How's My Driving?

Jan 16, 2010 21:28

This is my first time with Mei. Usually, I'm with the unpleasant boys like Byakuya, so your opinions are greatly appreciated! Thank you!

hmd

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marked_songbird January 26 2010, 15:17:22 UTC
Hi there!

I can't really say much about Byakuya and Mei's characterizations, since I only know their canons in passing, but I've just noticed something that I wanted to comment on, so I hope you don't mind if I do it here.

In our thread over in Oruha's post, I'm finding it a little difficult to reply to Mei's last comment as the "Thank you very much" seems to be a little final, and kind of closes the conversation without all that much being discussed.

I'm not sure if that's intentional or not, but if it's not, it's a little hard to think of something to reply if I don't have much to tag back with, if that makes sense.

I was actually hoping for the thread to go on a bit more so they could discuss things or for them to get to know each other better somewhat especially when there's still some potential there for more conversation.

It isn't so much in what Mei says either. With her words, you can get the feeling that she's sweet, and Oruha would like to get to know her more, but there isn't much of an opening for that.

If there were maybe more description about how she says the things she does (if she's cheerful all throughout, confident, hesitant, nervous, etc.), then Oruha (or whoever she's tagging with) could perhaps take cues from that and the thread can go on longer. I'm not saying you should do it all the time, in every tag, but it could help foster more interaction and CR.

I really hope you don't take this the wrong way or anything. I'd really love to build more CR with Mei (and Byakuya if he ever catches Oruha's attention), and I just thought I'd mention it here.

Sorry for the rambling, and thanks for taking the time to read this! o>

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pandamaiden January 26 2010, 22:29:47 UTC
No, no, it's quite all right! I really do appreciate the time you took to help me and I totally understand where you're coming from. I'll do my best to keep it in mind and incorporate it.

We can still continue it, if you'd like. I can redo that post for you.

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marked_songbird January 26 2010, 23:21:08 UTC
No problem. I'm glad you're taking it so well. (I grew a little nervous about posting it, actually, when I saw how tl;dr it'd gotten, ahaha. ;;)

No, that's okay. We can just pick up where they left off next time. That way they'll have a lot more to discuss. /o/

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pandamaiden January 27 2010, 02:16:20 UTC
xD Don't be worried. I'm happy to hear it. It helps me improve. I really do appreciate you taking the time to point out things like that. I'm very friendly and receptive and you were very kind. You can tell me anything.

Understood! I'll do my best!

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