drawstrings [oneshot]
Title: drawstrings
Author: salted_taiyaki
Pairing(s): Onew x Jonghyun x Key
Genre: Romance, Smut?
Rating: R
Word Count: 1917
Summary: jinki's got it all under control (or, he assumes).
a/n: i suck. ofc when i say smut it never really is smut.
( and, oh, the look of pure something, a mishmash of confusion, shock, fear, and the ever-prevailing lust, yes )
Author: salted_taiyaki
Pairing(s): Onew x Jonghyun x Key
Genre: Romance, Smut?
Rating: R
Word Count: 1917
Summary: jinki's got it all under control (or, he assumes).
a/n: i suck. ofc when i say smut it never really is smut.
( and, oh, the look of pure something, a mishmash of confusion, shock, fear, and the ever-prevailing lust, yes )
but when jinki actually stumbles a bit as he takes off his socks-"fuck," he kind of giggles to himself and kibum can't help but chuckle himself-jonghyun corrects himself. it's not arrogance, it's just desperation.
I sort of giggled when I read this line, too-but I think my biggest prevailing thought on the matter was about how impossibly Jinki this was somehow. XD He’s all good & cool when he slips into the room, all smooth-like, and then he starts tripping all over himself when it gets down to the big moment…
(I wonder if this was part of the ‘shift in character’ you wanted readers to notice…?)
he whispers, "here," then directs kibum's thin, pretty hands down down until they're behind the boy and skirting taught skin. kibum rolls his eyes. but of course.
ONKEYYYYYYYYYYY this is definitely the kind of reaction/interaction I love most about these two \;u;\ IDEK why these more ‘cute’ moments between all the steamy moments get to me the most ahahahaha but yeahhhhh @w@;;
AND THEN YOU SLOWLY KILL ME WITH THE PARTS AFTER THAT, ESPECIALLY THE JONGYU PARTS (you really need to stop reading my mind and make me love my recent new pairing love even more than I already do klsna’gkg;/nask)
I-I seriously don’t even want to try and pick out the lines that stood out to me from the next section-not because I’m lazy or anything, but there’s just…no way I could quoteback the entire thing without this comment getting any longer than it already is. /flails
Although…
(perhaps,) …
(he just never had the control in the first place.
maybe it was all in vain; maybe the easier way is simply the better way.)
Just so you know, though, I loved these parenthetical asides ;O; It’s the perfect way to punctuate all those ‘intense’ moments and give the kind of depth I find smut writing seems to lack the most these days…
(Ahhh, or is *this* the shift in Jinki’s character you wanted us to note…)
jinki groans as the bubbling in the pit of his stomach intensifies and his thrusts up harder, sharp, exact, just to draw out the hitching cries that jonghyun babbles whenever he loses himself. "jonghyun," kibum's voice rides along with the creaks and groans of jinki's bed, "feel good, baby?" and jonghyun whines, "shit, yeah."
THIS MADE ME LITERALLY SQUEAK OUT LOUD and I think I got a weird look or two from my parents from that sklfnmaskg/png;
(I really, really love the images that come with this, ESPECIALLY KIBUM IN CONTROL, SO TO SPEAK \#w#/)
Last thing before I stop babbling to you about how much I loved this (as if you couldn’t tell already /facepalms), I still owe you a seriously good fic, don’t I? I mean, besides the JongYu drabble I wrote for you a little while ago… Basically, since this fic has pretty much made me a flailtastic idiot from the first line (heck, from the summary, I KNEW THIS WOULD BE GREAT ;w;),
I’ll be absolutely sure to get that fic to you by the end of the week, okay? *^*
A-And if you want anything in particular added to it (I already have a few ideas /laughs but I figure I might as well ask…), feel free to let me know before the week’s end and I’ll be sure to deliver, alright? ^^
Once again, YOU ARE AMAZING and I enjoyed reading this piece immensely. It’s been a pleasure as always, Angie-darling. I love youuuuuuuuu ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Oh, and finally (now that I’m slowly going through my tweets again…): I’m sorry I made your mom flip out over my spazztastic initial reaction ;A;!! That was SERIOUSLY the first words that came to mind when I finished readinggggggggggsgdln agajlkg/m I’m sorryyyyyyyyyyyy /;^;/clings
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AHAH oh don't worryyyy my mom is just...yeah xD;;;
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