CONCRIT!

[pastrypop]

Happy autumn everyone! It's been a while so it's time for all us to have a...

*Johnny's Fanfic Concrit Meme*
Here you can give constructive criticism to authors in fandom! :D

Comments

[anonymous]

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[anonymous]

I'll be posting Anon. I like Arashi and my favorite pairing is Aimiya. I made my very first fic on the last anon fic meme.
Here's a link: http://viva-je.livejournal.com/1380.html?thread=2916452#t2916452

[anonymous]

Hello! For a first fic this is very good! Even if it wasn't your first fic I thought it was good. You did a good job describing the smut, but as an improvement I'd suggest a beta to tweak parts that might be hard to understand. I hope you open up your own fic journal one day, we need more authors. :)

/i'm not very good at criticism, but I try

[anonymous]

That was good anon. You responded well to the prompt.The tricks were funny enough, your grammar is good though you have to watch out for typos.

One problem, though is that I didn't really feel the blowjob was necessary. I felt like it came out of nowhere and was slapped on my face just because it's supposed to be part of the prompt. The build up to it did not really work for me.

Your characters lacked something that made it hard for me to believe these could actually be Nino and Aiba and no one else. Like, if I exchange their name's around, it would still work the same way. Or if I change their names completely, the story will stay the same.

Otherwise, your writing is good for a first fanfic. You just need to improve on your characterizations and use your plot devices well next time.

[anonymous]

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[boblemon]

user boblemon, here's my writing: http://saigo-no-lady.livejournal.com/
(Haven't written much in the last year, but I'm always looking for things to improve)

[anonymous]

I admire the way you write. You build your plots well with words that flow easily and I always feel like you know Arashi really well. You just get them, in everything you write.

And I admire you more for coming here, though I probably am not the best person to be giving you concrits. *biased*

I hope you'll write more tho.

[boblemon]

By the way, I write almost exclusively Arashi and you can see my (long) masterpost here: http://saigo-no-lady.livejournal.com/6090.html

I'd rather have concrit on my newer stuff since I feel like my writing has improved since I started writing several years ago. About the stories, here's two new-ish ones that I'm proud of:

The Course of True Love Never Did Run Smooth Aiba/Jun in present-tense writing format
Stormy Nights Jun/Ohno, Sho/Nino Aladdin AU

[anonymous]

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[clipsie]

clipsie but my writing journal is azurevanillasky.

I don't even know, I kind of started recently as a fun thing, and I tend to not take it overly seriously, but well.

[chibipinkpetals]

My username is :chibipinkpetals . Most of my fics are basically Sho /Nino, however, I do write a different pairing every once in a while. I only write Arashi Fan-Fiction.

My fics are listed HERE

I want to see if I have improved at all or if I am just going around in circles. Constructive criticism would be very helpful.

[anonymous]

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[dusk037]

dusk037. I write for KAT-TUN, Kis-My-Ft2; I also wrote a bit of NEWS. Pairings I've written include Kame/Jin, Fujigaya/Kitayama, Miyata/Tamamori, Junno/Koki.

Author tag in the fic shiritori: here
Fic is public in my journal, tagged as writings

Edit: I liked how " Famous Last Words" (a Miyata/Tamamori story) turned out, even if it hurt a lot. orz
My first smut fic, called " Blasphemy", was inspired by a concert performance of Inori.
" Last Waltz" is my baby. And by that, I mean, it's the first (long-ish) fic I've written.

I only recently started writing fic because a senpai inspred me. Please be kind? orz

[dori_liv]

Being brave and biting the bullet.

I haven't written a lot. Fic list here. In terms of where to start, I guess I like Eight Minutes. I don't really count the Small Truths stuff as fics, just stuff I wrote and wanted to keep organised, so you can skip them.

Most of my oneshots are Kame/Jin, gen or otherwise.

[anonymous]

I like your Kame/Ueda fic, and your Ryo & Yamapi goes to the beach fic was funny (I don't really read Akame these days so I skipped those)

I think the main thing you have to watch out for is spelling mistakes. I know it can be hard to pick them up when you know the story really well. You (general *you*) tend to read what you think is there rather than what is there. I've heard that editing from the bottom of the fic helps with catching mistakes - like start with just the last paragraph, then move to the next last paragraph - it splits the fic up in a different way so it's a bit more fresh when you reread. Or get someone else to do a quick readthrough for typo's before you post.

Other than that I think you do a great job, your pacing/grammar etc seemed fine to me.

Hope that helps.

[anonymous]

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