The Shadow Rising / Robert Jordan
The story in book four of Wheel of Time, The Shadow Rising, is straggling to say the least. Everyone heads off in different directions, and the bunch heading off to the Waste talk so little among themselves that they can be considered heading off in different directions too.
For something to be a weave, the threads must overlap. TSR doesn't describe a weave. It describes a bunch of threads that are in a bit of a tangle at best, but mostly just try to move away from each other.
I like most of the threads, but I don't like how they're interleaved. The gals heading off to Tanchico are annoying. That entire thread feels unnatural. Why would it take so long for the Blacks to find the thing they're looking for? Perrin's thread is much better, and I like how his and Faile's relationship develops. Rand, Mat and Egwene should talk more to each other, but the rest of their braid of threads is okay.
The constant enforcement of stereotypes is annoying. A Green Aes Sedai smiles at a man, "just as all Greens do". Another is White, and cool "like all Whites are". So there are exactly seven kinds of women in the White Tower? Not to mention how all Aiel are very Aiel, never dreaming of another kind of life or seeking adventure in the Wetlands, or how Two Rivers people are stubborn and only care about their sheep, and so forth.
For something to be a weave, the threads must overlap. TSR doesn't describe a weave. It describes a bunch of threads that are in a bit of a tangle at best, but mostly just try to move away from each other.
I like most of the threads, but I don't like how they're interleaved. The gals heading off to Tanchico are annoying. That entire thread feels unnatural. Why would it take so long for the Blacks to find the thing they're looking for? Perrin's thread is much better, and I like how his and Faile's relationship develops. Rand, Mat and Egwene should talk more to each other, but the rest of their braid of threads is okay.
The constant enforcement of stereotypes is annoying. A Green Aes Sedai smiles at a man, "just as all Greens do". Another is White, and cool "like all Whites are". So there are exactly seven kinds of women in the White Tower? Not to mention how all Aiel are very Aiel, never dreaming of another kind of life or seeking adventure in the Wetlands, or how Two Rivers people are stubborn and only care about their sheep, and so forth.