Aw, thanks so much for reading it if you don't like OC's! :D *They're all I deal with TBH* AND thanks for mentioning the cannonness, I do try hard with that! :)
I'll watch out, but I stink with punctuation etc... Erin tries to fix most but some slip through :)
XD I love Michael and Thomas, but... they weren't useful to the plot. Which is a bit harsh, but they were also irritating to write about, and they'd never get along with Clara-Sophie in the long run.
I like dialogue :) Though I go overboard and forget about description and all that jazz, not to mention I'm British, so I'm working hard *Only recently, it's not as noticable in the first chapter* on trying to get dialect's in and all that. No where near like written by an american language yet, but I'm getting better.
At the begining I though "Hmm... my description's weak, why don't I take away the main sight for descritpion in my main character and make the perspective first person! That sounds brilliant!" Yeah, Clara was about... four years old.
XD Connor is awesome. End of.
Thank you for the thumbs up! :) Does that mean you'd read chapter two?
British? -- cool~ That explains "flaming," I guess. Gosh, Britain's fascinating 8D And I've gotten some interest in the famous, famous guards at Buckingham Palace -- I'm on my school's armed drill team, so yeah 8D Kya~ -w- Okay, done fangirling.
I think a third-person narrative would've been interesting as well -- but first-person is much more personal, and, I feel, more powerful. Four years old...yup.
Wow you're on a drill team! That's so awesome! I'm sorry though, I've never been to London, *I know, wierd right?* I've been to Scotland's, and North and South Ireland's capitals though just not Wales, or England.
Yeah, two our of three of my LT fics, are first, but I write a lot in 3rd, it's just not published. Around chapter four of 'Blind Faith' I forgot, and switched to Third... That was annoying to fix.
Of course! Connor's in chapter two
YAY!!!
Though School is a bleep, and I descided not to post untill I've finished, so therefore no strees! :) I'm on chapter five out of sseven, though I've wrote half of chapter seven.
Drill team n_n Thanks~ It's quite tiring, but quite rewarding.
I don't think it very weird -- but SCOTLAND -- IRELAND 8D DUDE. If I weren't a New Yorker, had family in California, and wasn't close to DC, I'd probably not've gone to many big, famous places, if any at all 8D
Yayz, Connor 8DDDD
School really is a...bleep xD And drill team takes up even more time.... I'll be waiting :)
Ah, I'm Scottish *No, I'm not Ginger, and Yes, I have a kilt but I do not wear it all of the time, and No I do not day 'Aye' every other second' so, I've seen a lot of scotland, and I've also got an abused passport and some lucky streaks so I have seen a lot! :)
Connor is awesome.
I've got to chapter 6, so it's only 6 and half of 7 left! :) Then I'm going to read it all to check the chapters flow into one another then post it all in a onner on FF because review quantitys are pittiful now adays and I don't like how I get when I don't get a lot of reaviews.
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"Don't sneak up on me like that!" I yelled, slightly breathless, before it clicked in my head where I recognised the voice from, "Hey! I remember you! You stole my purse!"
Connor paused. "Shit, you remember that?"
"It was yesterday," I said in a board voice, making sure I was facing him as I said it.
"Yeah, well, normally campers here just give up if their stuff gets nicked," he said calmly as if he didn't care about rules. He probably didn't to be honest. He didn't sound like someone who cared about the rules.
"Don't you feel bad about stealing from a blind kid?" I said simply, trying to sound vaunriable. I wasn't an expert, but I did have some skill in manipulating people.
"Not really... My mom always taught me never to treat someone with a disability any different from someone without, unless they ask for help," he said sensibly.
Obviously not a son of Hermes though.
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....I stink at snippets, I never know if they'll be understandable or not!
I don't really expect you to be ginger -dumb- I...never knew that was a stereotype xD Well, I'm of Chinese descent, and I have no traditional clothing. At all "D And my hair isn't straight, it's curly "D And I don't have much red clothing...>__> And I only say "aiyah" because it's recently gotten into my system, even when a simple "ai" would suffice "D
I'll bet -grin- That sounds like more places than I've ever been~
CONNOR. 8DDDDDD No words can describe how awesome he is. Hell yeah 89
Ganbatte! -Waves flag encouragingly even though she's too lazy to type in actual Japanese hiragana-
...It's "bored" and "vulnerable." :D -Shot- But she's finally caught Connor! -- ohoho~! 8D
Ginger, frizzy curly hair, constantly drinking. :) My friend James used to makea load of sterotype jokes whenever I would talk to him with a hangover...
or when called him when I was drunk asking for the time... That made more sence when I was dialing the number.
*High fives for curly hair* Sterotypes do stink though...
I'm typing in the dark right now because it's 6 am and turninig on the light would mean getting up, so I keep putting my hands on the wrong keys so soething like this happens
s0ketjomg po8iei ty8s ya00ehs
Stupid lazy nature...
:) I like to travel.
XD Thanks for the spelling corrections. I'm going to go write, I've only got ten more minutes.
