Phen loves Elizabuffy, so she wrote her femslash...
This is written as part of my Kink!Ficlets, especially for elizabuffy. I wrote this one first, actually, but it was long enough, I decided it probably needed a beta. Good thing I did *LOL* Thanks katekat1010. I really have quite a bit to do today, but thought I’d better get this put out because a) elizabuffy would kill me if I didn’t and b) she informs me tomorrow is
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One small point, Buffy does say 'SO' an awful lot in this fic, maybe more than she needs to. But as it's a wander through her thoughts at a rather intense time it's probably still in character, just struck me reading it the second time around. Other than that I think you did a great job, especially as it's your first femslash. All hail elizabuffy for challenging you to do it, and you for meeting the challenge so very, very well.
Another question just occured to me -- Wesley is there, setting this fic during or post 'Bad Girls,' so is this an AU where Faith isn't working for the Mayor, or does this story have a much darker undercurrent cunningly hidden in there which I didn't notice? Sorry, I just can't leave the possibilities for angst alone *g*
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Also a decent point on the SO...unfortunately, it's a word _I_ personally use a lot, so very likely that's just me showing though. In formal 3rd person writing I tend not to let as many (though still quite a few) of my verbalisms slip through, but, ah, in this case I'm sure it's a symptom of letting myself get slack because of the style. Still, I appreciate you bringing my attention to it! I know there were several other words that were repeated a lot in this fic, and, you'll notice it's full of ellipses? My beta cut out about half of them as it is *LOL*
And thanks for reading! *LOL* I was hoping you would...most of my flist probably won't be since they're either 1) B/G fans or 2) m/m slashers, so I'm sure I scared them all off ;^) I'm very happy it worked okay...I was a bit nervous. Not w/the femslash so much as with the format.
And you'll notice I DID cheat *grin* I generally suck at Faith characterization (hence why I admire yours so much)--or maybe it's not the characterization so much as the mannerisms and speech patterns--and so kinda shoved her in the background.
And you should be either excited or terrified. I've got an idea for yours, but damn it...it's kinda complicated! *L* So now my question how to make it short. *Sigh*
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You wrote B/F, my fic version of catnip, of course I was gonna read it, it was irresistable. ::rolls around purring::
And you'll notice I DID cheat *grin* I generally suck at Faith characterization (hence why I admire yours so much)--or maybe it's not the characterization so much as the mannerisms and speech patterns--and so kinda shoved her in the background.
Aww, thanks, she's tough to write, even for me. But your aproach did work, and she was in character.
And you should be either excited or terrified. I've got an idea for yours, but damn it...it's kinda complicated! *L* So now my question how to make it short. *Sigh*
Excited, definitely, excited. I was gonna say I have faith in your abilities, but that phrase really never will be usable again will it *g*
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Anyway, sorry to be shorter this time:
THANK YOU for pointing out the Wesley bit...that was a symptom of me not watching Season 3 lately. I was just thinking that both he and faith were there the second half of the season and didn't really think out the logistics. You'll notice I'm deleting his name ;^) because you are very definitely right!
As for pointing out the "So"s, that's appreciated also! I think it's because of the format...it's something I do often myself in IM and the like and so when I was doing 1st person thoughts it kinda transferred over. Still, it's something I should watch. I noticed there were some other words I repeated more often than I should have.
Thank you for reading!;^) I was hoping you would as most of my flist is B/G or m/m slashers so I think I might have scared them off! *LOL* VERY glad to hear you liked it. I was nervous. Not so much because it was femslash, but because of the format.
*L* As for second person, who knows? I LOVE the way you did yours; on the otherhand, I generally dislike those that belong to the ABH genre, so...*L* We'll see!
You'll notice I cheated a bit too. I generally suck at Faith's characterization (which is something I admire about your writing so much!)--or maybe it's not the characterization so much as it's the mannerisms and speech patterns--so I kinda just shoved her off to the side *LOL* Anyway.
Now let's hope it posts this time!
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