House M.D. Fanfiction: Scout's Honor pt 3

[pgrabia]

Title: Scout’s Honor
Author: pgrabia
Disclaimer: House M.D., its characters, locations and storyline are the property of David Shore, Bad Hat Harry Productions and the Fox Television Network. All Rights Reserved.
Pairing(s): House/Wilson pre-slash (UST), starting with some House/Cuddy and Wilson/Sam (but ending up H/W.).
A/N: A three-part

Comments

[cuddyclothes]

I loved that they found him in a completely believable way. And what House did made perfect sense and wasn't OOC. This is a really good, action-packed story that is truly original. A lot of great lines, and the interplay between H/W and the realization that they are only themselves when they're with each other was touching and funny. House on crutches and in the space blanket...fantastic.

Here are some minor problems I had:
1) I think Sam would care after he nearly dies. I completely believed her having House detained in security and lying to him, though I think in some twisted way she would defend her actions out of "love." Just my opinion. (I love her big, coral, stick mouth.)
2) Wilson seems awfully articulate for someone who just came out of being unconscious for a really long time and hoarse from intubation.

Please take this as concrit and disregard it if you wish. It's a wonderful story, and had me on the edge of my chair.

[cuddyclothes]

Please note that I also reined in my tendency to use exclamation points. Oh, God...must not...

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

[pgrabia]

LOL! (Oops, that was another exclamation point, wasn't it? Oh, well. ;)

[pgrabia]

Hi! No, no--I appreciate constructive criticism. It really does help me understand the characters better and write more realistically! I think your points are very valid! I wanted to restrain myself with Wilson, but I was getting antsy with how long it was getting and pushed things along a little too quickly as a result.
As for Sam, I may have been a little harsh on her, but I really get this vibe that she's more concerned about what she gets out of the relationship than really for him. She probably would show more concern, though. Thanks for the insight. I'm glad you enjoyed it!