Comments | paraderoute: "where love is the basis of all things" Ron/Ginny, PG

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"where love is the basis of all things" Ron/Ginny, PG

Apr 02, 2006 15:49

Title: where love is the basis of all things
Ship: R/Hr, R/G
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~660
Warnings: light/implied incest
Summary: She knows you still have those dreams, where the sky is black and the war doesn't end.

( the clouds meeting the melting sun )

ron/ginny (light), ron/hermione

Comments 9

happiestwhen April 2 2006, 20:33:49 UTC

Awwww, I like this! I really like the dream-reality and the haze of after-war. This has such a nice melancholy tone to it! And I am especially fond of this line: Everything is upwards.

One thing, though, this is from Ron's POV, right? Because I think there is a waffle in iii. with Ron drops the plastic pitcher of juice and his plate is filled with orange liquid. Or am I just getting confused? :P

♥

mondayagain April 2 2006, 20:41:11 UTC

♥!

Oops, you're right. It is Ron's POV. I should change that. :D

ohmygiddyaunt April 5 2006, 01:31:35 UTC

*INCOHERENT* sdjgadhfgd;fhlgfsgjhsfg

mondayagain April 5 2006, 12:53:36 UTC

gahhiloveyousomuch! :">

mickawber April 5 2006, 02:10:31 UTC

It's funny--Ron/Ginny is my car-crash ship. It makes me go Ewwwwwww.... but I read the silly things. XD

And this one isn't really Ron/Ginny... till the last two paragraphs. But the last paragraphs...!

This is so sad and lovely, and poor Ron and Ginny are soooo wounded...

And the ending is wonderful, language and thought, but...

Car crash. XD

Hey! And very ambitious trying out the second person PoV! It generally works best with a narrator character who is highly alienated. Which Ron certainly is here.

(It also does a wonderful job of hiding the narrator's identity until that car-crash bit. Hee.)

kenboy April 5 2006, 03:31:15 UTC

Haha, I'm amused by your comment, for a couple of reasons.

First, I tend to do this thing where I intentionally obscure the identity of the protagonist until somewhere a ways into the fic, so I always have an appreciation of others doing it as well, but second, and either amusingly or disturbingly depending on your point of view: when the protagonist is obscured, but Ginny is obviously involved with the protagonist, I sort of just assume it's Ron from the beginning.

Whoops.

mondayagain April 5 2006, 20:45:01 UTC

Car crash, indeed! :>

I love Ron/Ginny because it's so forbidden, and so many metaphors can be used and parallels drawn, and it's so angst-ridden and dark..!

I also love second person, simply because I happen to think in it a lot of the time. XD Seriously. I think in second-person POV.

But I'm glad you read and thought it was lovely, even if R/G is your car-crash ship. :)

kenboy April 5 2006, 03:25:08 UTC

Yeah, I liked this a lot. Sorry it took me utterly forever to remember to read it, but me and fic reading aren't getitng along lately.

The parenthetical bits are most excellent.

mondayagain April 5 2006, 12:55:05 UTC

thank you so much!

i enjoyed writing the parenthetical parts most. teehee!