I know what I'm doing. >.>;

Er...as far as zombies and animals, I'm pretty sure that's just up to the creator's mythos. I'm not allowing zombified animals because that just makes things too complicated for me.