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"Latency", for foxriverinmate

Jan 14, 2009 21:25

Title: Latency
Author: To be revealed
Rating: pg-13
Category: Drama, Angst, Implied Het, set around 4:16 (no spoilers)
Characters/Pairings: Michael, Christina, Lincoln, Sara, some Sara/Michael
Requested by: foxriverinmate.
Summary: Michael cannot decide what is real and what is the figment of his post-operative condition, but his mind is about to be challenged ( Read more... )

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Comments 18

tuesdaeschild January 14 2009, 12:45:12 UTC

Wow!! This blew me away! I need to read it again and then maybe try to express my profound admiration because right now I don't think I'm capable of stringing a coherent sentence together!

So for now...WOW!!!

tuesdaeschild January 16 2009, 02:56:15 UTC

good to hear it blew you away in a nice way : )

Michael/Wentworth does that to a person.

happywriter06 January 14 2009, 15:06:35 UTC

Canon. I could see Michael going through this, beating himself up over his choices and trying to understand his mother. I love the images created in this. I could imagine everyone around this table, coming in and out of focus. I would love to see it acted out. If the writers were smart, they'd give us something like this.

happywriter06 January 16 2009, 02:57:41 UTC

I think it could be more canon related after seeing the writers try it with the Westmoreland scene, so yes. Thanks for mentioning that.

Glad you enjoyed it : )

anonymous January 14 2009, 17:43:29 UTC

This was so well constructed and flowed so beautifully. You created such a marvelous mental image of the internal workings of Michael's mind.

I was enthralled and couldn't stop reading. Great job!

anonymous January 16 2009, 02:58:15 UTC

Oh, thanks. Nice to hear you liked it!

anonymous January 15 2009, 00:52:03 UTC

Mind-blowing. Absolutely wonderfull. A deep probe into Michael's S4 brain where no compartment stayed hidden to our eyes, no feeling untouched, no worry unexpressed.
The wondeful imaginary world of Michael's inner self was beautifully and extremely vividly written.
Loved every part about it, from beggining to the end. Very true to the characters also.
The part that compared Linc to Aldo and Michael to Christina was the cherry on top, for it's a fact that hasn't been breached much yet, but plays a huge part in the way the characters behave on CANON.
Again, brilliant work! Very impressed!

anonymous January 16 2009, 02:59:21 UTC

thanks so much : )

Very pleased you liked it; thanks for saying it so wonderfully.

tuesdaeschild January 15 2009, 11:54:54 UTC

Okay, I think I've recovered my coherence so in my own clumsy way I'll do my best to try to explain why this is such a fabulous tale!

The imagery, like the use of military hardware and strategies, really expresses the battlefield that is Michael's brain when he's indulging in self-flagellation for his real or perceived guilt. That is a touch of genius!

I love that he would also balance out the Family and the Voice of Reasonwith Gretchen and T-Bag representing The Badness. Michael would never allow himself to take a one-sided view of his actions, would he?

‘She’s using you like she used Dad,’ Michael said... ‘It’s the same. She’s the thinker - don’t you get it? And Aldo was the standover man….now she’s grooming a standover son…’

We've not seen what's going to happen with the brothers and their mother in the show yet but I so want it to be like this! Even before we've got to know Christina and her motives concerning her sons, I find my self disliking her and you've captured this feeling beautifully here.

His mother’s weapon is ( ... )

tuesdaeschild January 16 2009, 03:02:26 UTC

Phew. I'm so glad you liked it : D

I wanted something a little different for you and a bit left of center. I know you enjoy Michael anyway, so the exploration of his mind appealed a lot.

Your prompt was easy to work with, and nothing you've said is rambling. It was a pleasure to write it for you