this is an english paper. it's pretty short and (hopefully) funny, too. if anyone feels like reading it and giving feedback, that would rock. but no pressure because yeah, homework=lots, etc. ( orwellian )
feel free to disregard this because its 2 am and i'm not very sure how good my reading comprehension skills are at this hour:
i really liked the piece. it flowed extremely well and your dry sense of humor added a lot to the tone.
there were, however, a few places where i became a bit lost. for example, "There’s no harm done in adding a little je ne sais quoi, and it just isn’t the same to say something I can’t quite put my finger on." - i think i know what you're trying to say, but the "something i can't quite put my finger on" makes it slightly confusing.
also: i'm just one reader, but i felt like i didn't really get a sense of the overall importance of each rule until the end, and even then i found myself trying to fill in the blanks. i'm not sure how much sense that makes, but an example would be: "George Orwell has six rules for good writing. The last rule of this six is “Break any of these rules sooner than say anything outright barbarous.” What may seem like an afterthought might in fact be the most important, in some cases." - so what can we draw from this? what is the bigger picture? the last sentence gets at it (i think) but it's still unclear what you're trying to conclude about orwell's rules.
i hope that didn't sound really harsh. hopefully it was helpful.
i really liked the piece. it flowed extremely well and your dry sense of humor added a lot to the tone.
there were, however, a few places where i became a bit lost. for example, "There’s no harm done in adding a little je ne sais quoi, and it just isn’t the same to say something I can’t quite put my finger on." - i think i know what you're trying to say, but the "something i can't quite put my finger on" makes it slightly confusing.
also: i'm just one reader, but i felt like i didn't really get a sense of the overall importance of each rule until the end, and even then i found myself trying to fill in the blanks. i'm not sure how much sense that makes, but an example would be: "George Orwell has six rules for good writing. The last rule of this six is “Break any of these rules sooner than say anything outright barbarous.” What may seem like an afterthought might in fact be the most important, in some cases." - so what can we draw from this? what is the bigger picture? the last sentence gets at it (i think) but it's still unclear what you're trying to conclude about orwell's rules.
i hope that didn't sound really harsh. hopefully it was helpful.
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