I'll watch out, but I stink with punctuation etc... Erin tries to fix most but some slip through :)
XD I love Michael and Thomas, but... they weren't useful to the plot. Which is a bit harsh, but they were also irritating to write about, and they'd never get along with Clara-Sophie in the long run.
I like dialogue :) Though I go overboard and forget about description and all that jazz, not to mention I'm British, so I'm working hard *Only recently, it's not as noticable in the first chapter* on trying to get dialect's in and all that. No where near like written by an american language yet, but I'm getting better.
At the begining I though "Hmm... my description's weak, why don't I take away the main sight for descritpion in my main character and make the perspective first person! That sounds brilliant!" Yeah, Clara was about... four years old.
XD Connor is awesome. End of.
Thank you for the thumbs up! :) Does that mean you'd read chapter two?
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British? -- cool~ That explains "flaming," I guess. Gosh, Britain's fascinating 8D And I've gotten some interest in the famous, famous guards at Buckingham Palace -- I'm on my school's armed drill team, so yeah 8D Kya~ -w- Okay, done fangirling.
I think a third-person narrative would've been interesting as well -- but first-person is much more personal, and, I feel, more powerful. Four years old...yup.
Connor. Yes. YES. And Travis. They. Are. WIN 8D
n_n Yup, I intend to read it.
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*blush* oops, that's my overly religious friend's influence there...
"Fuck, fuck, fuck!"
"ELLEN! Stop swearing!"
*grumbles*
Wow you're on a drill team! That's so awesome! I'm sorry though, I've never been to London, *I know, wierd right?* I've been to Scotland's, and North and South Ireland's capitals though just not Wales, or England.
Yeah, two our of three of my LT fics, are first, but I write a lot in 3rd, it's just not published. Around chapter four of 'Blind Faith' I forgot, and switched to Third... That was annoying to fix.
Of course! Connor's in chapter two
YAY!!!
Though School is a bleep, and I descided not to post untill I've finished, so therefore no strees! :) I'm on chapter five out of sseven, though I've wrote half of chapter seven.
Want a snippit of number two?
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I don't think it very weird -- but SCOTLAND -- IRELAND 8D DUDE. If I weren't a New Yorker, had family in California, and wasn't close to DC, I'd probably not've gone to many big, famous places, if any at all 8D
Yayz, Connor 8DDDD
School really is a...bleep xD And drill team takes up even more time.... I'll be waiting :)
A snippet? -- sure! :D
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Ah, I'm Scottish *No, I'm not Ginger, and Yes, I have a kilt but I do not wear it all of the time, and No I do not day 'Aye' every other second' so, I've seen a lot of scotland, and I've also got an abused passport and some lucky streaks so I have seen a lot! :)
Connor is awesome.
I've got to chapter 6, so it's only 6 and half of 7 left! :) Then I'm going to read it all to check the chapters flow into one another then post it all in a onner on FF because review quantitys are pittiful now adays and I don't like how I get when I don't get a lot of reaviews.
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"Don't sneak up on me like that!" I yelled, slightly breathless, before it clicked in my head where I recognised the voice from, "Hey! I remember you! You stole my purse!"
Connor paused. "Shit, you remember that?"
"It was yesterday," I said in a board voice, making sure I was facing him as I said it.
"Yeah, well, normally campers here just give up if their stuff gets nicked," he said calmly as if he didn't care about rules. He probably didn't to be honest. He didn't sound like someone who cared about the rules.
"Don't you feel bad about stealing from a blind kid?" I said simply, trying to sound vaunriable. I wasn't an expert, but I did have some skill in manipulating people.
"Not really... My mom always taught me never to treat someone with a disability any different from someone without, unless they ask for help," he said sensibly.
Obviously not a son of Hermes though.
--
....I stink at snippets, I never know if they'll be understandable or not!
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I don't really expect you to be ginger -dumb- I...never knew that was a stereotype xD Well, I'm of Chinese descent, and I have no traditional clothing. At all "D And my hair isn't straight, it's curly "D And I don't have much red clothing...>__> And I only say "aiyah" because it's recently gotten into my system, even when a simple "ai" would suffice "D
I'll bet -grin- That sounds like more places than I've ever been~
CONNOR. 8DDDDDD No words can describe how awesome he is. Hell yeah 89
Ganbatte! -Waves flag encouragingly even though she's too lazy to type in actual Japanese hiragana-
...It's "bored" and "vulnerable." :D -Shot- But she's finally caught Connor! -- ohoho~! 8D
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or when called him when I was drunk asking for the time... That made more sence when I was dialing the number.
*High fives for curly hair* Sterotypes do stink though...
I'm typing in the dark right now because it's 6 am and turninig on the light would mean getting up, so I keep putting my hands on the wrong keys so soething like this happens
s0ketjomg po8iei ty8s ya00ehs
Stupid lazy nature...
:) I like to travel.
XD Thanks for the spelling corrections. I'm going to go write, I've only got ten more minutes.
:)
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Yes, stereotypes suck. -High fives back-
Oh, I see :)
xD Yatta~
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*nudge* If you wanna read how it ends... :)
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