Umm... I hate to say it since I guess I will be taking the devil's role and making you "dissolve into tears" and I know your mom already told you this so I will be in even worse shape but your objective could really use work.
It doesn't actually say anything at the moment, what I mean by that is I could take your objective statement and put it at the top of my resume and send it to the places that I would like to work and it would make just as much sense as it does on your resume. Given that I am into technical stuff and you are looking for theater I don't think that's a good thing. At the most recent career workshop I attended, one of the speakers said that the objective section is the most important part of the resume since 90% of the time the recruiter will only give each resume about 10 seconds and if the objective isn't very appealing then they won't read on. He said that an objective should be specific about what kind of job you want to do without mentioning the company name. Basically they want to see that you know what you are getting into and that you will be motivated to work hard at it.
From your current objective I have no idea what kind of job you want nor an impression that you know. This isn’t very good but even something like “A position in a team oriented theater organization where creativity, communication, technical skills and a strong work ethic would be assets” would be a step in the right direction I think.
A much more minor note, under “TECHNICAL KNOWLEDGE” I don’t think you need to list all of the components of MS Office (unless someone has already told you otherwise), anyone who cares should know themselves. There should also probably be commas before “Mac OS” and between “LabanWriter” and “Linux” and instead of “Mac OS” it would probably be better to say “OS X” since that’s what it’s called now.
Sorry to be harsh love. Call me on the cell phone and vent if you need to. Love you.
to late. As for the objective, this particular position is rather vague, so I was having more than a little trouble being specific about it, but I'm not going to worry to hard, Dad thinks I wrote a pretty decent cover letter. And I feel rather dishonest stating in my resume that I really want to work at a design company. I don't care, I want to work somewhere that I'll be able to make enoug at and go to school at the same time. anyways. And I put Mac OS because I can work with older versions, up to a point as well as OS X. I suppose they probably are pretty much all OS X, that they have some way of making you update it. whatever. I'm not worrying though, I already sent it in. Love you.
It doesn't actually say anything at the moment, what I mean by that is I could take your objective statement and put it at the top of my resume and send it to the places that I would like to work and it would make just as much sense as it does on your resume. Given that I am into technical stuff and you are looking for theater I don't think that's a good thing. At the most recent career workshop I attended, one of the speakers said that the objective section is the most important part of the resume since 90% of the time the recruiter will only give each resume about 10 seconds and if the objective isn't very appealing then they won't read on. He said that an objective should be specific about what kind of job you want to do without mentioning the company name. Basically they want to see that you know what you are getting into and that you will be motivated to work hard at it.
From your current objective I have no idea what kind of job you want nor an impression that you know. This isn’t very good but even something like “A position in a team oriented theater organization where creativity, communication, technical skills and a strong work ethic would be assets” would be a step in the right direction I think.
A much more minor note, under “TECHNICAL KNOWLEDGE” I don’t think you need to list all of the components of MS Office (unless someone has already told you otherwise), anyone who cares should know themselves. There should also probably be commas before “Mac OS” and between “LabanWriter” and “Linux” and instead of “Mac OS” it would probably be better to say “OS X” since that’s what it’s called now.
Sorry to be harsh love. Call me on the cell phone and vent if you need to. Love you.
Dan
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