Feedback please

Jun 20, 2008 20:17

W-a-y too long ago, I posted and earlier version of this pamphlet aimed at partners of trans people. Then life happened as it usually does and it fell on the back burner. But I've got a bit more free time these days so I went back to it. I've already run it by a few people I know in the real world but I was hoping others on here could take a look ( Read more... )

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alimaemia June 21 2008, 14:26:09 UTC
I like it. Although I guess I would have changed it when I was editing if I hadn't.

I would just add right at the end on HRT is never an excuse for physical or sexual abuse I would also add emotional. Just because I feel like Charlie at least has been mean (never abusive) and then said it was because his shot day was the next day, so there's a fine line.

Other than that... I don't think there's anything else.

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tyresias June 21 2008, 17:54:22 UTC
Thank you again for all the help :)

Can do, it's a good point. Is the patient resting at all? What are you two up to today? Oliver (French from France) is in town for the weekend visiting from Halifax. Michael and I are taking him out this evening, if he feels up to it, you two should join us.

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OK tyresias June 22 2008, 19:10:06 UTC
I've done some substantial revisions (and posted the revised copy on here). What say ye?

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Re: OK alimaemia June 22 2008, 20:46:48 UTC
Oh, and at the beginning you say ...potentially unfair expectations of partners, as well as few resources and tips. it should say something like "some resources and tips". "If can build the communication... that whole sentence doesn't really make sense grammatically.

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Re: OK tyresias June 22 2008, 20:53:52 UTC
I've redone it to read:
It will cover common experiences, some resources and tips as well as potentially unfair expectations of partners. There are positive outcomes from transition on relationships. This pamphlet hopes to ensure there are more of those more often. Notably, your partner’s improving self-esteem the longer they live life as their true selves. It can improve communication and negotiation skills which will improve your relationship overall.

I will try to update the entry but my dying computer is obviously wanting to go on strike at the moment.

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Re: OK alimaemia June 22 2008, 20:49:12 UTC
I think it should be "What if your partner is done medically transitioning?" does that make sense? I feel like a medical transition doesn't sound right.

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Re: OK tyresias June 22 2008, 20:54:22 UTC
How's
What if your partner has had all the medical steps s/he wants?

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Re: OK alimaemia June 22 2008, 20:57:10 UTC
I guess, that just doesn't go as well with the other headers, which is fine.

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Re: OK tyresias June 22 2008, 21:12:34 UTC
I've changed it back. And posted the latest version. And with that I'm going to enjoy the sunshine. Thank you again!

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