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philleegirl

New NCIS Fic: Fall Apart

Dec 14, 2007 20:44

Title: Fall Apart
Fandom: NCIS
Characters: Emily, Ducky, Gibbs, Fornell
Spoilers: Hiatus Part 1 and 2
Prompt: #71 Broken
Word Count: 794
Rating: K+
Summary: “Emily, I have some news for you.”
Author's Notes: This is an AU, inspired in part by wiccagirl24’s wonderful Kelly!verse. In this ‘verse Emily Fornell is actually Emily Gibbs.

( Fall Apart )

ncis: character: fornell, ncis: character: ducky, ncis: het: gibbs/abby, ncis: au character: emily gibbs, ncis: series: the emily verse, ncis: character: gibbs

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msgills December 16 2007, 00:46:00 UTC

sorry but in the second quote "is" is definitely the right word.

philleegirl December 16 2007, 03:43:06 UTC

Ta! For the back up.

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philleegirl December 17 2007, 04:45:52 UTC

Ah, I was a English minor and studying for my GMATs, so I'm in the grammar mode.

philleegirl December 16 2007, 03:41:48 UTC

Thanks so much for the feed back and really taking the time!

>>I don't understand this sentence, maybe you could add a word or something to make it understandable.<<

Yeah, that was not a great sentence. Basically, I'm trying to get it to jive with canon in that no one knew about Kelly and Shannon, but in this verse I felt that Abby and Fornell should know. Thus the apositive in that sentence that makes it a difficult read.

>>>The last word must be 'are'<<<

Actually, the grammatically correct word is 'is' because the conjection is 'or' as in "Papa is or Aunt Abby is." That being said, I struggled with using the grammatically correct word or the commonly used word, since Em is only 11.

Oh, I only post quickly. I've been writing this series for a little over a month.

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