Fic: darkness in the light

[philomytha]

I was trying to write something totally different today, but this little fic ambushed me and demanded to be written instead, so here you go. Also, it's practically a songfic, and I really don't do songfics, so I don't know what happened there. But if you want to know, the song that inspired it is hereTitle: darkness in the light

Comments

[ljgeoff]

What I lovelovelove about this fic is the trust that is implicit in that last scene. So Good.

[philomytha]

Thanks! And I'm glad that trust came across well. It's hard to get things to work with only 100 words to play with!

[avanti_90]

Oh, wow. Perfect and scary Ges, especially in the third and fourth drabbles. That is exactly how I picture him. And his growing mad obsession comes out really well too.

[avanti_90]

also, very nice song.

[philomytha]

Writing Ges's perspective was ... interesting. There's a reason this was only drabbles, though!

And the song is so perfectly Aral/Ges. Though I warn you, it's a terrible earworm. I've been humming it all day.

[shimotsuki]

This surprised me in all sorts of ways (in 600 words!). First, as much as I am squicked by Ges in canon, I found him surprisingly human and even sympathetic here (well, at first, that is). I really like the connections drawn between Aral's drinking and his relationship with Ges. And then that last drabble hit really hard and went deeper than I was expecting. I'd love to think that Cordelia might help exorcise a few more ghosts this night.

[philomytha]

Yeah, I like humanising 'monsters'. Ges is crazy and very, very wrong, but I still kind of want to know how he thinks and why. And - well, this fic was nearly labelled 'Aral/alcohol, Aral/Ges, Aral/Cordelia' ;-). And there was definitely exorcising of ghosts, at the end. *loves Cordelia and Aral*

[etrangere]

Loved this. The third paragraph is so chilling; and the last one... very weird feeling.

[philomytha]

Thanks! Yes, there's a lot of disturbing stuff in Ges and Aral's relationship.

[spatz]

Ges sits and watches him and wonders what the words are for the way this makes him feel.

This sentence creeps me out, for some reason. Or, well, for a specific reason if I'm reading the subtext right. Ges = sooooo fucked up. I was very glad for the last section when I got there - like waking up from a nightmare. &Cordelia;

[philomytha]

I actually felt really sorry for Ges with that bit. He is so very screwed up, but he's also only a kid at this point and he has nobody to tell him 'yeah, you have weird kinks, but you can still be a good person and find safe and consensual ways to indulge them'. And I doubt his family role models have been exactly good, either.

But yeah. I needed a Cordelia bit by the time I got to the end of this fic too.

[spatz]

Yeah, I bet Betan dollars to sand that haunts Aral after he gets educated on it later in life. I suppose it's the... detachment that creeped me out in the way Ges is just watching Aral suffer, the hint of deeper issues than simple sexual sadism.