✈.002 collection of happiness; three drabbles

[paintingseas]

collection of happiness
g; 400 words total
three onew/taemin drabbles to bring sunshine into the world.
note: i signed up for seouldout and i guess this is just me practicing. hope you all enjoy them! for me, ontae is like my own personal sunshine.

Comments

[ex_jennchii487]

Wow,
.001- Onew's explanation about how he gets back to Taemin is so cute and it made my heart flutter lightly. I feel like Onew could follow his heart and get back to Taemin, even if he doesn't know left from right. Love makes people do strange things, Onew is no exception.

.002 - I really liked the comparison between Taemin's eyes and fireflies. It was beautiful. Now that you mention it, Taemin really does have eyes that light up, the description really works.

.003 - This one was just so cute, and it's weird how that works. Instead of finding the stars and the sun in another town again, he finds them in a person. I love your descriptions.

[paintingseas]

they seriously do, i'm convinced taemin's eyes are magical. thank you for reading!

[ikui]

First of all your drabbles are beautiful. A lot of the time I struggle to read any because I find 100 or so words very difficult for people to express any ideas fully, but you do it well.

The first drabble is my favourite I must say though. I love those romantic ideas where there is no real logic but just some inherent intuition. :)

The second one is sweetly adorable, and the last one kind of fills my heart with happy lol. THANK YOU FOR THE ONTAE! Haha /scurries off

[paintingseas]

aw thank you! i'm so pleased you like them ♥ ontae is magic, huhuhuu

i'm glad you think i can write them well~

[vaneszikkipower]

I loved them all!
So cute.
I love their interactions there.

[paintingseas]

thank you so much! i'm glad you enjoyed these ^-^

[salted_taiyaki]

damn it can't read right now but i'll def. get back to this
spottt ♥ so much ontae i can't even lskf

[salted_taiyaki]

all right time to comment
ughh oh my god they were all SO adorable. i enjoyed the first lines of each drabble; and i tend to look at them with much interest, because i love strong beginnings. and each one was so perfect lkjsdf gah, i'm just, idek
i'm dying from the cuteness of it all.
the first one might be my favorite though ♥ typical onew.

[paintingseas]

thank you very much for this! if you don't mind me asking, whats the weakest point of my drabbles, because i want to improve them.

he is so sweet, i love onew, he's such a sunshine ♥

[salted_taiyaki]

aw man well drabbles, imo, are really hard to crit because they're just supposed to be short... I mean from what i can tell, you're very good at condensing your words to get your point across! i mean there's not much room for you to actually try and reach out to improve because it's so...limited? imo ha ha. Your drabbles are short and express a lovely tone, idk what to help you with! [also I'm flustered because I didn't think anyone would ask me for help lksjdf ;; !!] sorry I can't be of much help... maybe when I'm in more of a critiquing mood? aha /lame

he is he is ♥

[volatileflame]

they were lovely

[paintingseas]

thank you!