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[parthenope_sing]

The Best Laid Plans
SHINee - Onkey
1166 words; NC-17
It's not about a lack of control, because they know exactly what they're doing.

Comments

[romanticgraze]

ILU. I'M GOING TO READ NOW.

[romanticgraze]

OMFG AND YOU DON'T WRITE ANY KISSING?!?

*INCOHERENT*

[scylladakylla]

... Yeah I kind of took a plunge off the deep end, didn't I. :||||

[romanticgraze]

Okay so after reading this a few more time i'm going to make an actually comment on this lol.

Made bad jokes, laughed at his own ridiculous mistakes. Kibum flirted outrageously with Jonghyun, fussed over Taemin, struggled to get a reaction out of Minho, ignored Jinki
SO THEM. UGH.

You make this all believable, as in how it just happened and they don't say anything they just do it. The way they hide everything. From making sure they go on their lives the same way. Idek, but I love this fic. It's heartbreaking ;____;

AND OMG YOU INCLUDED JUNGSU /CRIES JGKSDKJGA

The last paragraph UGH. ♥

[hyungdeul]

i think i just died a little inside. MORE ONKEY FROM YOU IS LIKE CHRISTMAS COME EARLY. ♥

this was so them and i could clearly picture everything in my head, from the first moment they kissed to the rushed make-out sessions and finally the end. oh god, the end. i'm tempted to say that an alternative ending would be all-out porn (*_*!!!) but that would probably disrupt the beautiful flow of the story. fkskfjsklfjl

Kibum made a little noise that was something like surprise, something like yes, God, finally, and then his fingers curled into Jinki’s shirt and pulled him closer. His mouth opened, and his tongue was warm and slick against Jinki’s own. In the background, another zombie’s head got blown off with a shotgun.
dies this is such a great image, i don't even -

“I-I think about you all the time,” Jinki confessed one time he was jerking Kibum off in a supply closet

“I do too,” Kibum breathed a few days later, when they were scrambling to undo each other’s belts
taking days to reply back is so key. and in the heat of the moment, too

[scylladakylla]

Cries, thank you. ♥ I... should really learn how to branch out into other pairings. :||| I wish other pairings would give me as many plot bunnies as Onkey does... ;_;

I was worried that this would pretty much be like... all sex and not enough characterization, so I'm glad you actually thought they were portrayed decently.

Thank you again, I'm glad you enjoyed. ♥

[hyungdeul]

i have the same problem with suju, i can't seem to write anything else other than my main otp :(. but with you all i can say is PLEASE. DON'T STOP. KEEP THE ONKEY COMING. you're one of the few great onkey writers and i would love to see those many plot bunnies concretized someday! T_T ♥

[scylladakylla]

Cries. From what I know about guys (you're much better equipped to say whether this is true or not), almost all of them are just... really horny. Almost all the time. :| I imagine it must be worse when they don't even get to have normal lives and normal relationships.

And yes, this was kind of meant to... try to show the actual effort and work that would go into having a private, sexual relationship? Because I feel like it's so easy to write the "oh everyone's okay with the gay" atmosphere in fic (I do it all the time), but that... really would not be okay IRL.

And I just think Key secretly likes the sappy talk, as much as he would deny it. XD

Thank you! ♥

[scylladakylla]

Yes, I've found that even the guys who don't act perverted still kind of are. They just show it less in public. :|

This fic kind of came about because I was talking to a friend about how sex isn't something that just happens in the heat of the moment. (I mean, unless it's a one night stand and/or you're really drunk, I guess, but. People usually end up regretting those.) There has to be some sort of thought process or planning that goes into it, especially if, you know, they're famous and in a society that is still really conservative regarding the topic of homosexuality and all that.

I don't know if I should write a sequel? I feel like it might be better to leave it as is, kind of up in the air whether they get caught or not. Because if there was a sequel, yes, they would either break it off (and yeah, Onew would initiate that) or, even worse, they would get caught. And that would just be depressing to write. D:

[nautisch]

before I say anything, HAPPY BIRTHDAY~ because I'm a bad person and I had midterms and I kept forgetting to tell you. :( but I liked how very subtle this whole fic was, it felt as secretive as Onkey were. :3 I can't believe I'm making a cat face at a smut fic, what the heck.

“I-I think about you all the time,” Jinki confessed one time
:3 :3 :3 :3 :3

[scylladakylla]

B'awwwww, thank you! :D ♥♥♥ Don't worry about it, midterms are terrible, terrible things that suck up your time and make you cry. D:

Cries at the cat faces. But I'm glad you thought it was subtle! It was meant to be, but I kept re-reading it and going, "............ This isn't subtle at all, wtf."

Also, guh, your icon. Key is so hot in that teaser. *-*

[nautisch]

ikr? apparently they're affecting fangirls everywhere, since not a lot of fangirls went to music bank this week. or so I've read. :\

lol his smirk is my favorite part of the teaser, I'm not gonna lie. :DDD

[andified]

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They don't have to stopppppp.
I lovelovelovelove onkey, please write more :)
(and from the other comments,Ibelievewesharethesamebirthday?)
Thank youuuu

[scylladakylla]

XD I will probably keep writing Onkey, yes.

My birthday was on the 12th? :)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. ♥