[community] Common Sleep Disorders

May 12, 2011 15:06

Title: Common Sleep Disorders
Fandom: Community (pre-Jeff/Annie, if you squint [and I encourage you to squint]; PG-13)
Word Count: 6900
Summary: Annie's been having trouble staying awake this week. In case you were wondering, no, Jeff is not worried about her. Not in the least. And he's not actively going out of his way to find out why she's tired, ( Read more... )

rating: pg-13, fandom: community, pairing: shipping-lite

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thebadunkadunk May 12 2011, 19:41:42 UTC
This was adorable and I love the HP references!

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pavonine May 13 2011, 03:30:44 UTC
Hee, thank you! And Harry Potter makes everything better, yup. :-D

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fangirl_101 May 12 2011, 20:47:37 UTC
Loved this! The dialog is really great. I love that Jeff goes to everyone else first before finally giving up and just asking Annie--and that they all pre-warned her. The HP references were fantastic! That Greendale at night looks like an evil Hogwarts? I was laughing and nodding my head because, yeah, I can totally see that. I remember my college had a totally creepy, sinister vibe at night, like it's a whole other place. And like you're waiting to be dropped right into a cliche horror movie. Oh and the ninjas were awesome!! one of my favorite parts. Anyway, really enjoyed reading this. And also, koalarama = WIN!

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pavonine May 13 2011, 03:34:06 UTC
Dialogue's one of my favorite things to do in a fic. :-) I'd love for Greendale to do a Harry Potter-themed episode, actually, evil Hogwarts!Greendale and all, but I don't know if they would be able to secure the rights. And ninja are always awesome, always. I'm happy you enjoyed reading this, thank you, and yes, koalaramas ARE win. :-D

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noelle82 May 12 2011, 21:52:25 UTC
Ohmygod, I can't even list everything I loved about this because there's too much! But I have to say it was well-paced and very, very sweet without any out-of-character-ness. And you didn't just write Jeff and Annie amazingly, you had the characterization of the whole gang and Greedale's loveable idiosyncrasies down, too. I really liked your writing; it was concise and flowed and had all those details that really make a fic. You have a way with words. I especially liked these lines: "Jeff Winger is the consummate, distilled essence of not a worrier." and "And Annie is soundly asleep, lost in a land of Lisa Frank dreams, far away from this place. Lucky."

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pavonine May 13 2011, 03:37:30 UTC
Your comment soothed all my worries in one fell swoop. *awe* Since it was my first real Community fic, and I've only been a fan of the show since Epidemiology, I was ridiculously anxious that I wasn't getting everyone's voices down, or that I was either exaggerating or playing down everyone's tendencies--basically a whole lot of character worry. And then I thought the fic was maybe too long, or wasn't moving along at a good clip. So hearing something like your comment is REALLY reassuring, and I seriously have to thank you for that. I'm incredibly flattered you liked my writing and very happy you liked the fic. THANK YOU! :-D

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dianelyn May 12 2011, 22:50:02 UTC
So great and wonderfully in character! Loved it!!

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pavonine May 13 2011, 03:38:19 UTC
Yay! Always nice to hear they're in character. Very relieving. Thank you very much!

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avaritia_90 May 12 2011, 23:07:35 UTC
"Jeff's in the middle of embellishing upon his great-great-great-grandfather's, Sirius Regulus Winger's contributions to modern astronomy when his phone starts to ring. "

-OMG, love this so hard it's impossible to put into words. Seriously.

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pavonine May 13 2011, 03:39:54 UTC
Hey, maybe he did have a relative named Sirius Regulus Winger, and Jo just stole from him. You never know!

And at least you tried, which says something. :-) Thanks!!

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avaritia_90 May 13 2011, 05:22:04 UTC
For some reason, Sirius Regulus Winger is just a darker-haired version of Jeff using his name like Chang.

"I'm so serious, I'm gonna have to change my last name so I can have the initials of SRS."

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pavonine May 13 2011, 05:35:27 UTC
Aaaaand you made drunk!Buffy laugh xD:


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