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orange_crushed

Charmbreaker

Oct 27, 2005 09:47

If I say anything it'll come out wrong, and I'll be trying to explain this all day*, so instead without any ado whatsoever:

*(This was based on a challenge for remus_reads, #31- Remus is forced to leave school after the Prank. I feel this should be mentioned, and I encourage everyone to check out that community for other authors' work.)

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Wow.. that is a random AU jazzypom October 27 2005, 09:15:43 UTC

You have a nice story with some delicious lines, nice lines. The one that jumps out at me is this one;

She laughs and laughs, and doesn't stop. Remus is reminded why he loves her. Quietly, in the way that one loves flowers and good china; and other beautiful things.

This story is very good, shades of HBP, The Prank, the vestiages of canon that we know, but spliced with a bit of what could have been, would have been. Alot of ifs, and you make them work beautifully.

I can see why you couldn't explain it though - Remus and Sirius and Regulus and the chances and choices and alternate universes.

Nice one.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU orange_crushed October 27 2005, 09:48:08 UTC

I should have mentioned that it was done for a challenge at Remus-read; so now I have at the top. Thank you for making me think of that.

Anyway, I really appreciate what you've said. I love that line about Lily, too, she's harder to pin down as a character than I thought (often she's written super-tough, or super-sweet, and so many characters adore her that you really have to start thinking- why exactly ?)

So. Thank you very much.

And dude, I am a lame-o ! I've read your Changeling story like four times and haven't formed a coherant review yet ! I swear to you that it is coming. I really enjoyed it.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU super_pan October 27 2005, 10:42:57 UTC

she's harder to pin down as a character than I thought (often she's written super-tough, or super-sweet, and so many characters adore her that you really have to start thinking- why exactly ?)

About Lily, yeah, it's hard to make her interesting or likable, but your Lily was awesome, but still sort of a cipher, which was cool. I feel really lame trying to tell you how really great this story is, but the one thing that I can identify is how you can make something bittersweet, realistic (you know what I mean by realistic!), yet still hopeful. Anyway, that was awesome, and I'd love to read more, either a continuation, or fill in the cracks story.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU jazzypom October 27 2005, 10:57:56 UTC

When I was thinking about the way I wanted to tell it, I needed a second voice besides Remus's to fill things in, and Lily was the only one who fit. So, hoorah !

Thank you very much for the niceness. And there's definitely going to be more from this little universe. I want to talk about Snape, and how Sirius went with his brother, and.... yeah. Hmm. So, we'll see what happens.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU the_grynne October 27 2005, 17:14:25 UTC

I want to talk about Snape, and how Sirius went with his brother, and.... yeah.

YAY!

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU orange_crushed October 28 2005, 06:54:55 UTC

I knew this wouldn't get past you. ;)

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU the_grynne October 28 2005, 06:57:53 UTC

SO PREDICTABLE am I. :)

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU orange_crushed October 28 2005, 07:44:45 UTC

BWAH !

I am going to tie a piece of paper with a string on one end that says OMFG SECRET SIRIUS AU on it and drag it down the street, a la the dollar bill trick, and see who follows.

Unfortunately I'd have to figure out a way to be both holding the string and chasing the paper, which puts us in the same damn boat, my dear. :)

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU the_grynne October 28 2005, 07:52:11 UTC

Ah. Well for that noble purpose, I will offer my geriatric german shepherd, Wolf. Who can still do a mean sprint if you sit him in the middle of a road and run a car by him (he'll chase the car).

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU orange_crushed October 28 2005, 08:27:27 UTC

Ha !

Good dog.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU orange_crushed October 27 2005, 10:58:48 UTC

Also, I'm a dummy. That's me above.

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU super_pan October 27 2005, 11:16:05 UTC

Yay!

Re: Wow.. that is a random AU celbalrai October 29 2005, 08:24:25 UTC

Wow, that's really well written. It was like, aw, poor Remus! Bad, bad Sirius etc.

With Lily, I tend to think of her as like Hermione if she had been born into the Weasley family. Clever, but also quite popular, more relaxed about life, that sorta thing. And, of course with red hair. That might sound a bit like Ginny, but definately with more hints of Hermione.

Does that make sense?

Congrats! jazzypom October 27 2005, 16:46:18 UTC

Your story was recced on hogwarts_today.

I've read your Changeling story like four times and haven't formed a coherant review yet ! I swear to you that it is coming. I really enjoyed it.

Ahhh... bless. Thanks for saying that. It was an odd story with an odd pairing (Tonks/Fleur) and I'm glad that it got as much comments as it did, to be honest.

Re: Congrats! orange_crushed October 28 2005, 06:58:47 UTC

Yay, thank you !!!

I saw it up on daily_snitch, but I couldn't find it on HT. I suck at finding anyway.

Really, you did so much work fitting it into the HBP universe, it's mind-boggling. It's a difficult pairing, and you made it work- we'll never be friends was a tough truth.

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