Unseeing - Fic

[pheebs1]

Title: Unseeing.
Rating: PG 13, Note Swearing
Warnings: Bad Language
Pairing: Dean/OFC

Summary: For spn_flashback prompt: Dean falls for the girl next door, and when it comes time to move, it's him and not Sam that fights to stay, and John doesn't expect that.This is Outsider POV, so it’s slightly different than the prompt implied, hope it’s still ok

Comments

[legoline]

Oh, lovely :-p

He says it like it’s in capitals with neon lights around it.

I really, really, REALLY loved this line.

And that 50's dance, Under The Sea... you're not possiblyhinting at Back To The Future, are you? :-)

[pheebs1]

you're not possiblyhinting at Back To The Future, are you? :-) I might be... Heee!

& thanks for picking out that line, I liked that, and that's how I see Dean's life, in his head. How I think any death causes you to think.

Thanks for commenting, yay!

[eloise_bright]

I am sitting here and the tears are just running down my face. That was just beautiful. Honestly, my heart was breaking for Dean and Petra at the end.

LOVED Petra and her wonderful POV, and what a masterstroke making her blind, and thus able to really see the real Dean Winchester. And what a hero he is, let him deny it all he wants, he really is a hero.

Both the boys were perfectly characterized in this, I could have hugged Sammy when he gave Petra the bowl. *hugs the Sammy* And John, so much the drill sergeant, in this, I felt so sorry for Dean - he clearly idolizes his dad, but just this once he has to go up against him.

Fantastic writing. Thank your for such a wonderful story.

[pheebs1]

the tears are just running down my face. Oh wow, I am glad it worked so well for you.

what a masterstroke making her blind, I've been wanting to write a blind girl falls for Dean POV for a while, just because so much of his front is in his looks, and his charm, and I think it's interesting when people see through that. And of course, Petra can't see how hot he is, or his smile or anything... she can only go on what she gleans. So anyway, the spn flashback prompt gave me the perfect opportunity to try it!

I could have hugged Sammy when he gave Petra the bowl. Sammy's so cute!

Seriously, I really appreciate the comment, it's so lovely to hear that things don't just work in my head.

[fatale]

Man, what a sad ending, but this fic was a lot of fun.

[pheebs1]

I am glad you liked it - unfortunately the prompt said he had to leave at the end, poor Dean n Petra! I'm glad you liked the getting there though.

Thanks for commenting!

[pheebs1]

Thinking about it, it just said 'Dean fights to stay' so it's me that made 'em leave! Ah well! Twas a good prompt to work from.

Thanks for the comment, and I love your icon. COOL.

[elanurel]

Just beautiful. Thanks for posting this. (And for coming up with such an original OFC to boot!)

Kudos to you!

[pheebs1]

Thank you so much for commenting. I am glad Petra worked for you - OFC's are always a bit 'arghwilltheywork' aren't they. So thanks for saying she worked. *hugs*

[elanurel]

Petra *definitely* worked! She was brilliant, IMHO.

[pheebs1]

Thanks so much, I'm so happy to hear it!

& I love your icon, he is beautiful when he smiles.