Snug Harbor. PG

[ashley_pitt]

TITLE: Snug Harbor
AUTHOR: Ashley-Pitt
FANDOM: Master and Commander
PAIRINGS: Jack Aubrey, Stephen Maturin
WORD COUNT: 100
CHALLENGE: slashthedrabble Challenge #297. Fragile
RATING: PG
DISCLAIMER: I do not own these characters, nor am I making any money from them. I borrow them once in awhile but put them away tidily.

Comments

[alltoseek]

Yay! *sigh*

[ashley_pitt]

Thank you!

[amaraal]

his love enveloping him = awwwwwwww... :) His own fragility well protected :) Awwwwwwww...

[ashley_pitt]

Indeed Stephen is well-protected.

Thanks!

[derien]

It's very sweet. :) And good - I mean, I do think you have a knack for writing. I do wonder why you put each sentence on a separate line as though it were a different paragraph. I would probably have combined a couple of these into longer sentences, as you notice PO'B uses quite long constructions, emulating the style of the time period. This fashion of separate lines gives an impression as though one were reading twitters - a very modern sound; not necessarily bad, it just takes me away from the feel of the books. (For me, possibly because I'm old, it also gives each line the exact same emotional weight, lending an overall blandness to the story which it doesn't deserve at all, given the emotion of the piece.)

[ashley_pitt]

Thank you!

To tell the truth, I wrote the story in paragraph form. Somehow, when I post it always seems to line up differently. And being computer stupid for most things, I just leave it the way it wants to print.

The difficulty I have writing a Drabble in the form of PO'B is that by the time you would finish a sentence in his style you would most probably have used up at least 100 words or I say in parenthesis, even 200 words leaving only a few more words available to complete the idea.

[derien]

Somehow, when I post it always seems to line up differently.

I wonder what happens there! You know what I often do, when things don't go from one format to another smoothly (because I am also computer stupid, this might be a hard way around) is save it into a text file, close it, open it again with Notepad, make sure any stray characters are eliminated, and then post.

[alltoseek]

In my writing I too try to emulate POB (it's fortunate that we both enjoy long sentences with lots of punctuation, occasionally interspersed with short fragments) BUT:

As a beta I think once reminded me, it's not necessary for fanfic writers to write in the style of canon. Readers prefer the characters to be as much IC as possible, and for the setting to be evocative of the period; but everyone had their own style of writing, and it's OK to let that show through in fanfics.

POB wrote so brilliantly with that wry undercurrent of humour, that way of stating just enough without overstating anything, even in the most dramatic moments - if I felt my prose had to be as perfect I'd never get anything written down!

I still try to imitate POB, as much as I can; but if others take a different approach, and write in the style that works best for themselves, I can understand and enjoy that too! It's like watching the characters through a different lens.

especially in drabble form, in which writers aim at exactly 100 words. No idea how

[rifleman_s]

"...safe from any harm."

Oh that's lovely - all the negatives turned into a positive!

[ashley_pitt]

Thank you!

[sidlj]

This has made me a little weepy. Awww!

[ashley_pitt]

*hands over a wee pocket handkerchief*

Thank you!