When I read through this poem, I instantly thought of a wedding for the obvious reasons. I envisioned an anterage of women all giddy with anticipation as they prepare for the wedding, the bride to be pretending to be exstatic... and then she's left alone to add the finishing touches on herself before walking down the isle. Then her depression reveals itself and she begins cutting to escape her fiancee (the one in the "black of night" tux). I assumed that the husband had at some point cheated on her and she later forgave him. Then right before she dies, she realizes that she never did truely forgive him and never truely wanted to get back together with him.
So, this one obviously created a rather elaborate story in my mind as I read through it which was very appreciated. This style of poetry seems to fit you well as you have used it multiple times before. Short, quick, rythmatic chants. I don't have any "constructive critisism" to offer you on this one, sorry :/
Overall, I'd say it's about a 7.75 . Really good poem, but I think my favorite piece of yours will always be the ring one :p
So, this one obviously created a rather elaborate story in my mind as I read through it which was very appreciated. This style of poetry seems to fit you well as you have used it multiple times before. Short, quick, rythmatic chants. I don't have any "constructive critisism" to offer you on this one, sorry :/
Overall, I'd say it's about a 7.75 . Really good poem, but I think my favorite piece of yours will always be the ring one :p
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And that will always be my problem XD.
I'm still flattered about how much you like the Ring one, though. ^__^
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