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[racethewind10]

Title: Elements of Emotion: Belief
Pairing: Emily/JJ Criminal Minds
Rating: G
Summary: Sequel to “Fear” JJ’s thoughts on the evolution of her relationship with Emily.
Thank you: To fewthistle for the support, beta and the rather fascinating late night IM conversations. And probably to atfm because the last time I checked, I did promise her a continuation of

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[calliopes_muse]

That night, a young JJ looked at the stars and her eyes feasted on their brilliance. Her breath was scant in her lungs but her heart had filled, bursting with some great emotion she couldn’t - at that age - name or understand. Like some heavenly note had been struck inside her, JJ shivered, and in that moment, she was overcome with the desire to reach up and hold those stars in her hand. It didn’t matter that she knew those twinkling diamonds were distant suns often long dead by the time their light reached Earth; for one fraction of one second, her heart overrode her mind, and in that tiny sliver of eternity, she believed it possible.

That's a beautiful passage. I'm loving these introspective glances into JJ. Please, keep 'em coming!

[calliopes_muse]

Note to self: learn to quote properly
Note to self, part 2: preview, preview, preview

[gigi2690]

Brilliant diction!
"Darkness surrounded her gently; a darkness so complete that it seemed a velvet blanket had been draped over the world. Head tipped back and mouth left open, she lost herself in the sky, forgetting the storm, forgetting that her parents would be mad at her for sneaking out, forgetting even to breathe."

"She felt it every time she looked at Emily: every time their hands brushed, or the dark woman slid her fingers along JJ’s sleeve. It was there every time that smooth, rich voice changed pitch ever so subtly in the way that let JJ know the brunette’s words were only for her. And most especially, it was there on those rare occasions JJ was treated to that brilliant smile; a smile seldom, if ever directed at anyone else."

I awed out loud at this passage. I am not usually an "awer" but for some reason I am with your stories :)

I love it! Keep them coming :)
gigi

[atfm]

The description of the various facets of belief was stunning, and how its absence hurts JJ was heartbreaking. To use something as simple and natural as a storm to bring about a long treasured moment of belief for a young JJ, enveloping her in darkness and purity for a little while, was great, and this line so aptly conveyed both the irrationality as well as the fleetingness that often characterise belief:

for one fraction of one second, her heart overrode her mind, and in that tiny sliver of eternity, she believed it possible.I love how, in both parts so far, you go back to JJ's past to find the origins of what fear and belief mean to her, to see how these emotions change or get lost, and how you eventually connect them to Emily. That JJ doesn't have to look to the sky any longer for that feeling of awe, that she has found someone who can bring back a precious childhood memory, is rare and wonderful. No more than the tiny gesture of Emily placing her hand on JJ's is necessary for mutual understanding; they're content to watch the

[atfm]

More than welcome. I love them, too, and I think all the writers flesh them out a bit more and create more three-dimensional characters together, it's great.

LOL, talk about nagging. I'm currently drafting the second part of my series (probably 'sight') in my head, but it'll be awhile before it's done. I plan on writing this one from JJ's point of view, and from the way it currently plays out in my mind, I may have to let you read it before posting to make sure it's not too similar to anything from your series. We'll see.

[ralst]

Sorry for being so terribly inarticulate but the only coherent thought rattling around my brain is 'that was hauntingly beautiful'.