Comments | pbfic_exchange2: "And The Rain Screams Sucre," for ferrynheit

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"And The Rain Screams Sucre," for ferrynheit

Jan 31, 2008 08:47

Title: And the Rain Screams ”Sucre”
Rating: NC-17 (sexual scene, violence)
Category: slash, angst, au
Characters: Michael/Sucre
Requested by: ferrynheit
Author's Notes: The prompts issued involved dialogue, seeing something good in someone bad, and rain. I hope this fits the bill.
Sona is only one prison in Panama, as Sucre and Scofield are incarcerated ( Read more... )

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Comments 8

niektete January 31 2008, 20:39:07 UTC

Aaaw... *cries* Sucre! Poor Michael and poor Sucre and whyyy???

But, um, before I get away from myself here - fantastic story. So elegant and sexy without getting totally porny, and the language ftw!

niektete February 2 2008, 04:01:36 UTC

thank you very much : D

anonymous February 4 2008, 04:53:33 UTC

Wonderful! Except, you hit almost all of my major PB fears... Lincoln separated from Michael, a happy ending whisked out from under my feet (again), and Michael dying. Oh noes!

Other than that, though, it was awesome. I hope you don't mind if I vote for another ending to the show though ;)

I absolutely loved the scene with the bullets flying. So incredibly detailed while being deliberately vague... delaying the realization of what we all know is coming.

Love it.
~EF

anonymous February 5 2008, 23:17:17 UTC

Im very happy for you to vote for an alternative ending for the show : D

I think if this really happened, no one would watch, but the lj user I wrote it for is a self proclaimed 'angst whore', lol

Thanks for the feedback

halfshellvenus February 8 2008, 08:06:01 UTC

I realized by the end that I wasn't sure who had been hit with that second bullet-- whether it was Michael or Sucre, or in the end... both, after all.

I like the form of this very much-- the different sections and their themes. And the slash? Very hot, and with a pairing that we don't see as often as one might expect.

Lovely job!

rosie_spleen February 8 2008, 23:50:38 UTC

Hey Lady,

I tried to keep this vague about who was suffering at the start and who was the observer and the main storyteller. Im glad that worked to some extent.

And, can I just tell you that I almost had a cosmic meltdown that you thought the slash was HAWT. This is perhaps the most singularly satisfying compliment I have ever received in this genre. My ego has grown proportionally to my SPECIALNESS - something you know I would never flaunt.

Thanks Karen. I love being part of the exchange.

mercurybard February 9 2008, 16:19:33 UTC

Oh, how melancholy, but beautiful with the rain imagery. The absolutely gorgeous rain imagery.

rosie_spleen February 10 2008, 01:50:20 UTC

hey cody. Hope you are going along okay

Thanks for reading this and the lovely comment. The recipient wanted 'rain' and I think I might have gone a bit overboard with this, lol. But she was also a self-confessed "Angst Whore", so it had to be melancholic.

Take care, and thanks.